una palabra no dice nada /y al mismo tiempo lo esconde todo

Nov 16, 2010 00:48

Title: The Devil in You, I Suppose
Fandom: Super Junior
Rating: Hard R
Pairing: Shihan
Summary: Enough inertia can excuse anything
A/N: For my reluctant translator and much appreciated bed-warmer, bittersnow. I know May was a long time ago, I fail at punctuality ;__;

I'll sing it one last time for you, but then we really have to go, you've been the only thing that's right in all I've done )

format: oneshot, author: remixied, rating: hard r, fandom: super junior, pairing: shihan

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bittersnow November 16 2010, 06:21:37 UTC
/wiped out from all the spazzing i did over gchat and flops over

oh man, I don't even know where to begin. I love that you did such justice to Hankyung, first of all, especially parts like Hankyung fights the recently reflexive urge to say you were never a stepping stone, but what comes out is an apology for the wrong thing, "Sorry." ;~~;

And then, you put so much emotion into every sentence omg and omg, the smut scene ;__________;. It was hot and you made me wanted to cry at the same time. You have them so perfect, I can't even. Parts like where Siwon always wants to make things better and knows but can't fix it. And you don't even have to worry about the fic being over done because you had every complicated emotion down but never going over board.

Thank you so much bb. I know how much you worried about it, but you didn't have to, silly goose, because this was great. /glomps

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remixied November 17 2010, 17:37:46 UTC
/tucks you into my bed

I'm happy you requested this fic tbh. I was terrified of writing it and sort of let it languish in my googledocs for a long time (sorry about that >.>). But really, it gave me a chance to force myself into writing stuff I'm not used to or familiar with. If you hadn't requested this I probably never would have tried anything along these lines, I tend to stick with the stuff I (pretend to) know lol You know how I feel about the whole lawsuit thing and really lol this helped me work out a lot of that since it's my goal in life not to think about it. It was nice to sort of try and put myself in Hankyung's place or something. idk how successful I was, but I'm happy so long as you are.

ilu~ <33

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bittersnow November 17 2010, 19:31:35 UTC
/purrs contently

Yeah, I actually wanted to mention how much more impressed I was by the fact that despite how you feel about the situation, you were still able to bat for the other team if you will (are you proud that I made a baseball reference, huh? huh? <.< >.> -___-) because I really felt Hankyung's struggle in this. I really want to say I'm sorry for putting you through the anxiety of writing this, but then I wouldn't get this awesome fic to read.

ilu2~

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remixied November 17 2010, 19:41:31 UTC
BWAHAHAHAHA. Honestly, I do believe Hankyung was probably guilty and that it was, in no way shape or form, easy for him. And really, it's pretty unlikely that he did it for entirely selfish reasons. But you're right ;; this thing killed me and it was really hard to get into writing it from his pov. But at the same time, it was good for me I think. (I AM VERY PROUD, MY CLAWS ARE IN DEEP, I SEE >:3)

ps make sure you're free New Years because Michelle took it off and we're dragging you to Time Square, like it or not <33 (Ayesha's a big baby and chickened out, Ace did too. But I bet you could convince him to come anyways~)

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tokidoki_sama November 16 2010, 06:31:30 UTC
The parallel between Hangen and the Mafia drama was brilliant! Wonderful job! I'm a sucker for angst and this totally filled my need for it! =DDD Nice work!!! One thing I hate is needless smut... not that I don't like my fair share of it... but I just don't like it when it's not needed and thrown in as an after thought. That wasn't the case with your fic, you made it work and I loved it!!! =DDD Once again, brilliant work!

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remixied November 17 2010, 17:44:45 UTC
lololol I was so worried about that. Right before posting I actually considered taking it out and reworking the fic w/o it. I'm not very good with all the legit literary devices and tricky artistic things that come with writing, and I figured so long as I was taking chances I might as well try :D So it's really gratifying to hear that it wasn't utterly confusing and distracting, haha.

Oh smut ;; writing it is like pulling teeth lately >.>;; but thanks, I appreciate it <33

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followurdestiny November 16 2010, 11:29:36 UTC
Brilliant... though so bitterly sad, captivating, amazingly written SiHan love :D ...

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remixied November 17 2010, 17:46:30 UTC
/hands you shiny stickers to help you cheer up? ;;

thanks very much for reading, happy to hear you enjoyed it :D

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lark November 16 2010, 17:27:55 UTC
(This is unimportant and you probably won't care but this is microlight? I moved accounts.)

You can see that you struggled with this piece. It's a lot more tell-y and melodramatic than some of your other pieces, especially in the beginning before you settle into your groove, but it's still a solid fic with a lot of gorgeous lines. The last line really stands out to me, as well as some of your word choices ("eases their mouths together", "swallows around the intensifying acerbity"). I feel like you really captured Siwon and Han Geng's characterizations, especially Siwon's!-I loved their dialogue and the way they handled each other so carefully. That sense of "care" really carried through the piece ( ... )

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remixied November 17 2010, 18:25:44 UTC
I have like 10 minutes before class so this probably won't make a damn bit of sense and will definitely be tl;dr, apologies in advance ( ... )

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lark November 17 2010, 23:05:07 UTC
Oh God I'm really sorry this made you late for class alwek;jraslkejr you could have just waited I'm sorry! ;_;

I'd like to reiterate again that I really did like this fic and I think it has a lot of strengths ;_; I reread my review and I don't think that came across clearly enough. Honestly I just agreed with your author's notes, because you caught a lot of it on your own and I wanted to say, yes, you were on the right track.

I actually liked the stream-of-consciousness? What makes that section so different from the rest of the piece, however, is how long its sentences are. You could probably blend it in more with the rest of the piece by chopping the sentences into shorter chunks? Or something? Idk. I'm sure you don't want to go back and edit it anymore though ( ... )

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lark November 17 2010, 23:08:40 UTC
asdfa;jk I didn't even realize how long my reply was I AM SO SORRY ABOUT THE TL;DR /sobs

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moeruze_burning November 16 2010, 18:00:41 UTC
/Wipes away the manly tears in my eyes

I CAN'T

I

SO MANY THINGS I LOVED ABOUT THIS even while they were taking a chainsaw to my heart ;dofigshdg

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remixied November 17 2010, 17:49:07 UTC
/secretly enjoys watching you cry >:3

lol jk. DON'T CRY, OKAY ;; BE HAPPY OR I'LL TIE YOU TO THE FAN AGAIN AND MAKE YOU HAPPY

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moeruze_burning November 17 2010, 20:37:42 UTC
BITCH PLEASE YOU LOVE IT WHEN I CRY

...Can you tie me up and make me happy even if I don't cry? :'DDD

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remixied November 17 2010, 23:43:20 UTC
OKAY YEAH NEGL ON THAT ONE.

most definitely /leers forever

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