FB: On Watt Street (SV/SB, Clark/Adam; R) 1-2/?

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Title: On Watt Street
Author: LadyJanelly
Fandom: Smallville/Sorority Boys
Rating: R
Status: work in progress
Summary: Adam's weekend to get his head together takes a little longer than he thought it would.

Links:
Chapter 1 and Chapter 2

Crossposted to sv_slash

He thinks he's alright with it, really. Just like he thinks he means it when he tells the guys he's

Comments

[ladyjanelly]

Wow, holy crap.

This threw me for a minute when I saw it on sv_slash. Craziness.

I can't tell you how much I am awed that you took the time to do this.

Yeah, SV geography is just whack. I decided for my sanity's sake to just accept it and not try to figure how it works.

Over in sorority_boys, various discussions occurred because of the ambiguity of how far did Jimmy go with Adina/Adam while Adina/Adam was unconscious.

This is actually what prompted the writing of this fic, how even unwanted frottage at the beginning of Adam's exploration of his sexuality could mess with his head. I played with different character concepts to pair him up with (mainly crossovers from different sources) and ended up with Clark as a good sounding board. I really hadn't planned for Clark to have so much going on in his life, but it's working for me now.

In retrospect I worry that the dream sequence may have been distracting for the SV reader--that I haven't established the exact "when" of the fic enough for the reader to not try to do the math and wonder at the Adam/Lex drowning link.

It's strongly possible the reason why Clark resides in squalor ties back to this hurt Clark has when bringing up Lex.

So much so that I'm having a hard time making it realistic that Clark will talk about it to Adam...

the writer didn't skimp out on descriptions to help aid the reader with visualizing

Thanks. In my modern-day-earth fandoms, I try to have a very spare style. It helps me to know, as a writer, that it's not too spare, that it's not disembodied voices drifting through a vaacum, y'know?

Technically, I think this fic could use a critical eye to proofread for typos and smooth some of the grammar.

Honestly, you're right. I've bounced ideas off of Roxymissrose, but didn't feel I knew her enough to ask her to beta-read for me. I know there's lists of beta-readers out there, but it just feels weird to ask of a stranger. The other fandoms I've written for were generally smaller fan-bases, and I'd read and review for a while, find a writer I could respect who crits hard and then ask if they'd do it.

In some ways, the Boondock Saints fandom spoiled me--the first time I got a review like "I love A, B and C, but felt this line and that line were OOC and less than a logical response to the situation" I felt like I'd been slapped. And then I wanted more. They really used to crit hard over there. I was way cool.

Overall, I enjoyed reading these two parts and I hope to eventually see more of this fic!

Thanks again. I appreciate the time it took and the honesty. (And I hadn't thought to cross-post to the sorority_boys group, so I got a nice pop on the comments for this fic from it).