One Piece: Bound For Glory - Chapter 10 Part 1
I've just started school, and as this is my final year, things are going to be a bit hectic. I'll try to update as regularly as I can, but I really can't promise anything.
On the other hand, I have the most racist, ignorant, and sexist principal ever born. I hate my school.
Disclaimer: One Piece: Bound For Glory is written by Inhuman X, and can be found here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7143147/1/One_Piece_Bound_For_Glory. I did not write the story, I have far better taste, and I do not claim credit for it. One Piece is owned by Oda Eichiro. No copyright infringement is intended and no profit is being made from this sporking. This is a project undertaken for the sole purpose of entertainment.
Fandom: One Piece
Summary: A bunch of people get enslaved by the protagonist and the Stuthor displays very clearly why an intelligence test should be required before people are given the right to post online.
Rating of Fic: T
Warning for Spork: Foul language, very, very mild subtext between two male characters.
Sporkers: Brian and William
You sat there, staring at the strand of hair, your thoughts in utter chaos. Tentatively, you reach out and touch it, not quite believing that it was there. What did this mean? There had obviously been someone here before, other than you or Brian…You recall the voice from the megaphone mentioning ‘other sporker groups’. What do you do?
I wake Brian up…actually, he shouldn’t be asleep yet. It’s only been a few minutes, hasn’t it?
I grumble at him.
I show him the hair and explain to him my realisation: there had been other sporking groups here before, and they’ve left physical evidence of their presence. This tells us that whoever kidnapped us does not monitor the resting room closely, and doesn’t clean it that often either. We can use this loophole to contact other sporking groups.
‘What would you do that for? I mean, it’s not like they can take down the voice! If they could, they would have done it a long time ago.’
‘More people means more brain power and it’s obvious that, close to omnipotent the voice may be, it’s not omniscient. If they were here longer than us, they had to have noticed other clues. If we get our head together, we might find a way to trick whoever it is out there.’
‘Well, how do you plan to contact them, then?’
‘There’s plenty of paper around.’ I gesture at the bookcase. ‘We just need a pen…during the next sporking session, we’ll have to find an excuse to ask for a writing apparatus.’
‘If all else fails, we can always use tomato sauce from the pasta and the tine of a fork.’ I offer. ‘What kind of message should be leave?’
‘It can’t be too long, since we’ll need to fit it onto a small piece of paper that we can hide around here…that reminds me, we have to find a place to hide a note that will be obvious, but not too obvious. We don’t want the kidnapper noticing, but we can’t risk the other teams not seeing it either. Probably tell them we’re kidnapped here like they are, and tell them to try and convey to us any information they have…’
I feel excitement flutter in my chest. ‘That’s brilliant! Wow! It’s like those nifty spy games kids play these days!’
I glare at him, dirtily.
‘Well, now that we finally have a battle plan, can I go back to sleep now?’
‘There’s not much point, is there? We only have half an hour, and there’s less than twenty minutes left. I doubt you’ll get much sleeping done.’
I pout at him.
I punch him.
The rest of the half-hour passes as you two sit around in the resting room, occasionally making quips at each other. Though you both try to appear normal, as to not raise the suspicions of the kidnapper, you are both quite fidgety. You are far too aware that you are going up against something far more powerful than you have ever seen, and that this plan is far from perfect. Just the thought of not executing it perfectly makes your stomach churn. The twenty minutes stretch into eternity, such that you are almost certain that at least two hours had passed by the time the megaphone finally blared into life with an energetic, ‘Hey sporkers!’ You start but manage to calm yourselves. ‘Your resting period is over, please come back into the sporking chamber!’
I walk out first, back straight and muscles tense, apprehension building in my stomach.
I follow behind, worried more about him than the mission.
Chapter 10: Time to Get Serious!
Brian: Dude! It’s the tenth bloody chapter! You’re 20% through your fic, and you’re just getting serious NOW? Seriously, are you admitting that you put no effort into the first nine chapters at all?
The Voice: *Laughs hysterically* You’re so cute. You actually expect him to start making an effort.
William: If mass-murder, enslavement, sexual harassment, and cold-blooded torture is just the main characters warming up, I shudder to think what will happen now.
"You know it wasn't nice to just let me find a way to pay for that dinner you guys." David pouted.
William: Yes, how dare they demand you pay for food which you haven’t earned. After all, they should be throwing themselves at your feet, vying to be the one to get the honour of satisfying your appetite.
Brian: Excuse me? YOU are the bloody CAPTAIN! What did you expect your crew to do? If you didn’t have money, then why would they? You control the fucking finances! Were you expecting them to sell themselves as slaves so you can enjoy a dinner? You crew is every bit as poor as you! And you were the one whining about being hungry! It was your fucking idea to go into a restaurant! YOU HAVE RESPONSIBILITY! YOU HAVE TO TAKE CARE OF YOUR OWN MESS! YOU PAY FOR WHAT YOU TOOK! It isn’t very fucking nice of you to demand them take on your responsibility! If you really hate paying money that much, then relinquish the fucking duty of Captain! You’re not doing anything a Captain should be doing anyways!
William: And why would you not have money? You just defeated a Shichibukai who was looting money all around East Blue! If you took the time to steal a boat from him, then why did you refrain from touching his money? It’s not like he will be using it!
The Voice: AND STOP WITH THE FUCKING POUTING! It was cute when Luffy did it because he was a naïve kid chasing after his dream! It’s not fucking cute when your Avatar does it because he’s a mass-murdering psychopath who smiles when he tortures his fucking victims!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 1 (For not taking money that was RIGHT THERE. And no, don’t tell me it’s because he has strong morals. Have you even been reading this sporking?)
SOCIOPATHY: 1 (For not even considering that, since he ate the food, he should probably take responsibility for it.)
"You ate the whole menu!
Brian: Dude! You’re in a freaking restaurant! You can eat whatever you like! Why would you choose to eat freaking PAPER?
We didn't have anything!" Chase barked.
William: If you didn’t have ANYTHING, then why would it matter how much he ate? In fact, if you knew you had no money, why would you go to a restaurant? Okay, you might still go to check your chances, but in the last chapter, NO ONE was worried at all about possibly not getting food at a restaurant. It was just assumed that you would get to eat. That is not how people with nary a cent in their pockets act!
