Raven
Title: So are you
Writer: CatStar14
Canon: Translated manga?
Rating: 2
Name: Raven
Senshi Title: Not mentioned
Species: Puella angstia
Hair: Bluish black or raven, long
Eyes: Sharp deep green
Unusual Markings/Colorations: Pale skin
Possessions: None
Guardians: Tiger, a black and white striped puppy.
Origin: Her parents abandoned her. She was taken in by a guy named Marc when she was 4. He abused her in every way possible (including sexually) and she ran away from him 2 days before the story starts.
Connections to Canon: She was Princess Cat, Prince Darien's sister and Beryl's best friend in her past life. In this life, Darien hits her with his car and takes her in.
Senshi Outfit: Not mentioned
Senshi Moves: Not mentioned
Other Special Abilities: None
Annoying Traits: She has amnesia but she seems to remember everything. She calls Darien Blue for some reason.
Comments: ... No.
The story just ends abruptly because the author wasn't getting enough good reviews (and reviews in general) and she didn't know what to write about anymore. :\
Samples:
A girl with long raven colored hair stood on a balcony staring out into midnight sky, it was a full earth tonight, and she laughed aloud at the thought. She stood there thinking about her brother. He was her best friend, she could talk to him about anything. All she had to do was look into those intense blue eyes and it would seem as if all her troubles would just melt away.
Suddenly a cool breeze blew by sending shivers down her spine. She hugged her pale blue shawl tightly over her shoulder. “Where is he?” she wondered, “We were supposed to meet here over an hour ago.” Since her brother was always so busy fighting wars to have time to hang out with her during the week they had set up a time and place to meet and talk. Today she had a surprise for him. Her puppy then came scampering onto the balcony his tail wagging behind him. She picked him up, “Hey sweetie” Cat said petting his soft fur. She then glanced over into her bedroom at the young girl who sat down on her bed staring into space. “Beryl, what’s wrong?”
The brunette looked over at her friend with sad eyes, “Maybe he isn’t coming”
“No! He isn’t like that! My brother would never break a promise with me, we have the closest relationship possible!” She snapped narrowing her sharp green eyes at her friend abruptly placing her dog on the ground.
Beryl stood up with a start, “You know what, I don’t have to be here! I could be back home trying to help my people, instead I’m here trying to get together with my best friends brother, “What is becoming of me? Especially since, I am allowing you to treat me this way! I don’t even think he likes me”
“Of course he likes you Beryl” Cat lied, crossing her fingers behind her back, “Every time we talk he is always going on and on about you”
“Really” Beryl questioned suspiciously, “You aren’t just lying to me are you?”
“Does this look like a face that would lye to you?” Cat asked putting on an innocent face.
“Look there’s your chance to prove yourself, I see your brother right now over on the terrace” Beryl exclaimed pointing out the balcony door. “Wait, who is that BLOND with him?” she continued in disgust.
“Probably some bimbo from the village” Cat answered, “Lets go and get a closer look” she instructed taking Beryl’s hand and dragging her in the direction of where Darien and the girl were at.
When they arrived, Cat and Beryl hid behind one of the rose bushes, carefully trying to avoid touching any of the thorns. Though they could see Darien and the girl, they could not hear them. “Oh well” Cat thought, “I’m not about to be getting any closer. I wonder who she is?”
“Don’t you recognize that girl? It’s Princess Serena!” Beryl whispered venomously.
“Serena? You mean Queen Serenity’s daughter? Oh yeah, from the ball here on the moon, I can’t believe Darien would ditch me to hang with that blond tramp!” she whispered back.
Beryl abruptly got up, “Ill be back, no one does this to me.” She muttered handing Cat what looked like a mint.
“What? Beryl? BERYL!!” but it was too late or so she thought. “What was this girl doing here anyways? This is our home here on the moon.” Darien and Cat lived in a home on the moon and on the earth. But, Darien was always on the Earth so how could he know Princess Serena?
A few minutes later Cat started looking at the way that Darien was staring at Serena. There was a look in his eyes that he had never looked at Cat with before. That look in his eyes, what was it? It was deeper than love. It was like that this princess was his soul mate.
