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sky_dark

[Fic] Wither

May 07, 2006 10:46

Title: Wither
Author: sky_dark
Genre: Het
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Ed/Gracia
Spoilers: Spoilers for Episode 25
Word Count: 3069 (highly unbeta'd)
Notes: Written for fma_fuh_q

( when I was empty )

Comments 44

lifeinahole27 May 7 2006, 15:05:57 UTC

will beta if you wish ^_^ noticed two small errors already... but i can tell you if there are any more

~Sar

sky_dark May 7 2006, 15:15:52 UTC

please beta to your heart's content! =D

lifeinahole27 May 7 2006, 15:25:57 UTC

him undoing-- his undoing, gentle smiled-- gentle smile, her daughter birthday-- her daughter's birthday, some much-- so much, He hands-- her hands

that's all i caught. (yours)-- (correction)

otherwise- this was gorgeous and touching and wow. you wrote this beautifully.

~Sar

jess_k May 7 2006, 15:29:29 UTC

....zomfg @.@ EdxGracia... you can make any pairing awesome @.@

the only thing is.. i think she took off her sweater but then later it was on again <.<

but omfg.. very well done.. and..wow *stare* |

sky_dark May 7 2006, 18:49:11 UTC

thanks =)

velvet_mace May 7 2006, 15:39:45 UTC

I really love Gracia. Her desire to be seen as a woman with needs, and not just a widow, the bit of Hughes left behind. And I like that Ed isn't really able to do that, that he doesn't WANT to do it. He, like everyone else, has put her on a martyrs pedistal, and he's shocked when she climbs off of it and into his lap.

sky_dark May 7 2006, 19:02:20 UTC

*HUGS TIGHTLY* Thank you so much for holding my hand while I flipped out and turned into a fruit cake over this XD

ipitydaf00l May 7 2006, 15:40:28 UTC

Interesting. Never would have considered this otherwise.

Although, my brain kept wondering how he could have grabbed her sweater if she removed it. I need to stop analyzing smut and just leave it be.

sky_dark May 7 2006, 19:03:55 UTC

I was trying to challenge myself.

OMG, I fixed that XD

ipitydaf00l May 7 2006, 20:13:08 UTC

It turned out great, and you are right, most people tend to just forget about Gracia's feelings in the matter. They get so wrapped up in their own for what happened to Hughes, they don't focus on how she must feel...or they make it out worse than it is.

I know you have circe but if you ever need anyone else to check things over, I'm free to do it. I can catch a lot of little errors, part of the reason it took me a while to comment. For some reason my brain can't just go, "omg porn!" and stop functioning. XD

midnightbanshee May 7 2006, 16:07:54 UTC

Ed is uke no matter what. >D

sky_dark May 7 2006, 19:04:22 UTC

Yes, yes he is XD He is the true Ultiuke