The Voice: I notice that the word ‘barked’ is always used to describe Chase’s dialogue when he is criticising David, no matter how valid the criticism may be. So, whenever he points out the abundant flaws of the main Avatar, he gets dehumanised. He literally gets reduced to the level of an animal. How lovely.
Brian: And nice try there plagiarising the appetite of Luffy, except IT DOESN’T FUCKING WORK. Luffy eats a lot because he is LITERALLY MADE OUT OF RUBBER. He can stretch his stomach to whatever size he wants to, in order to stuff in more food. David is HUMAN. He has NO POWERS. There is no way he can possibly fit the entire content of a restaurant menu down! And even freaking Luffy had PREFERENCES! Why would you eat everything in the menu when there are bound to be things there that you won’t like? Most especially, the reason you went to the restaurant was because you were HUNGRY. So why don’t you satisfy your hunger and then LEAVE? It doesn’t take much to feed a human being. You should have been full after two courses! But you stayed there and ate more! Why?
The only reason I can possibly come up with is that, despite knowing that you had no money, you were stuffing food you can’t contain down your throat, even if you will inevitably vomit it up later, just because YOU CAN. And you wasted the few resources you had in order to do so. Did you crew even eat at all, or did you just snatch up all the food? I feel like I’m not going to like the answer.
And what’s more, after you have done so, you fully expect YOUR CREW to pay for your meal, DESPITE KNOWING THAT YOU HAD NO MONEY. You were completely okay with giving your crew over to a restaurant so that they can work off the bills, which you created for shits and giggles, for absolutely no reason. In fact, you are angry when they rightfully flipped you off and told you to take care of your own mess.
YOU ARE A FREAKING CAPTAIN. YOU ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR YOUR CREW. YOU ARE NOT MEANT TO BE USING THEM AS SLAVE LABOUR. THEY HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH YOU EATING. THEY HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH YOUR IDIOCY. YOU BROUGHT THIS ON YOURSELF. WHAT THE FUCK DOES THIS HAVE TO DO WITH YOUR CREW AT ALL?
William: Despite the amount of shit he subjects them to, it’s interesting that not one of his crew ever tries to leave him. Sure, he’s made it abundantly clear that they are powerless against him, and has taken great pains to utterly dominate them…but they don’t even try.
Look, Luffy’s crew put up with some of his shit because they knew he was a genuinely compassionate person. And also because his shit wasn’t nearly as bad as your shit. He helped them overcome a major obstacle in the pursuit of their dreams. They know he wouldn’t hesitate to lay down his life for them. And the minor trouble he gets into is relatively harmless, and he always takes FUCKING RESPONSIBILITY FOR THEM!
Why does David’s crew put up with him? They outnumber him! He has treated them with nothing but contempt! Not once in this fic has he ever thought about them! He never even thought of them as goddamned people! They were tools to him, weapons, to be collected if they are strong and destroyed if they are weak! Why the fuck would they still stay loyal to him?
PEOPLE ARE NOT POKEMON! THEY DO NOT AUTOMATICALLY BECOME DEATHLY LOYAL THE MINUTE YOU BEAT THEM INTO A PULP!
SOCIOPATHY: 2 (For eating far more than he needs to get full, for kicks, apparently.)
"I was hungry!
Brian: WHY DID YOU NEED TO EAT EVERYTHING THE RESTAURANT OFFERED? YOU ARE A GODDAMNED HUMAN! TWO OR THREE COURSES SHOULD FILL YOU AMPLY! DID YOU STOP THERE, THOUGH? NO! YOU WENT ON EATING, EVEN THOUGH YOU DIDN’T NEED MORE FUCKING FOOD! THIS IS NO FUCKING EXCUSE!
William: And you are completely missing the point again! The point wasn’t how much you ate, but the fact that you refused to pay, even though almost all the expenses were caused by you! You ate too much! You made the bill too large for your crew to handle! It’s YOUR FUCKING FAULT! SO YOU FUCKING TAKE CARE OF IT!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 2 (I would give him a sociopathy point, but again, he’s just being stupid and missing the point, not really being sociopathic.)
You certianly can't cook!
Brian: WHAT DOES THAT HAVE TO DO WITH ANYTHING? Even if he could cook, he would still need to buy the raw materials! He would need all the equipment set up, as well as uncooked vegetables and meat and stuff! At the end of the day, you will still have to fucking pay for it! And it’ll probably cost more than if you ate at the restaurant, because they are cooking on a much bigger scale, so they can reduce the cost of production!
William: And what is this victim-blaming shit? So, because he can’t cook, that somehow excuses you threatening to use him as slave labour to cover the costs of your food? HE JOINED YOU AS A FIRST OFFICER! NO WHERE ON HIS JOB DESCRIPTION DOES IT SAY THAT HE WILL HAVE TO PROVIDE FUCKING FOOD FOR YOU! IT’S YOU FUCKING FAULT THAT YOU WERE TOO STUPID TO STEAL THE SHARK KING’S SUPPLIES! IT’S YOUR FUCKING FAULT THAT YOU ATE TOO MUCH! WHETHER HE CAN COOK OR NOT HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH ANYTHING! This situation is the way it is because YOU WERE AN ABSOLUTE MORON. Take up your fucking responsibility!
One Piece spent an entire fucking arc on Luffy realising that he would need to take on responsibility as a pirate Captain, and that things won’t be butterflies and sunshine all the time! It was pretty fucking hard to miss! DID YOU READ THE COMICS AT FUCKING ALL? HOW COULD YOU MISS THAT? RESPONSIBILITY! CAPTAINS HAVE TO FUCKING TAKE THEM!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 3
Riru had to keep helping me with my stomach aches!" David yelled back.
Brian: Well, she’s not doing much good, is she? Your injuries are internal, and she was wrapping it up in freaking bandages!
William: What do you mean had to ‘keep helping you’? She was treating your internal injuries like an open wound! That means she only had to come in every few hours to change your bandages! The time in between, she can cook all she likes! Or were you whining and bitching about the pain and making her stay and ‘help you relax’? SHE HAD PLENTY OF TIME TO COOK!
The Voice: And don’t you love it that the only person who can cook is the female? And the Stu basically explicitly said that the only reason she isn’t in the kitchen is because he needed her dubious skills as a doctor and even more dubious skills as a ‘comforter’?
