Kaleigh Ann Nicole Serenity and Jessika Misha Harmony Malone
Updated: 7-1-06
Title: A Different Kinda Sailor Moon Story Part One (Oh, it's different alright...) (SMFanFiction Version)
Writer: Etolie De Nuit
Canon: Dubbed anime
Rating: 4
Name: Kaleigh "Leah" Ann Nicole Serenity/Malone and Jessika "Jessi" Misha Harmony Malone
Senshi Title: Not mentioned
Species: Drones... that's the only word I can think of to describe them.
Hair: Not mentioned
Eyes: Not mentioned
Unusual Markings/Colorations: None
Possessions: Kaleigh has a famous recipe for sugar cookies and chocolate chip pancakes. They also have a Sega Genesis.
Guardians: None
Origin: It's a mystery, but they move to Tokyo at the beginning of the story. They're sisters. Kaleigh is older. (She's 33 while Jessika is 15.)
Connections to Canon: Kaleigh is Serena's mother and Queen Serenity reincarnated.
Senshi Outfit: Not mentioned
Senshi Moves: Not mentioned
Other Special Abilities: Kaleigh can heal the sick and removes Mistress 9 from Hotaru.
Annoying Traits: They just moved to Japan and they act like they just met Serena (which is short for Seraphina Marina Josefina Serenity) and her father (who is now named Tristen Lee Nathan Serenity). Everyone still knows about the incident at the end of the Silver Millennium and all of the girls are still princesses. Kaleigh somehow knew that Tristen was going to ask his doctor about her address so she told him not to tell him about her true identity.
Comments: Plotwise, this is probably the most poorly written story I have come across so far. It's got a really good premise. But the entire thing is ruined by the incompetence of the writer. Not to mention the fact that it's boring and infested with deus ex machina plot points.
The author also decided to give all of the canon characters longer first names, two middle names, and added a bunch of useless OCs with the same. Why? I don't know.
“My friends names are: Rayleen Bethany Valerie Hino, Wilhelmina Avery Patrice Aino , Letitia Rowena Naomi Kino , Setsuna Hisa Amaya Maioh , Amara Sakura Lyra Tenou, Michelle Hitsomi Naoko Kaioh, Darien Marcus Jeffrey Shields, Elizabeth Rochelle Noelle Foreman, Vanessa Joanne Rachel Marshall, Keiko Yasa Aneko Mazurka, Nani Kasha Meako Kanzaka Melvin Davey Curtis Guiro , Molly Ashleigh Lacey Baker, Gregory Kaiya Carlos Urawa, Dijonay Mileena Kortney Lewis, Petra Aristae Diamond Syms, Irene Hermione Kelsey Angler Lorena Talia Farrah Ramsey, Starr Gertrude Isabella Winston, Genevieve Judith Lena Rollins Rosalind Bonita Alameda Gillespie, Nerissa Monica Paige Jarvick, Tayatana Sofia Richelle Petrossian and Nevilla Leighanne Gretchen Delancey” [Snip]...Mikeala Arrietty Chantal Mizuno...
Serena's grandmother (who is named Stacie) also shows up and does... absolutely nothing but display her baseless hate for Tristen for a few lines.
Samples:
[This is from the SMFanFiction version. In the ff.net version, the "Kraft dinner" was changed to "goodies" for the sleepover.]
Leah: Hi, Serena.
Serena: Hiya Leah.
Leah: Where is your father?
Serena: My father is in the kitchen cooking Kraft Dinner.
Leah: “Tristan cooking now that’s a miracle because my husband never cooks”. *thinks to herself*
Tristan walks into the hallway where Leah and Serena are talking.
Tristan: Hi Leah.
Leah: Hiya Tristan.
Leah: Did you get that Kraft Dinner cooked? [Sounds like product placement, doesn't it?]
Tristan: Serena you told her what I was doing.
Serena: No, Leah asked where you were so I told her.
Tristan: Oh sorry Serena.
Serena: It’s okay daddy.
Leah: Did you phone your friends Serena?
Serena: I phoned Mikeala Mizuno and she is phoning my other friends to remind them about my sleepover tonight.
Leah: Oh you’re having a sleepover.
Serena: Yeah I am Leah.
Leah: Oh yeah I completely forgot the reason why I came over here in the first place.
Tristan: What was the reason you came over here for?
Leah: I came over to see if you had any sugar. [Riveting, isn't it?]
