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smc_27

Stay A Little Longer

Apr 23, 2010 11:55

Title: Stay A Little Longer
Chapter: 1/1
Warning: I guess you could say this is speculation for a back 9 (or should I say back 7?) event. This one's not related to the other fictable stories.
Pairing: Puck/Rachel
Summary: Fictable prompt #13 - Death.
Word Count: 3,610
Disclaimer: Don't own.

( This is bigger than a broken heart or a sore wrist or a little blood. )

fanfic: puck/rachel, fictable

Comments 20

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smc_27 April 23 2010, 19:50:59 UTC

I'm hoping this is it too. I hate spoilers, but sometimes they're unavoidable. But yeah, I really don't want it to be something super crazy that's going to eff him up even more.

I'm glad you liked this! I rocked it out pretty quickly and wasn't sure how I felt. I'm still not sure.

2looney April 23 2010, 19:30:59 UTC

It was lovely and touching. Beautiful. I <3 the fictable.

smc_27 April 23 2010, 19:49:50 UTC

Thanks! I'm having fun doing it :)

becca_radcgg April 23 2010, 19:46:51 UTC

I wonder if I should withhold feedback on this one, too. Will that make you post part three FASTER?

WILL IT?

smc_27 April 23 2010, 19:49:31 UTC

Part 3 will be up this afternoon. Happy? :P

becca_radcgg April 23 2010, 19:53:15 UTC

In that case:

This was beautiful, bb! So eloquent and descriptive and SO PUCK! It's fucking hard to write him as anything but a sex-crazed maniac (by the way, I totally love the SEX NINJA REFERENCE in the other one that I failed to mention), but you do an amazing job.

I love how she knows not to force him to talk. She knows that it won't do any good, so they just sit there. And then lie there.

I think that Rachel knew that he wasn't going to try anything with her because he is really affected by this news. My heart just breaks for him.

And the crying. I love that she sees him about to break and so she works hard to save face for him, moving closer, letting him feel that she's crying for him because he can't or won't.

It was just all beautifully done.

I should get a table (if only I had your mad writing skillz!).

britt_1975 April 23 2010, 20:17:59 UTC

*sigh* That was so awesome. I love how you keep every bit of his edge, but give him that hint of vulnerability. And of course Rachel won Camp Kadima's vow of silence competition when she was 11. If there is a competition to be won... Rachel's gonna win it. :-)

I'm glad that Rachel is a cute crier... but I'm totally not... so I have to go fix my face now... that ending was a killer. So sweet just perfect. LOVE!

smc_27 April 24 2010, 21:26:36 UTC

Thanks for the comment! I'm glad you think I kept them in character, despite the theme here.

Heck yeah, Rachel's gonna win it!

Sorry I made you cry! :P

erinrachelle74 April 23 2010, 23:39:42 UTC

Perfect...love the mix of sadness & sweet. Everything you write is just awesome!! = )

smc_27 April 24 2010, 21:26:56 UTC

Thank you so much :)