“I hate her” Cat thought angrily popping the mint in her mouth. Hmm, not very minty.
Suddenly she was hit with a wave of nausea, “What’s going on” Cat wondered. She stumbled around until her knees gave out. “Darien!” she called out. “Darien... help me...Darien” but he could not heat her. The last thing she remembered seeing was Darien and the princess in a deep embrace and Beryl approaching steadily looking somehow different almost witch like with a group of soldiers from her planet. A group of girls jumped out to help but it was too late.
Everything had turned into darkness...
It was a cold fall night as Darien Shields walked towards his car staring up at the moonlit sky. “It’s a full moon tonight, the cat comes out to play,” he thought aloud. Where had that come from he wondered.
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"Hey, earth to Raven?" Darien called snapping his fingers in Raven's face, she swatted it away, "Tell me about yourself, the only thing I know about you is that your name is Raven and that you have a dog-named, Tiger.
Raven forced a smile, "My life isn't nearly as interesting as yours is, you don't want to here about mine..." she muttered waving a hand at him.
"Oh yes I do! Come on tell me" he persisted, nudging her in her side.
She slapped his arm, "Alright" she said hesitantly, "Well um... as you know my name is Raven, I'm 14 years old, and I was adopted" she paused and looked at the reaction on his face, he seemed shocked, she seemed so much older than she was, "Um... When I was four my family abandoned me, I really don't remember them much, and after that a guy named Marc he took me in and..." she paused looking down at her lap and twirling and pulling on her hair, "And umm..." she choked.
Darien's eyes flashed with concern, "You don't have to tell me if you don't want to" he said putting a comforting hand on her shoulder, "I'll understand"
Raven smiled at him through her tears, "Thank you Darien, but I think I will tell you, I've never told anyone before, however I think I can trust you" wiping the tears from off her face she continued with her story. "When I was four I met Marc and he took me in, for about until the time I was 11 years old, he continually sexually abused me and when I started to fight him off he would hurt me, he would hit me and scream at me and force me to do undoable things in short amounts of times. Also, if I couldn't complete them, he would hurt me all over again or if I didn't do them up to his standards he would threaten me." She went silent again waiting for him to comment. Fresh tears falling down her pale cheeks again
It took Darien a while to take all this in. He looked at her with compassion, "If he did all these things to you, then why didn't you just run away or tell somebody?"
Raven looked at him with anger in her green eyes, "Don't take his side! Do you know how hard it was just to get away? I had to skip school and run away with only the clothes on my back, no money, and nowhere to go! To everyone else Marc is the perfect person. He is well respected and wealthy, no one would believe me if I told them the way he was treating me. They would just say that I'm an ungrateful brat and that I should be thankful to Marc for taking me in when he could have just sent me to an orphanage" she took in a few deep breaths, "You don't know what I've had to go through Darien! My life has certainly not been a walk in the park! There is always this reoccurring dream, it haunts me every time I close my eyes" tears were rolling off her cheek and onto the dress.
'My life has certainly not been a walk in the park', "I'm sorry Rave," he said, sincerity hanging off of every word, "I would have tried to help if I had known you"
He reached out for her as she collapsed into his arm and started to weep, "Shhh, it's alright, Raven. I never said that you life was a easy, it isn't a walk in the-"
"Oh, shoot!" he gasped suddenly remembering, he had totally forgotten that he and Serena where supposed to be having a picnic today in the park. He mentally hit himself on the back of his head.
Raven looked up at him, "W-what?" worry in her green eyes.
"Me and Serena are supposed to have a picnic today," he answered glancing up at his clock on the kitchen wall.
Raven hastily stepped away form him wiping away her tears, "I'm sorry for that Darien, it's my fault. If I hadn't been here blubbering, you never would have forgotten" she started to cry again.
Darien reached out and gave her another hug, he stared down into her bright green eyes that looked at him with hesitation.
Raven blushed, "What was going on here" she wondered closing her eyes, it did not seem right coming from Darien. Yet she went onto her tiptoes and leaned back her head.