Tristan: What do you want sugar for?
Leah: I’m making my famous sugar cookies.
Tristan: I’ll let you borrow the sugar on two conditions Leah.
Leah: What are those conditions Tristan? [Tristan: You will stop acting like you don't know me and move back in. I know I'm not your nonexistent husband reincarnated but damnit I'm good enough for this lifetime.]
Tristan: You bring over some sugar cookies when they’re done and that you help me with Serena’s sleepover because it won’t be easy looking after a bunch of pre-teens all alone.
Leah: Sure I’ll bring over some cookies when they’re done and I will also help you out with Serena’s sleepover.
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Leah walks into the spare room.
“Hi, Leah Darien replies.
What's going on here?” Leah asks.
“Serena has the influenza” Tristan answers.
“You're sick Serena” Leah says. [Damnit Holmes, how do you do it?]
“Do I look like to you?” Serena asks in an angry voice.
“Seraphina Marina Josefina Serenity don't so mean” Tristan yells.
“Yekes .. . I'm trouble now” Serena replies.
“You 're not in trouble I just do want you being mean to Leah” Tristan says.
“I'm sorry Leah” Serena replies.
“That's okay Serena” Leah says.
Leah and Tristan walk to Tristan's room.
“I hope Serena will be okay” Tristan replies.
“I'm sure Serena will be fine” Leah says.
Tristan falls asleep.
Leah sneaks back into the spare room, she walks over to Serena's bedside and kneels by the bed.
“I place my powers over tonight so you be safe from harm, sweet dreams my darling Princess Seraphina and I don't want you to tell a soul that I help you feel better especially not your father or you will be in trouble” Leah whispers to into Serena's ear.
Leah walks back to Tristan's room.
“Darien wake up” Serena says.
“What is it Serena?” Darien asks.
“I heard someone whispers to me” Serena answers.
“You're dreaming Serena” Darien says.
“No, I wasn't dreaming Dare” Serena replies.
“Serena trust me it's just your imagination” Darien says.
Darien & Serena fall back to sleep.
Tristan is the first one up in the morning, he gets dress and walks into the kitchen.
Serena, Ami, Mina , Lita, Raye, Amara, Setsuna, Michelle and Darien walk into the kitchen a few minutes after Tristan.
“Good Mornin' everyone” Tristan replies.
“Mornin' Tristan” Darien says.
“Are you feeling better Tristan?” Serena asks.
“I'm feeling a 100% better” Serena answers.
“Gee, that was a quick recover” Tristan says.
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Serena turns on the CD player.
It's on disc 4 which is Planet Pop 5.
Serena turns it to song 17.
“The song A Moment Like This” by Kelly Clarkson starts to play.
“Why did have to put this song on?” Tristan asks.
“I like this song daddy” Serena answers.
“Well this song happens to be mine and your mother's special song so I really don't want to listen to it right know Serena” Tristan says.
Serena turns off the CD player.
“I'm sorry daddy” Serena replies.
“That's okay Serena” Tristan says.
“I'm hungry daddy” Serena replies.
“Can you make something for breakfast Leah?” Tristan asks.
“I can do that but may I ask why you want me to make something” Leah answers.
“I'm going to head over to the hospital” Tristan says.
“See ya later daddy” Serena replies.
Tristan gives Serena a hug and kiss good-bye.
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Leah walks to Hotaru's room.
“You're not Dawn” Hotaru yells.
“No, I'm not but you've got me so deal with it” Leah replies.
“I don't want you here” Mistress 9 screams.
“I'm not letting you take over Hotaru Tomoe's body” Leah says.
“How are you going to stop me?” Mistress 9 asks.
Leah turns into Queen Serenity.
“I'm Queen Serenity and demand that you Mistress 9 would leave Hotaru alone forever” Leah says.
“I don't want to be evil anymore so please help me Queen Serenity” Hotaru replies.
I summon all my power as Queen Serenity so Hotaru Tomoe can free from the evil of Mistress 9 who dwells inside her so evil go away and leaves Hotaru's body” Kaleigh says.
Mistress 9 screaming and leaves Hotaru's body.
“Thanks for saving me from Mistress 9” Hotaru replies.
“You're welcome Hotaru” Leah says.
Kaleigh turns back into Leah and walks next door to Tristan's room.
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Tristan opens his eyes and sees Kaleigh sitting on the edge of the bed.
