Shinji and Asuka, Chapter 1.4
It continues...
"No…No! Remove your finger…Oh God…" she said struggling to move away, but to no avail, she was trapped between him and the wall and he had easy access to her lower region.
Quetzalcoatl: And her strength stat had suddenly dropped 10 points too.
Fallen: Again?
The male eva pilot started moving his finger in and out of her, causing the redhead to let out little erotic noises
Fallen: Still sounds dumb!
as she tried her best to halt his finger's movement. Much to her distress Shinji added a second finger and began thrusting a little harder into her nether region.
Quetzalcoatl: I wonder why the author decided to have their “romance/angst” fanfic start off with rape. I guess it can provide angst, but I really don’t think the Evangelion characters need it...
"Fucking hell! S-Stop it Shinji…please!" she managed to say.
Quetzalcoatl: Unfortunately, I don’t think he’s going to listen.
"Your cunt is leaking non-stop, obviously it wants me to continue" Shinji replied smirking.
Tlaloc: “Your lips say no but your body says yes!”
Quetzalcoatl: *smacks Tlaloc*
"Fuck off you disgusting pervert!" she shouted with effort.
Tlaloc: Hey, that’s a little stronger than “prick”!
Aziz: Mmm, progress.
'Wow she doesn't give up, I guess I'll just have to break her,' Shinji thought.
Quetzalcoatl: Our hero!
Shinji used his thumb to rub her clitoris vigorously while he thrust into her with his fingers. The redhead cried out in pleasure unable to hold it back. She tried closing her legs or shaking her arms free, as she was unable to take it.
"Nnnnn…No! Stop!" she barely managed to say.
"I don't think I will" Shinji replied.
Asuka was growing weaker and weaker
Aziz: She was already doing that.
as he continued to attack her vagina relentlessly. The young girl was also on the verge of climaxing and Shinji knew it. The young boy rubbed her clitoris as hard as he could and Asuka screamed as she orgasmed for the first time in her life. Her pussy drenched Shinji's hand in her cum and she started panting heavily, exhausted from the struggle and the orgasm. Sweat covered both teens' bodies.
Tlaloc: Why the hell is Shinji sweaty? It sounds like Asuka’s barely fought back!
Fallen: Maybe he’s just one of those creepy sweaty dudes you sometimes see on the bus.
Quetzalcoatl: Well, it could be that she’s currently mentally breaking down since her coworker/crush is raping her.
Fallen: He asked why Shinji is… oh, well, point.
Quetzalcoatl: I mean for where her strength goes.
"That was one hell of a scream there Asuka" Shinji commented.
"Just shut up and leave me alone…you've already defiled me" she replied out of breath.
"Leave you alone? No I was only just beginning…" he replied back.
She groaned. "Why me?"
Aziz: Author preference.
Shinji then moved off her, letting her leg back down. The young boy then proceeded to remove her soaked panties, finding it slightly difficult, as the redhead had not given up yet.
Fallen: Well, good on her! Maybe even if she can’t get out of situation, she can still give him a nice artisanal castration before it’s over!
The male eva pilot still had both her arms trapped, but she could move her legs freely and she began kicking and wiggling around, trying to free herself.
Quetzalcoatl: Aim for the crotch!
Throwing her onto the floor, he then used the opportunity to completely remove them and quickly got on top of her in case she decided to get away.
Tlaloc: Completely remove what? Her legs? Her arms?
Fallen:
Still having one hand free he unbuckled his pants and slipped them off together with his boxers, freeing his erection. Asuka just stared in revulsion.
Quetzalcoatl: *also stares in revulsion*
Fallen, Aziz: *mostly just bored, have written worse personally*
Tlaloc: *just can’t bring himself to care either way*
"Mein Gott! You can't do that to me, you just can't. Oh God I don't deserve this" she said panicking.
Quetzalcoatl: Amen to that, sister.
"You don't deserve this? Ha, well you sure think highly of yourself. All you do in life is make those around you suffer, period.
Aziz: Hello, kettle. I’m the pot...
I'll show you what it feels like" he replied angrily.
"No…" she pleaded.
"It's too late for that now, I already told you"
Quetzalcoatl: Our hero, ladies and gentlemen.
With that he moved to position his huge, stiff rod.
Fallen: Maybe I’m just not dirty-minded enough, but “huge, stiff rod” makes me think of… a huge, stiff rod.
Aziz: No, I have the same issue. That description is so… euphemistic, but smut tends to fare better from being literal, so I think of it as being an inanimate object instead of a body part. (I guess it could be a dildo, though, in this context, but eh. We know what the author meant.)
Tlaloc: I just want to point out that Shinji is a fourteen-year-old teenaged Japanese male. Somehow I doubt it’s particularly that huge.