Writer: CatStar14
Canon: Translated manga?
Rating: 2
Name: Raven
Senshi Title: Not mentioned
Species: Puella angstia
Hair: Bluish black or raven, long
Eyes: Sharp deep green
Unusual Markings/Colorations: Pale skin
Possessions: None
Guardians: Tiger, a black and white striped puppy.
Origin: Her parents abandoned her. She was taken in by a guy named Marc when she was 4. He abused her in every way possible (including sexually) and she ran away from him 2 days before the story starts.
Connections to Canon: She was Princess Cat, Prince Darien's sister and Beryl's best friend in her past life. In this life, Darien hits her with his car and takes her in.
Senshi Outfit: Not mentioned
Senshi Moves: Not mentioned
Other Special Abilities: None
Annoying Traits: She has amnesia but she seems to remember everything. She calls Darien Blue for some reason.
Comments: ... No.
The story just ends abruptly because the author wasn't getting enough good reviews (and reviews in general) and she didn't know what to write about anymore. :\
Samples:
A girl with long raven colored hair stood on a balcony staring out into midnight sky, it was a full earth tonight, and she laughed aloud at the thought. She stood there thinking about her brother. He was her best friend, she could talk to him about anything. All she had to do was look into those intense blue eyes and it would seem as if all her troubles would just melt away.
Suddenly a cool breeze blew by sending shivers down her spine. She hugged her pale blue shawl tightly over her shoulder. “Where is he?” she wondered, “We were supposed to meet here over an hour ago.” Since her brother was always so busy fighting wars to have time to hang out with her during the week they had set up a time and place to meet and talk. Today she had a surprise for him. Her puppy then came scampering onto the balcony his tail wagging behind him. She picked him up, “Hey sweetie” Cat said petting his soft fur. She then glanced over into her bedroom at the young girl who sat down on her bed staring into space. “Beryl, what’s wrong?”
The brunette looked over at her friend with sad eyes, “Maybe he isn’t coming”
“No! He isn’t like that! My brother would never break a promise with me, we have the closest relationship possible!” She snapped narrowing her sharp green eyes at her friend abruptly placing her dog on the ground.
Beryl stood up with a start, “You know what, I don’t have to be here! I could be back home trying to help my people, instead I’m here trying to get together with my best friends brother, “What is becoming of me? Especially since, I am allowing you to treat me this way! I don’t even think he likes me”
“Of course he likes you Beryl” Cat lied, crossing her fingers behind her back, “Every time we talk he is always going on and on about you”
“Really” Beryl questioned suspiciously, “You aren’t just lying to me are you?”
“Does this look like a face that would lye to you?” Cat asked putting on an innocent face.
“Look there’s your chance to prove yourself, I see your brother right now over on the terrace” Beryl exclaimed pointing out the balcony door. “Wait, who is that BLOND with him?” she continued in disgust.
“Probably some bimbo from the village” Cat answered, “Lets go and get a closer look” she instructed taking Beryl’s hand and dragging her in the direction of where Darien and the girl were at.
When they arrived, Cat and Beryl hid behind one of the rose bushes, carefully trying to avoid touching any of the thorns. Though they could see Darien and the girl, they could not hear them. “Oh well” Cat thought, “I’m not about to be getting any closer. I wonder who she is?”
“Don’t you recognize that girl? It’s Princess Serena!” Beryl whispered venomously.
“Serena? You mean Queen Serenity’s daughter? Oh yeah, from the ball here on the moon, I can’t believe Darien would ditch me to hang with that blond tramp!” she whispered back.
Beryl abruptly got up, “Ill be back, no one does this to me.” She muttered handing Cat what looked like a mint.
“What? Beryl? BERYL!!” but it was too late or so she thought. “What was this girl doing here anyways? This is our home here on the moon.” Darien and Cat lived in a home on the moon and on the earth. But, Darien was always on the Earth so how could he know Princess Serena?
A few minutes later Cat started looking at the way that Darien was staring at Serena. There was a look in his eyes that he had never looked at Cat with before. That look in his eyes, what was it? It was deeper than love. It was like that this princess was his soul mate.