“What's wrong now Kale?” Tristan asks.
“I'm.. so .. cold.. Tris” Kaleigh answers between shivers.
“Kaleigh you're shivering” Tristan says.
“Yeah of course I'm freezing” Kaleigh replies.
“What is could be causing this?” Tristan asks.
“Tristan it's not what it is who” Kaleigh answers.
“What do you mean?” Tristan asks.
“It's Queen Alina” Kaleigh answers.
“How is Queen Alina making you sick? Tristan asks.
“Queen Alina is using her staff to drain my power which is making me sick” Kaleigh answers.
“How do I stop Queen Alina?” Tristan asks.
“Tristan you have to destroy her staff” Kaleigh answers.
Tristan kisses Kaleigh on the cheek and takes off to Queen Alina's layer in the negabass.
“Queen Alina you leave my wife alone” Tristan yells.
“I won't leave Queen Serenity alone” Queen Alina screams.
Tristan grabs Queen Alina's staff and breaks it over his knee. [According to the story, Alina is more powerful than Beryl. Yup.]
Queen Alina starts screaming.
Tristan goes back to Kaleigh's house and walks up to her room.
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They walk back to Kaleigh's house hand in hand.
“What's going on with two?” Amara asks.
“We confessed our feelings to each other and we're together finally” Darien answers.
“Did you tell Darien you little secret crush on you know who?” Kaleigh asks.
“What is your mother talking about?” Darien asks.
“I've got no idea” Serena answers.
“Serena you know that I'm talking about the crush that you have developed on your father Kaleigh” says.
Tristan's eyes widen.
“I'm sorry it just happened while you over the past 4 years” Serena replies.
“How long have know about this Kaleigh?” Tristan asks,
“I figure it out early today and talked to Serena about it” Kaleigh answers.
“When were planning to tell me? Tristan asks.
“I was going to tell later on when we were alone” Kaleigh answers.
“Kaleigh we made a vow on our wedding day not keep secrets from each other” Tristan yells.
“I just didn't think was important that you knew” Kaleigh says.
”Well in that case I'm going home with Serena and I never want to see you every again” Tristan shouts.
Tristan scoops up Serena in his arms and they walk across the street.
Title: A Different Kinda Sailor Moon Story Part One (Oh, it's different alright...) (SMFanFiction Version)
Writer: Etolie De Nuit
Canon: Dubbed anime
Rating: 4
Name: Kaleigh "Leah" Ann Nicole Serenity/Malone and Jessika "Jessi" Misha Harmony Malone
Senshi Title: Not mentioned
Species: Drones... that's the only word I can think of to describe them.
Hair: Not mentioned
Eyes: Not mentioned
Unusual Markings/Colorations: None
Possessions: Kaleigh has a famous recipe for sugar cookies and chocolate chip pancakes. They also have a Sega Genesis.
Guardians: None
Origin: It's a mystery, but they move to Tokyo at the beginning of the story. They're sisters. Kaleigh is older. (She's 33 while Jessika is 15.)
Connections to Canon: Kaleigh is Serena's mother and Queen Serenity reincarnated.
Senshi Outfit: Not mentioned
Senshi Moves: Not mentioned
Other Special Abilities: Kaleigh can heal the sick and removes Mistress 9 from Hotaru.
Annoying Traits: They just moved to Japan and they act like they just met Serena (which is short for Seraphina Marina Josefina Serenity) and her father (who is now named Tristen Lee Nathan Serenity). Everyone still knows about the incident at the end of the Silver Millennium and all of the girls are still princesses. Kaleigh somehow knew that Tristen was going to ask his doctor about her address so she told him not to tell him about her true identity.
Comments: Plotwise, this is probably the most poorly written story I have come across so far. It's got a really good premise. But the entire thing is ruined by the incompetence of the writer. Not to mention the fact that it's boring and infested with deus ex machina plot points.
The author also decided to give all of the canon characters longer first names, two middle names, and added a bunch of useless OCs with the same. Why? I don't know.