Brian: It’s especially delicious how he pretty much admits that Riru helped his injuries heal (I have no idea how), and yet still expects her to take responsibility for his bills. He still expects her to go scrub dishes and clean floors so that he doesn’t have to discomfort himself.
William: Or how he immediately gets violent as soon as a crew member questions his actions, pointing out that he is less of a hero than he thinks. He never stops to consider whether they are right and should he change his behaviour or not. Clearly, they are wrong and must be verbally abused.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 1
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 4 (For thinking that changing bandages is a full-time job.)
SOCIOPATHY: 3
"Yeah whatever."
Brian: HE JUST INSULTED YOU. HE JUST COMPLETELY SHIRKED HIS RESPONSIBILITY. HE JUST TOLD YOU TO GO AHEAD AND WORK FOR A COMPLETE STRANGER FOR AN INDERTERMINABLE AMOUNT OF TIME, DURING WHICH YOU WILL NOT BE ABLE TO FULFILL ANY OF YOUR GOALS, BECAUSE HE FELT LIKE IT. HE JUST TOLD THE ONLY FEMALE IN HIS CREW TO STAY IN THE FUCKING KITCHEN! WHY THE FUCK ARE YOU SO CALM? WHY THE FUCK DO YOU EVEN STILL WORK FOR HIM? AT THIS POINT, I WOULD RATHER DIE THAN HAVE TO OBEY HIS ORDERS!
William: Who is even talking here anyways? Chase was barking mad a single sentence ago, and I doubt being yelled at is going to make him any calmer. And these characters talk in the exact same way, so I can’t even fucking tell. WHAT IS GOING ON HERE?
"Also the fact that Kit got me drunk doesn't help!" David glanced at Kit.
Brian: Oh, of course, it’s HER fault that you got drunk. SHE OFFERED YOU ALCOHOL, YOU COULD HAVE SAID NO! YOU COULD HAVE REFUSED! IT WAS YOUR FUCKING DECISION TO DRINK! THIS IS YOUR FUCKING FAULT!
William: And what the fuck does THAT have to do with anything? Being drunk doesn’t make you want to eat any more! It wouldn’t make you any more hungry! The problem here is that you ate too much, and you are demanding that your crew pay for the food you consumed! Whether you were intoxicated at the time doesn’t matter! What matters is that YOU HAVE A BILL TO PAY NOW, AND YOU ARE DEMANDING THAT THEY PAY FOR IT, DESPITE THE FACT THAT THEY HAVE NO FUCKING MONEY! Why is this brought up at all? WHY?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 2 (Of course, everything is the female’s fault. She tempted him into sin.)
"Sorry?" She shrugged.
Brian: DON’T APOLOGISE! You didn’t do anything wrong! You offered him a drink and HE ACCEPTED OF HIS OWN VOLITION! IT WAS HIS CHOICE! You didn’t do anything at all! In fact, even if you hadn’t offered it, I’m pretty sure he would be drinking anyways.
William: Right. At the start of the last chapter, it took his entire freaking crew walking out on his to make David apologise for NEARLY KILLING THEM ALL, and here, all it takes is a single, slightly disapproving look to make Kit immediately bow and repent her sins. All because THE STU SAID SO.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 3
"Whatever..."
William: WHO IS TALKING? If you’re going to write the characters so that they have no individual voices, at least stick a few dialogue tags in so we know what is freaking going on! You have a five-people cast now, filled with characters of the EXACT SAME FREAKING PERSONALITY! You really need to start specifying things!
Brian: And why the fuck is everyone reacting so calmly? He is selling them into slavery so that he can have a nice ice cream! He is going around and systematically insulting every goddamned one of them! Everyone is angry and tense in this situation! Accusations like that don’t warrant a reply like this! Why is everyone just shrugging and looking the other way? You can’t set up things like a giant quarrel is about to break out and just have it flop at the end! You tried to shove tension in our faces, now you have to carry through with it!
William: As if he could bare writing anyone disagreeing with his Stu. As flaws as his arguments were, as soon as he opened his mouth, all of his crew immediately bowed and conceded defeat. The Stuthor will never let any of his crew disagree with him because HE IS THE ULTIMATE JUDGE OF WHAT FLIES OR NOT AND ALL MUST ACKNOWLEDGE HIS AUTHORITY.
"So you guys...we still don't have a boat." Avery informed.
William: WHY NOT? What happened to the one you arrived in? You know, the one you sailed in from Warship Island to this one? Was it eaten up by a plothole? Do you seriously consider only using a boat once, because the Stu doesn’t deserve second-hand products?
Brian: And why is he mentioning this now? This is such awkward dialogue! The characters KNOW they don’t have a boat! Why does he feel the need to remind them? That would be like me suddenly pointing out that water is wet during the middle of a heated conversation! People don’t talk like that! If you can’t fit these information into the story smoothly, then don’t do freaking time jumps!
The Voice: And we know they don’t have a boat! The last chapter ended with David proposing to go to a restaurant, and this chapter opens with them arguing over bills! We are going to assume that they went straight to eat, instead of taking a detour and visiting some shipping yards! You don’t need to outline that for us! We actually have a brain! Unlike you.
DEPARTMENT OF REDUNDANCY DEPARTMENT: 1
"Good point." Chase nodded as he then began to think.
William: BEGAN TO THINK? You mean, he wasn’t thinking about this before? He KNEW they had no ship! He knew they would need a ship to continue their journey! And he fucking knew they Captain was too inept to ever find one on his own! Why THE FUCK wasn’t he fretting about it? And what kind of character are you writing that thinks so rarely that you need to specify that his brain is actually currently engaged?
Brian: And don’t describe it like your characters are actually even CAPABLE of thinking! That’s an insult to all multi-cellular organisms!
The Voice: Look at that ‘good point’ there! It’s clear that he’s paid absolutely no attention to the fact that they NEED A FREAKING BOAT! THEY WERE PLANNING TO HEAD FOR GRAND LINE AFTER DEFEATING THE SHARK KING, AND CHASE DIDN’T EVEN REALISE THAT THEY WOULD NEED A FUCKING BOAT! A GODDAMNED FUCKING BOAT! AND HE’S CLAIMING TO BE A PIRATE! AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 5
"I'll find one!"
