Fanfiction: Wake Up Heart (new chapter finally, omg :O)
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Wake Up Heart
By Solitaire
Chapter 3: Expect the...
“...What?”
It seemed Sanzo was slow in coming awake fully, but that was nothing new. Soon enough he would be barking at them to get in the jeep and stop wasting time, so Hakkai resolved to enjoy it while it lasted. Gojyo, on the other hand, was quickly becoming frustrated.
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Wake Up Heart
By Solitaire
Chapter 3: Expect the...
“...What?”
It seemed Sanzo was slow in coming awake fully, but that was nothing new. Soon enough he would be barking at them to get in the jeep and stop wasting time, so Hakkai resolved to enjoy it while it lasted. Gojyo, on the other hand, was quickly becoming frustrated.
“I asked if you slept well ( Read more... )
What a place to leave off, hehe.
I don't think you are picking on Sanzo, besides, he can take it ;) I love the effects the transfusion is having on him. And how confused he is by his new abilities. I think the heightened scent one would be hardest to take; there are a lot of polite fictions that people go through to make social interaction pleasant, so I think being able to smell when someone was aroused, or lying, or afraid would be hard. Plus when you add in that Sanzo is not a particularly sensual person anyway -- or at least he keeps that side of himself carefully repressed like a lot of things with him, actually -- and I think it would be psychologically very difficult for him. Anyway, I think that is coming through loud and clear in your story. But I can see why he is getting into the heightened physical strength, because he is all about strength.
I really liked part where Sanzo woke up to the fact he was humping Goku, that was interesting, and Goku's mental observation that Sanzo looked horrified. (But not horrified enough for him not to jerk off thinking about it ;D )
Anyway, much love to your story :)
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I'm glad you like how I've been working in the effects Goku's blood has been having on Sanzo. I'm trying so hard to make this thing in-character and believable and tactfully subtle, that every time it gets down to me actually writing Sanzo all hot and bothered (which, before I sat down and decided I was going to make a serious story out of this, was pretty much my only goal for the blood transfusion), I have to practically let Xpyne goad me into it, because I keep thinking it will end up being ridiculous or something. >_>;;;
And yeah, I completely agree with what you said about social politeness and intimacy and smell... It's one of those thing that, as a human, you sort of take for granted as something others aren't able to use against you or think ill of you for, and I'm sure Sanzo would have preferred not to be reminded that hanging around demons all the time doesn't really give you that privacy or deniability. And yes, I think Sanzo would totally get off on enjoy the heightened physical strength. >:d
Gawd, that "humping" scene took forever. I think it currently holds the distinction of being the most difficult scene I've ever had to write in a fanfic (a position which had previously been held by the scene out on the porch at the inn where Sanzo has to talk to Goku about what happened back in the woods). I couldn't decide if it should be one scene or two--and if one, then should it be from Sanzo's pov or Goku's? If two, how far apart in time should the scenes be? How could I make things progress into a sexual situation in a believable way? How far am I going to let this go, what finally stops it, and then wtf does Sanzo do? Does anyone call him on it? With more goading from Xpyne, I finally got it to work to my liking, but not without much muffled screaming and tearing at my hair. So it makes me very happy to hear you liked it. ♥
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