“My friends names are: Rayleen Bethany Valerie Hino, Wilhelmina Avery Patrice Aino , Letitia Rowena Naomi Kino , Setsuna Hisa Amaya Maioh , Amara Sakura Lyra Tenou, Michelle Hitsomi Naoko Kaioh, Darien Marcus Jeffrey Shields, Elizabeth Rochelle Noelle Foreman, Vanessa Joanne Rachel Marshall, Keiko Yasa Aneko Mazurka, Nani Kasha Meako Kanzaka Melvin Davey Curtis Guiro , Molly Ashleigh Lacey Baker, Gregory Kaiya Carlos Urawa, Dijonay Mileena Kortney Lewis, Petra Aristae Diamond Syms, Irene Hermione Kelsey Angler Lorena Talia Farrah Ramsey, Starr Gertrude Isabella Winston, Genevieve Judith Lena Rollins Rosalind Bonita Alameda Gillespie, Nerissa Monica Paige Jarvick, Tayatana Sofia Richelle Petrossian and Nevilla Leighanne Gretchen Delancey” [Snip]...Mikeala Arrietty Chantal Mizuno...
Serena's grandmother (who is named Stacie) also shows up and does... absolutely nothing but display her baseless hate for Tristen for a few lines.
Samples:
[This is from the SMFanFiction version. In the ff.net version, the "Kraft dinner" was changed to "goodies" for the sleepover.]
Leah: Hi, Serena.
Serena: Hiya Leah.
Leah: Where is your father?
Serena: My father is in the kitchen cooking Kraft Dinner.
Leah: “Tristan cooking now that’s a miracle because my husband never cooks”. *thinks to herself*
Tristan walks into the hallway where Leah and Serena are talking.
Tristan: Hi Leah.
Leah: Hiya Tristan.
Leah: Did you get that Kraft Dinner cooked? [Sounds like product placement, doesn't it?]
Tristan: Serena you told her what I was doing.
Serena: No, Leah asked where you were so I told her.
Tristan: Oh sorry Serena.
Serena: It’s okay daddy.
Leah: Did you phone your friends Serena?
Serena: I phoned Mikeala Mizuno and she is phoning my other friends to remind them about my sleepover tonight.
Leah: Oh you’re having a sleepover.
Serena: Yeah I am Leah.
Leah: Oh yeah I completely forgot the reason why I came over here in the first place.
Tristan: What was the reason you came over here for?
Leah: I came over to see if you had any sugar. [Riveting, isn't it?]
Tristan: What do you want sugar for?
Leah: I’m making my famous sugar cookies.
Tristan: I’ll let you borrow the sugar on two conditions Leah.
Leah: What are those conditions Tristan? [Tristan: You will stop acting like you don't know me and move back in. I know I'm not your nonexistent husband reincarnated but damnit I'm good enough for this lifetime.]
Tristan: You bring over some sugar cookies when they’re done and that you help me with Serena’s sleepover because it won’t be easy looking after a bunch of pre-teens all alone.
Leah: Sure I’ll bring over some cookies when they’re done and I will also help you out with Serena’s sleepover.
---------------------------
Leah walks into the spare room.
“Hi, Leah Darien replies.
What's going on here?” Leah asks.
“Serena has the influenza” Tristan answers.
“You're sick Serena” Leah says. [Damnit Holmes, how do you do it?]
“Do I look like to you?” Serena asks in an angry voice.
“Seraphina Marina Josefina Serenity don't so mean” Tristan yells.
“Yekes .. . I'm trouble now” Serena replies.
“You 're not in trouble I just do want you being mean to Leah” Tristan says.
“I'm sorry Leah” Serena replies.
“That's okay Serena” Leah says.
Leah and Tristan walk to Tristan's room.
“I hope Serena will be okay” Tristan replies.
“I'm sure Serena will be fine” Leah says.
Tristan falls asleep.
Leah sneaks back into the spare room, she walks over to Serena's bedside and kneels by the bed.
“I place my powers over tonight so you be safe from harm, sweet dreams my darling Princess Seraphina and I don't want you to tell a soul that I help you feel better especially not your father or you will be in trouble” Leah whispers to into Serena's ear.
Leah walks back to Tristan's room.
“Darien wake up” Serena says.
“What is it Serena?” Darien asks.
“I heard someone whispers to me” Serena answers.
“You're dreaming Serena” Darien says.
“No, I wasn't dreaming Dare” Serena replies.
“Serena trust me it's just your imagination” Darien says.
Darien & Serena fall back to sleep.
Tristan is the first one up in the morning, he gets dress and walks into the kitchen.
Serena, Ami, Mina , Lita, Raye, Amara, Setsuna, Michelle and Darien walk into the kitchen a few minutes after Tristan.