Brian: (David) Yes, never mind the fact that I don’t have a single cent on me, and also have a heavy debt! I’ll find a ship and claim it as my own, since everything in this world was created for my use! Why, any shipwright will be HONOURED to have their ships serve one as magnificent as me!
David ran off leaving a dust trail behind.
William: THEY ARE IN THE CENTRE OF TOWN. Where did all the dust come from? With frequent traffic and paved roads, it’s impossible to create a dust trail! Those only happen when you are in the wild! And to create a dust trail, you need more than speed! You also need WEIGHT! It’s impossible to create a dust trail with human feet, because it covers far too small an area to stir up any dust!
Brian: *Pulls hair* And what is the POINT of giving a character super speed if a GODDAMNED NORMAL HUMAN BEING can run so fast that he create a visible dust trail in the middle of a busy town whilst doing nothing but running?
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 6
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 4 (I’m going to do this every time he nullifies a female character’s powers.)
"Ummm...does he know where to go?" Riru asked quietly as she sweatdropped.
SWEATDROP: 1
Brian: WHY DO YOU CARE? He’s just told you to stay in the freaking kitchen! He’s just told you to go ahead and be a waitress for years during the prime of your life so he can enjoy steaks and wine! Why do you care?
William: Because he’s the Author Avatar, and thus no female will ever be able to resist his charms. No matter how much he abuses her, she’ll always be there, fretting and worrying after him, because that’s her purpose in life now.
The Voice: Isn’t it nice? The former conman is now describe entirely using words like ‘quietly’ and ‘meekly’. Remember when she was assertive enough to actually fight David?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 6 (One for making her worry about David when she has no reason to, and one for applying to a female the perfect, meek, submissive, stay-in-the-kitchen stereotype.)
"Awww...Riru you're so cute!" Kit smiled
William: That is not cute. That is sickening. She is displaying exactly how broken she is after only a few days with David. She’s pretty much lost all ability to think for herself, and rotates herself around David, displaying a clear case of Stockholm Syndrome. She’s just demonstrated that she literally cannot get angry at him, cannot say what she wants…she is forced by her own psyche to always be submissive to him and never chastise him enough, even when he deserves it. In a few short days, David has trained her to be a perfect slave. You really have to wonder what his methods are.
Brian: The things is…the Stuthor is portraying this as desirable. That disgusting depiction of Riru as a weak, passive female is immediately followed by a character complimenting her. The Stuthor is saying that the only way to make people like you is acting as a slave towards his Avatar. The Stuthor is saying that this kind of behaviour is GOOD, and portraying it by making the characters who willingly submit to the Stu popular and liked. This isn’t just abusing a fictional character. This is him outright standing on a soapbox and telling all the women in the world to start pining after their abusive spouses, because that’s their role in life. That’s their purpose.
Now, do you see why I want to freaking murder this guy?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 7
as she began to hug and squeeze the life out of Riru.
The Voice: BEGAN to hug? WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT? Hugging is a single motion of circling your arms around someone! You may cling to that person for a long time, but you can’t ‘begin’ to hug, because you completely the entire motion of hugging in under a second! Why the FUCK does Kit move in slow motion at all times? Is it just that only male characters can usurp Riru’s position and claim super speed for themselves, and women must move painfully slow to demonstrate how they will always be inferior to males?
Brian: AND NONE OF THESE CHARACTER HAVE THE LEAST AMOUNT OF COMPASSION TOWARDS EACH OTHER! She never wonders whether Riru would be okay with a perfect stranger hugging her. She never thinks to lessen the force of her hug. She wants to do something, and therefore she will do it, who cares who gets hurt in the process.
William: And it’s more disgusting when you pair it together with the battered wife attitude Riru has up there. Kit is expressing attraction to Riru by hurting her. She is causing her pain as a sign of her love for her. And Riru is expected to appreciate this gesture, and Kit will never be punished for it.
I know this is a very common comedy cliché, but it is really not funny at all when the victim appears to be an utterly broken SLAVE. Stuthor, you disgust me.
The Voice: Well, we’re on the same page them. He disgusts me as well, possible more than any other Stuthor I have seen.
"Okay...Kit...please stop...I can't breath..." Riru said between each gasp of air which she desperatley needed.
The Voice: Here, do something for me. Take that little paragraph out of context and show it to your friends and ask them what do they think is happening here. I’ll tell you what they will inevitably reply: MURDER.
Stuthor, when people can mistake a scene of displays of friendship between friends for a scene of brutal murder, SOMETHING IS FUCKING WRONG.
And characters in One Piece should never have to beg their friends to spare their lives. In fact, they should never have to BEG their friends for anything at all! WHAT KIND OF ENVIRONMENT DID YOU LIVE IN THAT YOU HAD NO IDEA HOW FRIENDSHIP FUCKING WORKS? THAT YOU FIRMLY BELIEVED FRIENDS ATTEMPTED TO MURDER EACH OTHER AT REGULAR INTERVALS?
William: And just to make it even more infuriating, that line has plenty of rape parallels there too. How charming.
Brian: Maybe you don’t know, Stuthor, but strangling is not a nice thing. Oxygen deprivation does not feel nice. It is one of the most agonising deaths you could ever have. IT IS FREAKING HORRIBLE AND FRIENDS DON’T DO THAT TO EACH OTHER.
"Ummm...you need to let her go." Avery sweatdropped.
"Oh, right. Sorry Riru."
SWEATDROP: 2
William: Fascinating. So, when you friend and the girl you called cute begged you to stop doing something that she wasn’t comfortable with, you ignored her completely, because damn it, you’ll get your way whether she wants to or not. And yet when her MALE friend speaks up with a mild suggestion, you immediately comply. I don’t know what’s more disgusting. The fact that the sexual harassment victim last chapter is already sexually harassing other characters, or the fact that it takes a MALE to order her to do something. What Riru wants doesn’t matter, she has to learn to just sit there and take it. But when a MALE declares he wants something? Oh, she’d better comply immediately then.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 8
SOCIOPATHY: 4 (For the strangulation attempt.)
"Huh...huh...it's...huh...okay.."
Brian: Of course, she immediately forgives her too. She’s not allowed to hate people or protest against things she doesn’t want! Her duty is to lie back and think of England! Of course she can’t blame the people who force themselves on her! After all, this is exactly what David recruited her for!
