a post in which a thing called "Villanelle" is talked about a lot
Man, I am officially not fond of the Villanelle poetry form XD;. I've been slaving away for the past, umm... I dunno, it's been quite awhile since I've started my attempt ^^;. All I have to say after working so hard is... blarg. Blarg! at the results I came up with, and also my brain is now officially blarg'y after all that XD;. Oh well, I'm sticking it in my poetry portfolio for creative writing anyway! Bwahahaha ^_^.
THE MEETING
by (omg) M
I was waiting in the water for you.
‘Where the ocean meets the sand,’ you promised.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
When you said this, I knew exactly where
you meant. The place where we began this tryst.
I was waiting in the water for you.
Before the sun even set, I was there.
I sat on the sand, heady from ocean mist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
As the sun vanished, at the shore I’d stare.
As always, I was soothed as the waves hissed.
I was waiting in the water for you.
You would come. You called me. You wouldn’t dare
to wound my heart like this. I clenched my fist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
You never came. Will your heart rip and tear?
because now, in these ocean waves I twist.
I was waiting in the water for you.
So long. I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
For anyone else who doesn't know what the heck a villanelle is (I didn't until today XD; ), you probably noticed that two lines repeated A LOT. They're supposed to-- I'm not just being stupid ^^;. Those two lines rhyme... and then some other lines rhyme... and yeah, my brain was about burst into flame while attempting to make the form correct XD;. I think I managed to do it, though. I know my poem's crap, shut up XD;;;. Here's the proper rhyme scheme, if anyone's interested:
A
b
A’
a
b
A
a
b
A’
a
b
A
a
b
A’
a
b
A
A’
Let's start a villanelle revolution!
Actually... for fuck's sake,
let's just please not ever
speak of poetry again. My
sanity is waning, as anyone
around me has noticed with
my constant babbling of
slander against poetry XD;;.
THE MEETING
by (omg) M
I was waiting in the water for you.
‘Where the ocean meets the sand,’ you promised.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
When you said this, I knew exactly where
you meant. The place where we began this tryst.
I was waiting in the water for you.
Before the sun even set, I was there.
I sat on the sand, heady from ocean mist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
As the sun vanished, at the shore I’d stare.
As always, I was soothed as the waves hissed.
I was waiting in the water for you.
You would come. You called me. You wouldn’t dare
to wound my heart like this. I clenched my fist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
You never came. Will your heart rip and tear?
because now, in these ocean waves I twist.
I was waiting in the water for you.
So long. I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.
For anyone else who doesn't know what the heck a villanelle is (I didn't until today XD; ), you probably noticed that two lines repeated A LOT. They're supposed to-- I'm not just being stupid ^^;. Those two lines rhyme... and then some other lines rhyme... and yeah, my brain was about burst into flame while attempting to make the form correct XD;. I think I managed to do it, though. I know my poem's crap, shut up XD;;;. Here's the proper rhyme scheme, if anyone's interested:
A
b
A’
a
b
A
a
b
A’
a
b
A
a
b
A’
a
b
A
A’
Let's start a villanelle revolution!
Actually... for fuck's sake,
let's just please not ever
speak of poetry again. My
sanity is waning, as anyone
around me has noticed with
my constant babbling of
slander against poetry XD;;.