Ending Poem

Nov 06, 2007 12:09

It’s a jail cell of a chronicle ( Read more... )

hospital, disease, poetry

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anonymous November 15 2007, 08:47:50 UTC
I like the conclusion. I like the plants turning towards the light sentiment although it's a bit flawed as a metaphor. 'a greyhound spine of heart attacks' is a nice collection of syllables.
I think it needs a lot more time in the oven, though. IMO. ;)

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skonen_blades November 15 2007, 08:48:20 UTC
Sorry, that was me. LOLZ

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