ONOMATOPOEIAS ARE COOL: 3
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 9
Go Forward to: Chapter 10, Part 2
Go Back to: Chapter 9, Part 7
On the other hand, I have the most racist, ignorant, and sexist principal ever born. I hate my school.
Disclaimer: One Piece: Bound For Glory is written by Inhuman X, and can be found here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7143147/1/One_Piece_Bound_For_Glory. I did not write the story, I have far better taste, and I do not claim credit for it. One Piece is owned by Oda Eichiro. No copyright infringement is intended and no profit is being made from this sporking. This is a project undertaken for the sole purpose of entertainment.
Fandom: One Piece
Summary: A bunch of people get enslaved by the protagonist and the Stuthor displays very clearly why an intelligence test should be required before people are given the right to post online.
Rating of Fic: T
Warning for Spork: Foul language, very, very mild subtext between two male characters.
Sporkers: Brian and William
You sat there, staring at the strand of hair, your thoughts in utter chaos. Tentatively, you reach out and touch it, not quite believing that it was there. What did this mean? There had obviously been someone here before, other than you or Brian…You recall the voice from the megaphone mentioning ‘other sporker groups’. What do you do?
I wake Brian up…actually, he shouldn’t be asleep yet. It’s only been a few minutes, hasn’t it?
I grumble at him.
I show him the hair and explain to him my realisation: there had been other sporking groups here before, and they’ve left physical evidence of their presence. This tells us that whoever kidnapped us does not monitor the resting room closely, and doesn’t clean it that often either. We can use this loophole to contact other sporking groups.
‘What would you do that for? I mean, it’s not like they can take down the voice! If they could, they would have done it a long time ago.’
‘More people means more brain power and it’s obvious that, close to omnipotent the voice may be, it’s not omniscient. If they were here longer than us, they had to have noticed other clues. If we get our head together, we might find a way to trick whoever it is out there.’
‘Well, how do you plan to contact them, then?’
‘There’s plenty of paper around.’ I gesture at the bookcase. ‘We just need a pen…during the next sporking session, we’ll have to find an excuse to ask for a writing apparatus.’
‘If all else fails, we can always use tomato sauce from the pasta and the tine of a fork.’ I offer. ‘What kind of message should be leave?’
‘It can’t be too long, since we’ll need to fit it onto a small piece of paper that we can hide around here…that reminds me, we have to find a place to hide a note that will be obvious, but not too obvious. We don’t want the kidnapper noticing, but we can’t risk the other teams not seeing it either. Probably tell them we’re kidnapped here like they are, and tell them to try and convey to us any information they have…’
I feel excitement flutter in my chest. ‘That’s brilliant! Wow! It’s like those nifty spy games kids play these days!’
I glare at him, dirtily.
‘Well, now that we finally have a battle plan, can I go back to sleep now?’
‘There’s not much point, is there? We only have half an hour, and there’s less than twenty minutes left. I doubt you’ll get much sleeping done.’
I pout at him.
I punch him.
The rest of the half-hour passes as you two sit around in the resting room, occasionally making quips at each other. Though you both try to appear normal, as to not raise the suspicions of the kidnapper, you are both quite fidgety. You are far too aware that you are going up against something far more powerful than you have ever seen, and that this plan is far from perfect. Just the thought of not executing it perfectly makes your stomach churn. The twenty minutes stretch into eternity, such that you are almost certain that at least two hours had passed by the time the megaphone finally blared into life with an energetic, ‘Hey sporkers!’ You start but manage to calm yourselves. ‘Your resting period is over, please come back into the sporking chamber!’
I walk out first, back straight and muscles tense, apprehension building in my stomach.
I follow behind, worried more about him than the mission.
Chapter 10: Time to Get Serious!
Brian: Dude! It’s the tenth bloody chapter! You’re 20% through your fic, and you’re just getting serious NOW? Seriously, are you admitting that you put no effort into the first nine chapters at all?
The Voice: *Laughs hysterically* You’re so cute. You actually expect him to start making an effort.
William: If mass-murder, enslavement, sexual harassment, and cold-blooded torture is just the main characters warming up, I shudder to think what will happen now.
"You know it wasn't nice to just let me find a way to pay for that dinner you guys." David pouted.
William: Yes, how dare they demand you pay for food which you haven’t earned. After all, they should be throwing themselves at your feet, vying to be the one to get the honour of satisfying your appetite.
Brian: Excuse me? YOU are the bloody CAPTAIN! What did you expect your crew to do? If you didn’t have money, then why would they? You control the fucking finances! Were you expecting them to sell themselves as slaves so you can enjoy a dinner? You crew is every bit as poor as you! And you were the one whining about being hungry! It was your fucking idea to go into a restaurant! YOU HAVE RESPONSIBILITY! YOU HAVE TO TAKE CARE OF YOUR OWN MESS! YOU PAY FOR WHAT YOU TOOK! It isn’t very fucking nice of you to demand them take on your responsibility! If you really hate paying money that much, then relinquish the fucking duty of Captain! You’re not doing anything a Captain should be doing anyways!
William: And why would you not have money? You just defeated a Shichibukai who was looting money all around East Blue! If you took the time to steal a boat from him, then why did you refrain from touching his money? It’s not like he will be using it!
The Voice: AND STOP WITH THE FUCKING POUTING! It was cute when Luffy did it because he was a naïve kid chasing after his dream! It’s not fucking cute when your Avatar does it because he’s a mass-murdering psychopath who smiles when he tortures his fucking victims!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 1 (For not taking money that was RIGHT THERE. And no, don’t tell me it’s because he has strong morals. Have you even been reading this sporking?)
SOCIOPATHY: 1 (For not even considering that, since he ate the food, he should probably take responsibility for it.)
"You ate the whole menu!
Brian: Dude! You’re in a freaking restaurant! You can eat whatever you like! Why would you choose to eat freaking PAPER?
We didn't have anything!" Chase barked.
William: If you didn’t have ANYTHING, then why would it matter how much he ate? In fact, if you knew you had no money, why would you go to a restaurant? Okay, you might still go to check your chances, but in the last chapter, NO ONE was worried at all about possibly not getting food at a restaurant. It was just assumed that you would get to eat. That is not how people with nary a cent in their pockets act!
