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[slapstickhero]

█ ✫ THREE BY FIVE ··· ( oneshot )
█ pairing: Onkey
█ rating: G
█ genre: Romance - Mild Angst

█ summary:
It was ridiculously easy for Jinki to fall in love with Kim Kibum.

✫ ··· author's note:
Inspired by the vast majority of John Mayer's debut album, Room for Squares. Three songs from the album are included in the order they influenced my writing

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[jinkibumiminho]

BRB
Sobbing my eyes out.

[edit]
Okay.

He came back. He came back. I did not expect that. [you call this "mild angst" ??? I'd hate to see "extreme angst."]

I was already tearing up in the first few paragraphs. The opening alone spoke of such sadness and resignation. [dammit, I'm crying again. HE CAME BACK.]

Some of my faves:

He was leaving because Jinki was a coward; because the thought of being more than two blocks away from his single-level two-bed-two-bath rental on the outskirts of Seoul made his stomach churn and his palms sweat, and suddenly he'd be choking on his own heartbeat. Kibum was leaving because Jinki couldn't tell him he wanted go with him, since he didn't know how to do anything but stay; because Kibum could leave, but Jinki couldn't.
I think this speaks to anyone who has ever struggled with any sort of phobia or self-destructive behavior.

Jinki figured this was the part where their clothes became rags again, and their days went from palaces and horse-drawn carriages to Jinki's worse-for-wear little house with the rotting wooden porch and a taxi cab waiting at the end of the driveway.
Lovely imagery for awakening from the too-good-to-be-true dream. Poor Cinderella.

It was ridiculously easy for Jinki to fall in love with Kibum. It had been a long time since he had felt safe around another person, and an even longer time since he felt he was worth something; every time Kibum laughed at Jinki's misplaced punchlines and two left feet, it was like someone had hiked the sun up a little higher on Jinki's horizon, warming him from the inside out.
Kind of makes you fall in love with Kibum too, if you're a Jinki lover like me.

No matter how far he managed to go, Kibum always wanted to go one step further, and though Jinki wanted nothing more than to follow behind it got harder and harder to do so. Kibum wasn't stupid; he knew that Jinki's reservations were not as benign as he made them out to be but Jinki steadfastly insisted he was just fine...
Sobbing at what this portends.

He'd pressed their lips together without warning, tasting like friend rice and pot-stickers and everything Jinki thought he could never have.
What a lovely moment.

...the leftovers mocked him consistently. On one of his biweekly trips to the grocer he bought a second tooth brush, the sight of his own all by itself in the holder beside the bathroom sink inexplicably heartbreaking.
This really got the waterworks going. I remember when I lived alone how eerily quiet it could get, how hard it was to cook for one.

Despite his best effort to spare the page, it crumpled slightly between his fingers as he surrendered to his tears.
More waterworks from me, too.

Jinki walked him to the door in what was once his favourite sweater, worn out from years of repeated wear and tear. He hadn't worn it in nearly two years - not since he'd met Kibum - but he needed the comfort of the threadbare sleeves and slowly unravelling seams then more than ever before.
Wonderful imagery of life without Mr. Sunshine. Gray and unravelling.

This was wonderfully creative, realistic, and moving. I can't believe how weepy I got so quickly. I guess I'm in a pretty delusional OnKey space right now.

Don't get me wrong...I really like this!

[slapstickhero]

omg I didn't mean for anyone to cry! OTL Tissues, tissues. And for me, this IS mild angst! I could easily write something heavier, but I tend to get wrapped up in it, and it makes me depressed to do it. *facepalm*

I guess I didn't realize it was as sad as you found it in places; I was so focused on the happy ending that I suppose I didn't notice what was happening on the way there. xD

I don't think I could ever have been satisfied if Kibum hadn't come back. In my mind's eye he had always suspected what Jinki wasn't telling him, though he does have a hard time understanding it, which is why he couldn't see why travelling would have been so terribly impossible for Jinki to do.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, though! Perhaps my next oneshot will be something happier to make up for this. xD