Fallen: Asuka’s never seen one before - or if she has, it was in passing and not erect! No matter what it looks like she’s going to be shocked.
Tlaloc: Good point.
Asuka looked away, unable to watch as she struggled feebly to get away. It was futile really, all his weight was on her and he had her arms pinned.
Tlaloc: As opposed to earlier, when she had just had to contend against Shinji’s Rapist Strength™
Shinji positioned his cock at the entrance to her pussy and she gasped as she felt his cock make contact with her sensitive skin. The young boy paused and looked at Asuka momentarily, noticing how she was still resisting him.
Aziz: Shocker.
He considered stopping this, but another part of him wanted to finish what he started.
Fallen: Cue one of those shoulder angel - shoulder devil routines.
Tlaloc: And the shoulder angel is a wimpy, spineless dude saying “no, stop trying to rape Asuka, she’s your friend and you want better things for her” and the devil’s being like, “no, stop trying to rape Asuka, there are a million better things you could do with her”.
Quetzalcoatl: What kind of shoulder devil is that?
Tlaloc: A nice one.
'I heard it hurts for a woman the first time, I'll be gentle at least, after all she did at least plead with me' he thought.
Fallen: Orrrr… you could, like, stop...
Shinji then gently pressed forward into her eliciting a surprised grunt from her.
"W-wait! Wait!" she said panicking
Shinji ignored her and pushed in, going a little deeper.
"Ahhh" she let out, his cock was hurting her. He slowed down a bit, pulling out and pushing back in a little more each time, allowing her to get used to his cock.
"You're taking my virginity you dickhead…" Asuka said croakily.
Aziz: For some reason that strikes me as something she would say while having consensual sex with Shinji for the first time, and that makes me feel weird.
Tlaloc: I’m guessing the author read a lot of A/S fics and is just copying those, without remembering that the context is completely different.
"You're taking mine too" he replied half-smiling.
Quetzalcoatl: I could see this belonging in consensual sex too, for example.
The redhead just spat on him with disgust and the young boy continued on. By now Shinji had slipped his whole cock inside her, painfully stretching her open. He looked at Asuka, her face contorted with pain.
Tlaloc: It’s a little sad that this is also the only story I’ve seen that admits that sex can be painful, and it’s in a rape fic.
Aziz: Clearly you haven’t read my fics.
Fallen: I don’t think he wants to. (Also, an absurd portion of those are rapefics, anyway…)
"God stop it hurts, you're too god damn big" she exclaimed.
"I thought it was better if it was bigger" he replied smugly.
Aziz: See earlier comment about how he’s probably… not… and Asuka’s just in shock because she’s inexperienced…
Fallen: Granted, that would be the case if the author actually, like, thought things through.
Shinji then started to push in and out of her, slowly at first, but then he started to increase speed. Asuka's reaction was more struggling, but she could not close her legs as his cock sank into her. The young boy felt thrilled, as his cock was in heaven. Her vagina was so tight as well as hot and wet.
Quetzalcoatl: *yawns*
"Ahhhh…Ahhh" she cried out in pain. The redhead found herself unable to suppress any noises anymore as his cock repeatedly thrust into her pussy.
Tlaloc: Why spell out the cries in pain? Just say, “she cried in pain” and leave it at that!
Fallen: Read too many doujins, imitating the speech balloons.
Though Shinji could see that slowly, Asuka was getting used to his cock and instead of crying out in pain began to cry out in pleasure.
Aziz: Because, of course!
"Oh God…Oh God…mmmmm…God"
Fallen: *as God* Yes, my child?
Aziz: Is His next course of action striking Shinji with lightning?
Fallen: And miraculously, it doesn’t get Asuka at all.
Every time Asuka moaned it made Shinji twitch. It deeply aroused him that he was making her feel good. The young boy started to pick up his speed and her moans grew louder. The male eva pilot could feel he was close already.
Tlaloc: There’s like four people in this sex scene: Asuka, Shinji, the young boy, and the male eva pilot.
Aziz: Don’t forget the redhead.
"Fuck you Shinji…fuck…you! I'm gonna fucken cum…you fucking asshole!" Asuka shouted in helplessness.
Shinji just renewed his efforts, using his free hand to fondle her breasts
Fallen: You mean the free hand he was using to pin her down? ...how many hands does he have?
Quetzalcoatl: Twelve.
and grunting in exertion as he fucked raped her.
Tlaloc: Fixed it.