The Voice: I notice that the word ‘barked’ is always used to describe Chase’s dialogue when he is criticising David, no matter how valid the criticism may be. So, whenever he points out the abundant flaws of the main Avatar, he gets dehumanised. He literally gets reduced to the level of an animal. How lovely.
Brian: And nice try there plagiarising the appetite of Luffy, except IT DOESN’T FUCKING WORK. Luffy eats a lot because he is LITERALLY MADE OUT OF RUBBER. He can stretch his stomach to whatever size he wants to, in order to stuff in more food. David is HUMAN. He has NO POWERS. There is no way he can possibly fit the entire content of a restaurant menu down! And even freaking Luffy had PREFERENCES! Why would you eat everything in the menu when there are bound to be things there that you won’t like? Most especially, the reason you went to the restaurant was because you were HUNGRY. So why don’t you satisfy your hunger and then LEAVE? It doesn’t take much to feed a human being. You should have been full after two courses! But you stayed there and ate more! Why?
The only reason I can possibly come up with is that, despite knowing that you had no money, you were stuffing food you can’t contain down your throat, even if you will inevitably vomit it up later, just because YOU CAN. And you wasted the few resources you had in order to do so. Did you crew even eat at all, or did you just snatch up all the food? I feel like I’m not going to like the answer.
And what’s more, after you have done so, you fully expect YOUR CREW to pay for your meal, DESPITE KNOWING THAT YOU HAD NO MONEY. You were completely okay with giving your crew over to a restaurant so that they can work off the bills, which you created for shits and giggles, for absolutely no reason. In fact, you are angry when they rightfully flipped you off and told you to take care of your own mess.
YOU ARE A FREAKING CAPTAIN. YOU ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR YOUR CREW. YOU ARE NOT MEANT TO BE USING THEM AS SLAVE LABOUR. THEY HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH YOU EATING. THEY HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH YOUR IDIOCY. YOU BROUGHT THIS ON YOURSELF. WHAT THE FUCK DOES THIS HAVE TO DO WITH YOUR CREW AT ALL?
William: Despite the amount of shit he subjects them to, it’s interesting that not one of his crew ever tries to leave him. Sure, he’s made it abundantly clear that they are powerless against him, and has taken great pains to utterly dominate them…but they don’t even try.
Look, Luffy’s crew put up with some of his shit because they knew he was a genuinely compassionate person. And also because his shit wasn’t nearly as bad as your shit. He helped them overcome a major obstacle in the pursuit of their dreams. They know he wouldn’t hesitate to lay down his life for them. And the minor trouble he gets into is relatively harmless, and he always takes FUCKING RESPONSIBILITY FOR THEM!
Why does David’s crew put up with him? They outnumber him! He has treated them with nothing but contempt! Not once in this fic has he ever thought about them! He never even thought of them as goddamned people! They were tools to him, weapons, to be collected if they are strong and destroyed if they are weak! Why the fuck would they still stay loyal to him?
PEOPLE ARE NOT POKEMON! THEY DO NOT AUTOMATICALLY BECOME DEATHLY LOYAL THE MINUTE YOU BEAT THEM INTO A PULP!
SOCIOPATHY: 2 (For eating far more than he needs to get full, for kicks, apparently.)
"I was hungry!
Brian: WHY DID YOU NEED TO EAT EVERYTHING THE RESTAURANT OFFERED? YOU ARE A GODDAMNED HUMAN! TWO OR THREE COURSES SHOULD FILL YOU AMPLY! DID YOU STOP THERE, THOUGH? NO! YOU WENT ON EATING, EVEN THOUGH YOU DIDN’T NEED MORE FUCKING FOOD! THIS IS NO FUCKING EXCUSE!
William: And you are completely missing the point again! The point wasn’t how much you ate, but the fact that you refused to pay, even though almost all the expenses were caused by you! You ate too much! You made the bill too large for your crew to handle! It’s YOUR FUCKING FAULT! SO YOU FUCKING TAKE CARE OF IT!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 2 (I would give him a sociopathy point, but again, he’s just being stupid and missing the point, not really being sociopathic.)
You certianly can't cook!
Brian: WHAT DOES THAT HAVE TO DO WITH ANYTHING? Even if he could cook, he would still need to buy the raw materials! He would need all the equipment set up, as well as uncooked vegetables and meat and stuff! At the end of the day, you will still have to fucking pay for it! And it’ll probably cost more than if you ate at the restaurant, because they are cooking on a much bigger scale, so they can reduce the cost of production!
William: And what is this victim-blaming shit? So, because he can’t cook, that somehow excuses you threatening to use him as slave labour to cover the costs of your food? HE JOINED YOU AS A FIRST OFFICER! NO WHERE ON HIS JOB DESCRIPTION DOES IT SAY THAT HE WILL HAVE TO PROVIDE FUCKING FOOD FOR YOU! IT’S YOU FUCKING FAULT THAT YOU WERE TOO STUPID TO STEAL THE SHARK KING’S SUPPLIES! IT’S YOUR FUCKING FAULT THAT YOU ATE TOO MUCH! WHETHER HE CAN COOK OR NOT HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH ANYTHING! This situation is the way it is because YOU WERE AN ABSOLUTE MORON. Take up your fucking responsibility!
One Piece spent an entire fucking arc on Luffy realising that he would need to take on responsibility as a pirate Captain, and that things won’t be butterflies and sunshine all the time! It was pretty fucking hard to miss! DID YOU READ THE COMICS AT FUCKING ALL? HOW COULD YOU MISS THAT? RESPONSIBILITY! CAPTAINS HAVE TO FUCKING TAKE THEM!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 3
Riru had to keep helping me with my stomach aches!" David yelled back.
Brian: Well, she’s not doing much good, is she? Your injuries are internal, and she was wrapping it up in freaking bandages!
William: What do you mean had to ‘keep helping you’? She was treating your internal injuries like an open wound! That means she only had to come in every few hours to change your bandages! The time in between, she can cook all she likes! Or were you whining and bitching about the pain and making her stay and ‘help you relax’? SHE HAD PLENTY OF TIME TO COOK!
The Voice: And don’t you love it that the only person who can cook is the female? And the Stu basically explicitly said that the only reason she isn’t in the kitchen is because he needed her dubious skills as a doctor and even more dubious skills as a ‘comforter’?