“I hate her” Cat thought angrily popping the mint in her mouth. Hmm, not very minty.
Suddenly she was hit with a wave of nausea, “What’s going on” Cat wondered. She stumbled around until her knees gave out. “Darien!” she called out. “Darien... help me...Darien” but he could not heat her. The last thing she remembered seeing was Darien and the princess in a deep embrace and Beryl approaching steadily looking somehow different almost witch like with a group of soldiers from her planet. A group of girls jumped out to help but it was too late.
Everything had turned into darkness...
It was a cold fall night as Darien Shields walked towards his car staring up at the moonlit sky. “It’s a full moon tonight, the cat comes out to play,” he thought aloud. Where had that come from he wondered.
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"Hey, earth to Raven?" Darien called snapping his fingers in Raven's face, she swatted it away, "Tell me about yourself, the only thing I know about you is that your name is Raven and that you have a dog-named, Tiger.
Raven forced a smile, "My life isn't nearly as interesting as yours is, you don't want to here about mine..." she muttered waving a hand at him.
"Oh yes I do! Come on tell me" he persisted, nudging her in her side.
She slapped his arm, "Alright" she said hesitantly, "Well um... as you know my name is Raven, I'm 14 years old, and I was adopted" she paused and looked at the reaction on his face, he seemed shocked, she seemed so much older than she was, "Um... When I was four my family abandoned me, I really don't remember them much, and after that a guy named Marc he took me in and..." she paused looking down at her lap and twirling and pulling on her hair, "And umm..." she choked.
Darien's eyes flashed with concern, "You don't have to tell me if you don't want to" he said putting a comforting hand on her shoulder, "I'll understand"
Raven smiled at him through her tears, "Thank you Darien, but I think I will tell you, I've never told anyone before, however I think I can trust you" wiping the tears from off her face she continued with her story. "When I was four I met Marc and he took me in, for about until the time I was 11 years old, he continually sexually abused me and when I started to fight him off he would hurt me, he would hit me and scream at me and force me to do undoable things in short amounts of times. Also, if I couldn't complete them, he would hurt me all over again or if I didn't do them up to his standards he would threaten me." She went silent again waiting for him to comment. Fresh tears falling down her pale cheeks again
It took Darien a while to take all this in. He looked at her with compassion, "If he did all these things to you, then why didn't you just run away or tell somebody?"
Raven looked at him with anger in her green eyes, "Don't take his side! Do you know how hard it was just to get away? I had to skip school and run away with only the clothes on my back, no money, and nowhere to go! To everyone else Marc is the perfect person. He is well respected and wealthy, no one would believe me if I told them the way he was treating me. They would just say that I'm an ungrateful brat and that I should be thankful to Marc for taking me in when he could have just sent me to an orphanage" she took in a few deep breaths, "You don't know what I've had to go through Darien! My life has certainly not been a walk in the park! There is always this reoccurring dream, it haunts me every time I close my eyes" tears were rolling off her cheek and onto the dress.
'My life has certainly not been a walk in the park', "I'm sorry Rave," he said, sincerity hanging off of every word, "I would have tried to help if I had known you"
He reached out for her as she collapsed into his arm and started to weep, "Shhh, it's alright, Raven. I never said that you life was a easy, it isn't a walk in the-"
"Oh, shoot!" he gasped suddenly remembering, he had totally forgotten that he and Serena where supposed to be having a picnic today in the park. He mentally hit himself on the back of his head.
Raven looked up at him, "W-what?" worry in her green eyes.
"Me and Serena are supposed to have a picnic today," he answered glancing up at his clock on the kitchen wall.
Raven hastily stepped away form him wiping away her tears, "I'm sorry for that Darien, it's my fault. If I hadn't been here blubbering, you never would have forgotten" she started to cry again.
Darien reached out and gave her another hug, he stared down into her bright green eyes that looked at him with hesitation.
Raven blushed, "What was going on here" she wondered closing her eyes, it did not seem right coming from Darien. Yet she went onto her tiptoes and leaned back her head.