Challenge five

May 24, 2006 17:23

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bossymarmalade May 24 2006, 17:59:26 UTC
omg, I am starting to wonder why I ever issued this challenge because you guys are CREEPY GOOD at it. Heh.

I'm still conflicted about this idea, because, actually, it's not particularly horrid, or it shouldn't be, but I'm sure there are people who think it is

I see what you mean, and in a way that makes me kind of *especially* glad you went ahead and tried it anyhow. The whole point is pushing writerly boundaries, right, and this totally fits that bill!

Tying it in to the two of them celebrating another month of 'getting away with everything else' is a really interesting way to look at it, and I think that the way you focus on Joey's eagerness and enthusiasm works quite well to emphasize how much he wants this without holding back on any of the gory detail (I had to stop and compose myself after "clots and strings", b/c ARGH).

I'm far far more disturbed that I wrote explicit!sex Joey / Kelly than anything else, if I'm honest

ahahahaha! Only in popslash, I tells ya. *g*

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ephemera_pop May 25 2006, 11:39:02 UTC
it was definately a stretch - I think that's why I like your challenges, they do push a little, and that's a good thing.

I felt like I needed a way to tie it in to being *them*, rather than A. N Couple, and I can see a younger Joey being very 'results focussed' about possibly pregnancies that could have made life very hard way back when. I toyed with writing this as a now piece, and a] it didn't work because of loosing the relief angle and b] even more realty!squick.

Really - the reality squick just makes me shudder. Blood's just blood, man.

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originalrahrah May 24 2006, 18:11:19 UTC
Thought provokingly real, it's hot.
I liked it. Especially the end.
Well written. Now I'm going to get a cold drink.

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ephemera_pop May 25 2006, 11:40:18 UTC
thank you!

[I'm wondering where the fandom steriptype of Joey being the kind of guy who likes to give head comes from, but it's fun so I'm keeping it ;) ]

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frausorge May 25 2006, 06:04:51 UTC
Okay, for some reason what grossed me out the most of all was the image of the dried blood. eek! But Joey's wallowing in pleasure is really vivid all throughout. And the sting in the last sentence is a grand way to end it.

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ephemera_pop May 25 2006, 11:42:07 UTC
hee - it's fun how different people are picking out different bits to be grossed out by ;) I think the key for me was to find something I could imagine a Joey being really in to, and then it could get written, whatever I thought about it - I guess that's the key to a lot of kink fic too - the *character* being in to it enough to carry the reader along.

Thank you!

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milosflaca May 25 2006, 22:33:51 UTC
whoooa! this is good. I have read all your fics, and scribbles and always (idiot me) forget to comment.
but yeah! liked it a lot!...the descriptions were so vivid... naughty... sexy.

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ephemera_pop May 26 2006, 12:42:17 UTC
thank you! I'm glad it managed to be sexy as well as a bit squicky - that was my goal ;)

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