Brian: It’s especially delicious how he pretty much admits that Riru helped his injuries heal (I have no idea how), and yet still expects her to take responsibility for his bills. He still expects her to go scrub dishes and clean floors so that he doesn’t have to discomfort himself.
William: Or how he immediately gets violent as soon as a crew member questions his actions, pointing out that he is less of a hero than he thinks. He never stops to consider whether they are right and should he change his behaviour or not. Clearly, they are wrong and must be verbally abused.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 1
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 4 (For thinking that changing bandages is a full-time job.)
SOCIOPATHY: 3
"Yeah whatever."
Brian: HE JUST INSULTED YOU. HE JUST COMPLETELY SHIRKED HIS RESPONSIBILITY. HE JUST TOLD YOU TO GO AHEAD AND WORK FOR A COMPLETE STRANGER FOR AN INDERTERMINABLE AMOUNT OF TIME, DURING WHICH YOU WILL NOT BE ABLE TO FULFILL ANY OF YOUR GOALS, BECAUSE HE FELT LIKE IT. HE JUST TOLD THE ONLY FEMALE IN HIS CREW TO STAY IN THE FUCKING KITCHEN! WHY THE FUCK ARE YOU SO CALM? WHY THE FUCK DO YOU EVEN STILL WORK FOR HIM? AT THIS POINT, I WOULD RATHER DIE THAN HAVE TO OBEY HIS ORDERS!
William: Who is even talking here anyways? Chase was barking mad a single sentence ago, and I doubt being yelled at is going to make him any calmer. And these characters talk in the exact same way, so I can’t even fucking tell. WHAT IS GOING ON HERE?
"Also the fact that Kit got me drunk doesn't help!" David glanced at Kit.
Brian: Oh, of course, it’s HER fault that you got drunk. SHE OFFERED YOU ALCOHOL, YOU COULD HAVE SAID NO! YOU COULD HAVE REFUSED! IT WAS YOUR FUCKING DECISION TO DRINK! THIS IS YOUR FUCKING FAULT!
William: And what the fuck does THAT have to do with anything? Being drunk doesn’t make you want to eat any more! It wouldn’t make you any more hungry! The problem here is that you ate too much, and you are demanding that your crew pay for the food you consumed! Whether you were intoxicated at the time doesn’t matter! What matters is that YOU HAVE A BILL TO PAY NOW, AND YOU ARE DEMANDING THAT THEY PAY FOR IT, DESPITE THE FACT THAT THEY HAVE NO FUCKING MONEY! Why is this brought up at all? WHY?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 2 (Of course, everything is the female’s fault. She tempted him into sin.)
"Sorry?" She shrugged.
Brian: DON’T APOLOGISE! You didn’t do anything wrong! You offered him a drink and HE ACCEPTED OF HIS OWN VOLITION! IT WAS HIS CHOICE! You didn’t do anything at all! In fact, even if you hadn’t offered it, I’m pretty sure he would be drinking anyways.
William: Right. At the start of the last chapter, it took his entire freaking crew walking out on his to make David apologise for NEARLY KILLING THEM ALL, and here, all it takes is a single, slightly disapproving look to make Kit immediately bow and repent her sins. All because THE STU SAID SO.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 3
"Whatever..."
William: WHO IS TALKING? If you’re going to write the characters so that they have no individual voices, at least stick a few dialogue tags in so we know what is freaking going on! You have a five-people cast now, filled with characters of the EXACT SAME FREAKING PERSONALITY! You really need to start specifying things!
Brian: And why the fuck is everyone reacting so calmly? He is selling them into slavery so that he can have a nice ice cream! He is going around and systematically insulting every goddamned one of them! Everyone is angry and tense in this situation! Accusations like that don’t warrant a reply like this! Why is everyone just shrugging and looking the other way? You can’t set up things like a giant quarrel is about to break out and just have it flop at the end! You tried to shove tension in our faces, now you have to carry through with it!
William: As if he could bare writing anyone disagreeing with his Stu. As flaws as his arguments were, as soon as he opened his mouth, all of his crew immediately bowed and conceded defeat. The Stuthor will never let any of his crew disagree with him because HE IS THE ULTIMATE JUDGE OF WHAT FLIES OR NOT AND ALL MUST ACKNOWLEDGE HIS AUTHORITY.
"So you guys...we still don't have a boat." Avery informed.
William: WHY NOT? What happened to the one you arrived in? You know, the one you sailed in from Warship Island to this one? Was it eaten up by a plothole? Do you seriously consider only using a boat once, because the Stu doesn’t deserve second-hand products?
Brian: And why is he mentioning this now? This is such awkward dialogue! The characters KNOW they don’t have a boat! Why does he feel the need to remind them? That would be like me suddenly pointing out that water is wet during the middle of a heated conversation! People don’t talk like that! If you can’t fit these information into the story smoothly, then don’t do freaking time jumps!
The Voice: And we know they don’t have a boat! The last chapter ended with David proposing to go to a restaurant, and this chapter opens with them arguing over bills! We are going to assume that they went straight to eat, instead of taking a detour and visiting some shipping yards! You don’t need to outline that for us! We actually have a brain! Unlike you.
DEPARTMENT OF REDUNDANCY DEPARTMENT: 1
"Good point." Chase nodded as he then began to think.
William: BEGAN TO THINK? You mean, he wasn’t thinking about this before? He KNEW they had no ship! He knew they would need a ship to continue their journey! And he fucking knew they Captain was too inept to ever find one on his own! Why THE FUCK wasn’t he fretting about it? And what kind of character are you writing that thinks so rarely that you need to specify that his brain is actually currently engaged?
Brian: And don’t describe it like your characters are actually even CAPABLE of thinking! That’s an insult to all multi-cellular organisms!
The Voice: Look at that ‘good point’ there! It’s clear that he’s paid absolutely no attention to the fact that they NEED A FREAKING BOAT! THEY WERE PLANNING TO HEAD FOR GRAND LINE AFTER DEFEATING THE SHARK KING, AND CHASE DIDN’T EVEN REALISE THAT THEY WOULD NEED A FUCKING BOAT! A GODDAMNED FUCKING BOAT! AND HE’S CLAIMING TO BE A PIRATE! AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 5
"I'll find one!"
