Serena (Sailor Cosmos) and the Immortal Sisters

[smsues]

Title: Cosmic Surprise and Crystal Senshi (The first chapter is a revised version of “The Beginning”. I ignored it.)
Writer: A. Lee
Summary:
1: “r/r Sailor Moon loses her power, or does she? sequel coming up soon”
2: ““This is a sequel to Cosmic Surprise. In Crystal Tokyo, the Scouts have quit (because they aren't needed), but a new evil

Comments

WTFage, Part 2

[kakeochi_umai]

And the rest.

Mina wore a beautiful golden-orange dress that showed modest cleavage

Lucky that my breasts are small and humble...

it spilled over her green shirt like water

What, and left it see-through?

Melvin had gotten rid of his bulky glasses, and now wore contacts. He had more muscles, as well, because he worked out more often.

Because God forbid any character should be a dork.

It reached just below her knees, and gave her a cozy look.

Amy the sofa.

The bottom part just lay there

Since the Suethor is obviously underage, I will not say what this makes me think of.

This was a gift from you-know-who.

Voldemort?

Chrysalis’s eyes communicated a message that said She discovered us, and we didn’t find anything.

No, no, no. Voldemort is a guy!

Her skirt was a combination of all the beautiful colors in the world. It mostly had silver, gold, and white, but rainbow streaks found their way here and there.

Am I the only one who's thinking "Fortune teller at a circus"?

Around her creamy neck

Chocolate bunny.

She wore virtually no makeup, a fact that was visible

Note to Sue: If it is "visible" that someone is wearing no makeup, it usually means they look like shit.

“Is that Serena?” Molly asked, staring, and wondering where her friend got that outfit

Probably the same place she got the 435437858743659843 gifts she gave everyone...

All of a sudden, a bunch of youmas leapt out and began battling the Scouts.

Why do Suethors insist on mixing Japanese and English terms? Either say a bunch of youma leapt out and began battling the senshi or a bunch of Negamonsters leapt out and began battling the Scouts. But for the love of God, stick to one version!