“Good Mornin' everyone” Tristan replies.
“Mornin' Tristan” Darien says.
“Are you feeling better Tristan?” Serena asks.
“I'm feeling a 100% better” Serena answers.
“Gee, that was a quick recover” Tristan says.
---------------------------
Serena turns on the CD player.
It's on disc 4 which is Planet Pop 5.
Serena turns it to song 17.
“The song A Moment Like This” by Kelly Clarkson starts to play.
“Why did have to put this song on?” Tristan asks.
“I like this song daddy” Serena answers.
“Well this song happens to be mine and your mother's special song so I really don't want to listen to it right know Serena” Tristan says.
Serena turns off the CD player.
“I'm sorry daddy” Serena replies.
“That's okay Serena” Tristan says.
“I'm hungry daddy” Serena replies.
“Can you make something for breakfast Leah?” Tristan asks.
“I can do that but may I ask why you want me to make something” Leah answers.
“I'm going to head over to the hospital” Tristan says.
“See ya later daddy” Serena replies.
Tristan gives Serena a hug and kiss good-bye.
-------------------------
Leah walks to Hotaru's room.
“You're not Dawn” Hotaru yells.
“No, I'm not but you've got me so deal with it” Leah replies.
“I don't want you here” Mistress 9 screams.
“I'm not letting you take over Hotaru Tomoe's body” Leah says.
“How are you going to stop me?” Mistress 9 asks.
Leah turns into Queen Serenity.
“I'm Queen Serenity and demand that you Mistress 9 would leave Hotaru alone forever” Leah says.
“I don't want to be evil anymore so please help me Queen Serenity” Hotaru replies.
I summon all my power as Queen Serenity so Hotaru Tomoe can free from the evil of Mistress 9 who dwells inside her so evil go away and leaves Hotaru's body” Kaleigh says.
Mistress 9 screaming and leaves Hotaru's body.
“Thanks for saving me from Mistress 9” Hotaru replies.
“You're welcome Hotaru” Leah says.
Kaleigh turns back into Leah and walks next door to Tristan's room.
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Tristan opens his eyes and sees Kaleigh sitting on the edge of the bed.
“What's wrong now Kale?” Tristan asks.
“I'm.. so .. cold.. Tris” Kaleigh answers between shivers.
“Kaleigh you're shivering” Tristan says.
“Yeah of course I'm freezing” Kaleigh replies.
“What is could be causing this?” Tristan asks.
“Tristan it's not what it is who” Kaleigh answers.
“What do you mean?” Tristan asks.
“It's Queen Alina” Kaleigh answers.
“How is Queen Alina making you sick? Tristan asks.
“Queen Alina is using her staff to drain my power which is making me sick” Kaleigh answers.
“How do I stop Queen Alina?” Tristan asks.
“Tristan you have to destroy her staff” Kaleigh answers.
Tristan kisses Kaleigh on the cheek and takes off to Queen Alina's layer in the negabass.
“Queen Alina you leave my wife alone” Tristan yells.
“I won't leave Queen Serenity alone” Queen Alina screams.
Tristan grabs Queen Alina's staff and breaks it over his knee. [According to the story, Alina is more powerful than Beryl. Yup.]
Queen Alina starts screaming.
Tristan goes back to Kaleigh's house and walks up to her room.
------------------------------
They walk back to Kaleigh's house hand in hand.
“What's going on with two?” Amara asks.
“We confessed our feelings to each other and we're together finally” Darien answers.
“Did you tell Darien you little secret crush on you know who?” Kaleigh asks.
“What is your mother talking about?” Darien asks.
“I've got no idea” Serena answers.
“Serena you know that I'm talking about the crush that you have developed on your father Kaleigh” says.
Tristan's eyes widen.
“I'm sorry it just happened while you over the past 4 years” Serena replies.
“How long have know about this Kaleigh?” Tristan asks,
“I figure it out early today and talked to Serena about it” Kaleigh answers.
“When were planning to tell me? Tristan asks.
“I was going to tell later on when we were alone” Kaleigh answers.
“Kaleigh we made a vow on our wedding day not keep secrets from each other” Tristan yells.
“I just didn't think was important that you knew” Kaleigh says.
”Well in that case I'm going home with Serena and I never want to see you every again” Tristan shouts.
Tristan scoops up Serena in his arms and they walk across the street.