Brian: (David) Yes, never mind the fact that I don’t have a single cent on me, and also have a heavy debt! I’ll find a ship and claim it as my own, since everything in this world was created for my use! Why, any shipwright will be HONOURED to have their ships serve one as magnificent as me!
David ran off leaving a dust trail behind.
William: THEY ARE IN THE CENTRE OF TOWN. Where did all the dust come from? With frequent traffic and paved roads, it’s impossible to create a dust trail! Those only happen when you are in the wild! And to create a dust trail, you need more than speed! You also need WEIGHT! It’s impossible to create a dust trail with human feet, because it covers far too small an area to stir up any dust!
Brian: *Pulls hair* And what is the POINT of giving a character super speed if a GODDAMNED NORMAL HUMAN BEING can run so fast that he create a visible dust trail in the middle of a busy town whilst doing nothing but running?
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 6
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 4 (I’m going to do this every time he nullifies a female character’s powers.)
"Ummm...does he know where to go?" Riru asked quietly as she sweatdropped.
SWEATDROP: 1
Brian: WHY DO YOU CARE? He’s just told you to stay in the freaking kitchen! He’s just told you to go ahead and be a waitress for years during the prime of your life so he can enjoy steaks and wine! Why do you care?
William: Because he’s the Author Avatar, and thus no female will ever be able to resist his charms. No matter how much he abuses her, she’ll always be there, fretting and worrying after him, because that’s her purpose in life now.
The Voice: Isn’t it nice? The former conman is now describe entirely using words like ‘quietly’ and ‘meekly’. Remember when she was assertive enough to actually fight David?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 6 (One for making her worry about David when she has no reason to, and one for applying to a female the perfect, meek, submissive, stay-in-the-kitchen stereotype.)
"Awww...Riru you're so cute!" Kit smiled
William: That is not cute. That is sickening. She is displaying exactly how broken she is after only a few days with David. She’s pretty much lost all ability to think for herself, and rotates herself around David, displaying a clear case of Stockholm Syndrome. She’s just demonstrated that she literally cannot get angry at him, cannot say what she wants…she is forced by her own psyche to always be submissive to him and never chastise him enough, even when he deserves it. In a few short days, David has trained her to be a perfect slave. You really have to wonder what his methods are.
Brian: The things is…the Stuthor is portraying this as desirable. That disgusting depiction of Riru as a weak, passive female is immediately followed by a character complimenting her. The Stuthor is saying that the only way to make people like you is acting as a slave towards his Avatar. The Stuthor is saying that this kind of behaviour is GOOD, and portraying it by making the characters who willingly submit to the Stu popular and liked. This isn’t just abusing a fictional character. This is him outright standing on a soapbox and telling all the women in the world to start pining after their abusive spouses, because that’s their role in life. That’s their purpose.
Now, do you see why I want to freaking murder this guy?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 7
as she began to hug and squeeze the life out of Riru.
The Voice: BEGAN to hug? WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT? Hugging is a single motion of circling your arms around someone! You may cling to that person for a long time, but you can’t ‘begin’ to hug, because you completely the entire motion of hugging in under a second! Why the FUCK does Kit move in slow motion at all times? Is it just that only male characters can usurp Riru’s position and claim super speed for themselves, and women must move painfully slow to demonstrate how they will always be inferior to males?
Brian: AND NONE OF THESE CHARACTER HAVE THE LEAST AMOUNT OF COMPASSION TOWARDS EACH OTHER! She never wonders whether Riru would be okay with a perfect stranger hugging her. She never thinks to lessen the force of her hug. She wants to do something, and therefore she will do it, who cares who gets hurt in the process.
William: And it’s more disgusting when you pair it together with the battered wife attitude Riru has up there. Kit is expressing attraction to Riru by hurting her. She is causing her pain as a sign of her love for her. And Riru is expected to appreciate this gesture, and Kit will never be punished for it.
I know this is a very common comedy cliché, but it is really not funny at all when the victim appears to be an utterly broken SLAVE. Stuthor, you disgust me.
The Voice: Well, we’re on the same page them. He disgusts me as well, possible more than any other Stuthor I have seen.
"Okay...Kit...please stop...I can't breath..." Riru said between each gasp of air which she desperatley needed.
The Voice: Here, do something for me. Take that little paragraph out of context and show it to your friends and ask them what do they think is happening here. I’ll tell you what they will inevitably reply: MURDER.
Stuthor, when people can mistake a scene of displays of friendship between friends for a scene of brutal murder, SOMETHING IS FUCKING WRONG.
And characters in One Piece should never have to beg their friends to spare their lives. In fact, they should never have to BEG their friends for anything at all! WHAT KIND OF ENVIRONMENT DID YOU LIVE IN THAT YOU HAD NO IDEA HOW FRIENDSHIP FUCKING WORKS? THAT YOU FIRMLY BELIEVED FRIENDS ATTEMPTED TO MURDER EACH OTHER AT REGULAR INTERVALS?
William: And just to make it even more infuriating, that line has plenty of rape parallels there too. How charming.
Brian: Maybe you don’t know, Stuthor, but strangling is not a nice thing. Oxygen deprivation does not feel nice. It is one of the most agonising deaths you could ever have. IT IS FREAKING HORRIBLE AND FRIENDS DON’T DO THAT TO EACH OTHER.
"Ummm...you need to let her go." Avery sweatdropped.
"Oh, right. Sorry Riru."
SWEATDROP: 2
William: Fascinating. So, when you friend and the girl you called cute begged you to stop doing something that she wasn’t comfortable with, you ignored her completely, because damn it, you’ll get your way whether she wants to or not. And yet when her MALE friend speaks up with a mild suggestion, you immediately comply. I don’t know what’s more disgusting. The fact that the sexual harassment victim last chapter is already sexually harassing other characters, or the fact that it takes a MALE to order her to do something. What Riru wants doesn’t matter, she has to learn to just sit there and take it. But when a MALE declares he wants something? Oh, she’d better comply immediately then.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 8
SOCIOPATHY: 4 (For the strangulation attempt.)
"Huh...huh...it's...huh...okay.."
Brian: Of course, she immediately forgives her too. She’s not allowed to hate people or protest against things she doesn’t want! Her duty is to lie back and think of England! Of course she can’t blame the people who force themselves on her! After all, this is exactly what David recruited her for!
ONOMATOPOEIAS ARE COOL: 3
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 9
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