And... SHIT. YOU CAN'T READ MINE NOW BECAUSE COMPARED TO THIS IT'S LIKE... RUBBISH!!!
LOVE LOVE LOVE the way you've captured Alex's resignation in this. It's the one thing I felt the whole way through. Like stuff was just happening to him and around him and he had no control over any of it anyway so why pretend to fight it. I loved the bit with Wyatt about control, because, the way I saw it, Alex had NO control and by not caring he kinda managed to regain some? Even if it was only an illusion (specific example: the whole situation with Lexie).
She pulls her hand back reluctantly, lingering a few moments longer than necessary, and then she settles into the space allotted to her, close but not too close, a thin line of mattress separating them - the physical manifestation of all the places where he won’t let her in and she won’t try hard enough to break on through.
And that will always be the problem.
THIS IS PERFECTION! It's like, my WHOLE VIEW of their relationship tied up into a couple of neat, heartbreaking sentences... GAH! I could (and have!) read this paragraph over and over and over and over...
ARGH! Someone is at the door... be back to finish this in a sec!
Seriously, out of everyone, your review means the most to me because you kept pushing me when I really needed it. Also, shut up, yours is not rubbish and I will have a review in your inbox by the time the day is over.
What I really love about this review, by the way, is that you're picking out all the parts that were either added last minute after a million rewrites (Wyatt's comment about control) or were my absolute favorite lines (the space between situation is actually leftovers from a much longer, much more dull scene that I ditched in order to keep it shorter and more to the point; I couldn't let those few lines go though).
I'm answering the next comment too, because I have thoughts and I talk too much, but thank you so much for being so wonderful. You are too kind to me.
And I'm lost for words.
And... SHIT. YOU CAN'T READ MINE NOW BECAUSE COMPARED TO THIS IT'S LIKE... RUBBISH!!!
LOVE LOVE LOVE the way you've captured Alex's resignation in this. It's the one thing I felt the whole way through. Like stuff was just happening to him and around him and he had no control over any of it anyway so why pretend to fight it. I loved the bit with Wyatt about control, because, the way I saw it, Alex had NO control and by not caring he kinda managed to regain some? Even if it was only an illusion (specific example: the whole situation with Lexie).
She pulls her hand back reluctantly, lingering a few moments longer than necessary, and then she settles into the space allotted to her, close but not too close, a thin line of mattress separating them - the physical manifestation of all the places where he won’t let her in and she won’t try hard enough to break on through.
And that will always be the problem.
THIS IS PERFECTION! It's like, my WHOLE VIEW of their relationship tied up into a couple of neat, heartbreaking sentences... GAH! I could (and have!) read this paragraph over and over and over and over...
ARGH! Someone is at the door... be back to finish this in a sec!
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Seriously, out of everyone, your review means the most to me because you kept pushing me when I really needed it. Also, shut up, yours is not rubbish and I will have a review in your inbox by the time the day is over.
What I really love about this review, by the way, is that you're picking out all the parts that were either added last minute after a million rewrites (Wyatt's comment about control) or were my absolute favorite lines (the space between situation is actually leftovers from a much longer, much more dull scene that I ditched in order to keep it shorter and more to the point; I couldn't let those few lines go though).
I'm answering the next comment too, because I have thoughts and I talk too much, but thank you so much for being so wonderful. You are too kind to me.
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