You shouldn't be. It's very well written, or it wouldn't be so painful.
The situation really sucks and Sawyer is in an impossible situation. He's finally found someone that he loves and wants to be with and what he used to do comes back and bites him in the ass in the worst possible way. I hate Margo, and not because of what she's doing but why she's doing it. If she were really trying to be a good mother and protect Jack from Sawyer (whether that's necessary or not) maybe I could see her side of it. For all she knows about Sawyer, he could be lying. However, that's not why she's doing it. She's doing it because she's a bitchy elitist snob who wants to control Jack's life. I don't honestly know if she believes that Sawyer is lying, but I wouldn't put it past her to be able to see that Sawyer does love Jack and not caring and doing this anyway.
So I'm bracing myself for the very worst. I think that's the best idea at this point in the story.
I've decided that I hate this Margo even more than I hate canon Christian. At least Christian had a heart, even if it was in the wrong place most of the time.
So I'm bracing myself for the very worst. I think that's the best idea at this point in the story.
I'd say that's wise. Just remember what I said right before I wrote the next part, there's still 30,000 words to go. It has to get better, right? *hugs*
And thank you for going with me into the darkness!
Oh, wow. I don't know why I didn't see this coming, but I didn't. Margo is one cold bitch, isn't she? And good at manipulation. All the conclusions she's jumped to make perfect sense -- so much sense that what we all know really happened pales in comparison.
It occurs to me to be squicked that Sawyer has slept with mother and son, but I'm just not going there.
I like the mention of fate in the second section of this chapter. All of this feels like a continuation of what began on the island, and fate can be seen as having a huge hand in that. It flows so naturally.
I shouldn't be looking forward to the next part cause it's gonna hurt, but I want to read it nevertheless.
Okay, good, it makes sense. That's what I was worried about.
A couple of parts really hurt me, writing this. Why can't he just have a nice life, after all he's been through? Especially when he doesn't seem to want a lot anymore? Just to be loved.
DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMN. Why must you be such a brilliant writer?? Woah. But seriously, you don't have anything to apologize for. Every story must have conflict, otherwise it would be boring. And stories about our favorite boys seem to have a lot of angsty conflicts, for whatever reason, but it usually winds up being well worth it.
Of course, I tell myself this, but I'm still all "Oh, NO! MY SAWYER!!!" *strokes his hair*
*strokes his hair again, because DAMN he has nice hair*
Honestly, Allie, you have really set the stage for a beautiful story here. All of the themes you introduced with this chapter- self-hatred, guilt, blame, etc.- are so perfectly in line with Sawyer's character. I really can't wait to find out how Jack reacts to all of this. Keep up the great work!
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Wait'll you see the next part.
*cries some more*
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You shouldn't be. It's very well written, or it wouldn't be so painful.
The situation really sucks and Sawyer is in an impossible situation. He's finally found someone that he loves and wants to be with and what he used to do comes back and bites him in the ass in the worst possible way. I hate Margo, and not because of what she's doing but why she's doing it. If she were really trying to be a good mother and protect Jack from Sawyer (whether that's necessary or not) maybe I could see her side of it. For all she knows about Sawyer, he could be lying. However, that's not why she's doing it. She's doing it because she's a bitchy elitist snob who wants to control Jack's life. I don't honestly know if she believes that Sawyer is lying, but I wouldn't put it past her to be able to see that Sawyer does love Jack and not caring and doing this anyway.
So I'm bracing myself for the very worst. I think that's the best idea at this point in the story.
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So I'm bracing myself for the very worst. I think that's the best idea at this point in the story.
I'd say that's wise. Just remember what I said right before I wrote the next part, there's still 30,000 words to go. It has to get better, right? *hugs*
And thank you for going with me into the darkness!
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I knew it, that bitch! (sorry, I'm drunk, lol!)
my poor poor little Sawyer. and Jack! oh my god. He's going to be crushed. and he'll have to break his heart.
where's that snobby **** that I go kick her ass?
(mmmm. it's hard but I love it. and I'll live through the dark parts. just keep writing so the sun shines again, okay?)
love ya!! *smooch*
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We should go kick her ass together. *stabs her*
It's always darkest before dawn. *hugs*
Love you too, lots & lots! And also, *adores*
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It occurs to me to be squicked that Sawyer has slept with mother and son, but I'm just not going there.
I like the mention of fate in the second section of this chapter. All of this feels like a continuation of what began on the island, and fate can be seen as having a huge hand in that. It flows so naturally.
I shouldn't be looking forward to the next part cause it's gonna hurt, but I want to read it nevertheless.
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Oh, you know me. No stone left unturned, and all that. I'm going there. Just imagine how squicked Jack would be.
I'll reply better in a little while; I'm at commercial in Brothers & Sisters right now. ♥
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A couple of parts really hurt me, writing this. Why can't he just have a nice life, after all he's been through? Especially when he doesn't seem to want a lot anymore? Just to be loved.
Yeah, I'm totally wrecking myself. Gah.
Love you. LOTS.
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Of course, I tell myself this, but I'm still all "Oh, NO! MY SAWYER!!!" *strokes his hair*
*strokes his hair again, because DAMN he has nice hair*
Honestly, Allie, you have really set the stage for a beautiful story here. All of the themes you introduced with this chapter- self-hatred, guilt, blame, etc.- are so perfectly in line with Sawyer's character. I really can't wait to find out how Jack reacts to all of this. Keep up the great work!
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Oh, I know, but our poor guys. *cries* You are absolutely right. It hurts, though. Hair-stroking definitely helps. And you're psychic. You'll see. ;)
Thank you for being so supportive through this. It's what keeps me going. *huge hugs*
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