"Death Does Not Become Him" Chapter 5 Orlibean

[slave_o_spike]

So here it is.

BTW, Griffon, Joe and I saw Rambo last weekend. It was okay. Only, I think there was more blood and gore than in Peter Jackson's Braindead.

Title: Death Does Not Become HimPairing: Orlibean

Comments

[cereajeb]

amazing update! i loved sean's nervousness, and their date (poor clumsy boys). but hey, at least they didnt let their clumsiness get in the way of hot sex (yum), right? *grins*

for the most part, the chapter was funny, especially the mishaps of the date, eric, and the mention of the dachsund (little dogs really ARE more vicious; my mini schnauzer is constantly picking fights with big dogs, while they just sorta stare at him :) but parts were sad as well. its heartbreaking, that orlando gets interrupted with visions pretty much any time. i couldnt imagine having them at all, but especially not when youre in the middle of something and unprepared....

but hey, now at least he knows when it will probably happen. so now he just needs to tell sean and eric, and they all need to live (and shag) happily ever after, si?

and you know, this is a perfect opportunity to bring sidi into the picture *coughcoughwinkwink*

superb chappie. kudos!

[slave_o_spike]

Orlando always struck me as a bit clumsy, you know? And Sean a close second. LOL!

Yeah, getting a vision during a hot sweaty interlude with Sean would suck, BIG TIME! But it was an important one. You'll see...

I think I caught that *cough*Sidi*cough* clue. :)

Thank you!

[critic75]

When Orlando said, "What kind of a mood were you trying to shoot for?" I was gone. Still haven't recovered.
I absolutely loved the reality of the clumsy lovers. That is the way it is in real life. No violins, or orchestras playing. Just the crash of the vase, and tripping over your own feet.
Loved the scene, loved the lust, and loved, loved the humor.

[slave_o_spike]

LOL! Thank you JJ!

I never wrote Justin and Brian this way, because we always saw how smooth and prepared they were, and well, Brian is Brian.

But this is how I imagined these two would be, and lets face it, sex with most people would be. :)

Thanks again! :)

[pecos]

My dachsund, Sadie, would very happily protect Sean for Orli -- any time, any where.

I think my favorite thing about this, aside from the humor, is Sean's interior dialog. His timing is prefect, even inside his own head! What a funny, creepy, surprising story! Thank you!

[slave_o_spike]

Sadie sounds like Snyder. LOL!

They may look like sausages on wee little legs, but they're a force to be reckoned with. :)

Thank you regarding the fb on his timing - that makes my day completely and lets me know I'm doing my job! I always find timing to be one of the most important things in a fic.

[azewewish]

Poor Eric, man, you know he's got to be wondering just what the hell it was he did to freak Orlando out so badly. *g*

Great chapter, hon. From the awkward, yet hot sex to the way Orlando kept dancing around 'the' subject, I enjoyed every word.

[slave_o_spike]

Yeah, but you gotta admit a clueless Eric is rather sexy.

Aw hell! Any kind of Eric is sexy - except for a snarling burnt to a crisp Eric. :P

Glad you enjoyed so much! Thank you!!!!

[izzicat]

Wonderful chapter.
All kinds of fabulous.
Thank you
xxx

[slave_o_spike]

And thank you! Glad you loved!