Title: The Devil in You, I Suppose
Fandom: Super Junior
Rating: Hard R
Pairing: Shihan
Summary: Enough inertia can excuse anything
A/N: For my reluctant translator and much appreciated bed-warmer,
bittersnow. I know May was a long time ago, I fail at punctuality ;__;
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I'll sing it one last time for you, but then we really have to go, you've been the only thing that's right in all I've done )
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oh man, I don't even know where to begin. I love that you did such justice to Hankyung, first of all, especially parts like Hankyung fights the recently reflexive urge to say you were never a stepping stone, but what comes out is an apology for the wrong thing, "Sorry." ;~~;
And then, you put so much emotion into every sentence omg and omg, the smut scene ;__________;. It was hot and you made me wanted to cry at the same time. You have them so perfect, I can't even. Parts like where Siwon always wants to make things better and knows but can't fix it. And you don't even have to worry about the fic being over done because you had every complicated emotion down but never going over board.
Thank you so much bb. I know how much you worried about it, but you didn't have to, silly goose, because this was great. /glomps
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I'm happy you requested this fic tbh. I was terrified of writing it and sort of let it languish in my googledocs for a long time (sorry about that >.>). But really, it gave me a chance to force myself into writing stuff I'm not used to or familiar with. If you hadn't requested this I probably never would have tried anything along these lines, I tend to stick with the stuff I (pretend to) know lol You know how I feel about the whole lawsuit thing and really lol this helped me work out a lot of that since it's my goal in life not to think about it. It was nice to sort of try and put myself in Hankyung's place or something. idk how successful I was, but I'm happy so long as you are.
ilu~ <33
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Yeah, I actually wanted to mention how much more impressed I was by the fact that despite how you feel about the situation, you were still able to bat for the other team if you will (are you proud that I made a baseball reference, huh? huh? <.< >.> -___-) because I really felt Hankyung's struggle in this. I really want to say I'm sorry for putting you through the anxiety of writing this, but then I wouldn't get this awesome fic to read.
ilu2~
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ps make sure you're free New Years because Michelle took it off and we're dragging you to Time Square, like it or not <33 (Ayesha's a big baby and chickened out, Ace did too. But I bet you could convince him to come anyways~)
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Oh smut ;; writing it is like pulling teeth lately >.>;; but thanks, I appreciate it <33
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thanks very much for reading, happy to hear you enjoyed it :D
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You can see that you struggled with this piece. It's a lot more tell-y and melodramatic than some of your other pieces, especially in the beginning before you settle into your groove, but it's still a solid fic with a lot of gorgeous lines. The last line really stands out to me, as well as some of your word choices ("eases their mouths together", "swallows around the intensifying acerbity"). I feel like you really captured Siwon and Han Geng's characterizations, especially Siwon's!-I loved their dialogue and the way they handled each other so carefully. That sense of "care" really carried through the piece ( ... )
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I'd like to reiterate again that I really did like this fic and I think it has a lot of strengths ;_; I reread my review and I don't think that came across clearly enough. Honestly I just agreed with your author's notes, because you caught a lot of it on your own and I wanted to say, yes, you were on the right track.
I actually liked the stream-of-consciousness? What makes that section so different from the rest of the piece, however, is how long its sentences are. You could probably blend it in more with the rest of the piece by chopping the sentences into shorter chunks? Or something? Idk. I'm sure you don't want to go back and edit it anymore though ( ... )
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I CAN'T
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SO MANY THINGS I LOVED ABOUT THIS even while they were taking a chainsaw to my heart ;dofigshdg
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lol jk. DON'T CRY, OKAY ;; BE HAPPY OR I'LL TIE YOU TO THE FAN AGAIN AND MAKE YOU HAPPY
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...Can you tie me up and make me happy even if I don't cry? :'DDD
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most definitely /leers forever
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