Asuka came first, letting out a loud scream. Her inner walls closed around the young boy's cock and she dug her nails into his back as she orgasmed. The young boy wondered when he had released her arms,
Aziz: At least a paragraph ago. Apparently we readers are more observant than [strike]Shinji[/strike] the author.
but shrugged it off. With all this Shinji burst inside her, releasing his warm sticky semen, after which he collapsed on top of her panting. Heavy perspiration covered both teens.
Quetzalcoatl: Hopefully they remember to take birth control.
Tlaloc: The sooner this SOB is found out and sent to prison, the better.
Quetzalcoatl: To the point of forcing Asuka to carry her rapist’s child?
Tlaloc: Let’s not get into this, Quetzalcoatl...
"Whoa…" said Shinji, his head still spinning from the experience.
"I can't believe you Shinji, you deflowered me, I'll never be a virgin again" Asuka spat angrily.
Fallen: On the one hand, this is a totally ridiculous thing to be focusing on right now…
Aziz: ...but on the other hand, it’s not uncommon at all for people who just went through something really traumatic to fixate on something effectively meaningless. Like a rape victim obsessing over whether or not they’re still a virgin (like here), or a stabbing victim complaining about how their clothes are ruined.
"You deserved it you bitch, so stop complaining" Shinji replied.
Tlaloc: I find it hard to believe that the author tries to make a Asuka/Shinji romance out of this.
Quetzalcoatl: I find it hard to believe how popular this story is.
"You damn psycho, don't ever come near me again," Asuka said shoving him off of her.
Fallen: Hey, she’s got her canon strength back! I guess!
The young boy wanted nothing more than to jump onto her and fuck her all over again.
Quetzalcoatl: Refractory period? What’s that?
Tlaloc: It’s not about the sex. It’s about the power.
Aziz: Plus it just said that he wanted to, not that he did. (Yet.)
However she winced in pain as she moved to get up and Shinji realised she must be extremely sore.
Aziz: No shit?
His anger dissipated and his resolve diminished, he decided to leave her alone for now.
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"No…No! Remove your finger…Oh God…" she said struggling to move away, but to no avail, she was trapped between him and the wall and he had easy access to her lower region.
Quetzalcoatl: And her strength stat had suddenly dropped 10 points too.
Fallen: Again?
The male eva pilot started moving his finger in and out of her, causing the redhead to let out little erotic noises
Fallen: Still sounds dumb!
as she tried her best to halt his finger's movement. Much to her distress Shinji added a second finger and began thrusting a little harder into her nether region.
Quetzalcoatl: I wonder why the author decided to have their “romance/angst” fanfic start off with rape. I guess it can provide angst, but I really don’t think the Evangelion characters need it...
"Fucking hell! S-Stop it Shinji…please!" she managed to say.
Quetzalcoatl: Unfortunately, I don’t think he’s going to listen.
"Your cunt is leaking non-stop, obviously it wants me to continue" Shinji replied smirking.
Tlaloc: “Your lips say no but your body says yes!”
Quetzalcoatl: *smacks Tlaloc*
"Fuck off you disgusting pervert!" she shouted with effort.
Tlaloc: Hey, that’s a little stronger than “prick”!
Aziz: Mmm, progress.
'Wow she doesn't give up, I guess I'll just have to break her,' Shinji thought.
Quetzalcoatl: Our hero!
Shinji used his thumb to rub her clitoris vigorously while he thrust into her with his fingers. The redhead cried out in pleasure unable to hold it back. She tried closing her legs or shaking her arms free, as she was unable to take it.
"Nnnnn…No! Stop!" she barely managed to say.
"I don't think I will" Shinji replied.
Asuka was growing weaker and weaker
Aziz: She was already doing that.
as he continued to attack her vagina relentlessly. The young girl was also on the verge of climaxing and Shinji knew it. The young boy rubbed her clitoris as hard as he could and Asuka screamed as she orgasmed for the first time in her life. Her pussy drenched Shinji's hand in her cum and she started panting heavily, exhausted from the struggle and the orgasm. Sweat covered both teens' bodies.
Tlaloc: Why the hell is Shinji sweaty? It sounds like Asuka’s barely fought back!
Fallen: Maybe he’s just one of those creepy sweaty dudes you sometimes see on the bus.
Quetzalcoatl: Well, it could be that she’s currently mentally breaking down since her coworker/crush is raping her.
Fallen: He asked why Shinji is… oh, well, point.
Quetzalcoatl: I mean for where her strength goes.
"That was one hell of a scream there Asuka" Shinji commented.
"Just shut up and leave me alone…you've already defiled me" she replied out of breath.
"Leave you alone? No I was only just beginning…" he replied back.
She groaned. "Why me?"
Aziz: Author preference.
Shinji then moved off her, letting her leg back down. The young boy then proceeded to remove her soaked panties, finding it slightly difficult, as the redhead had not given up yet.
Fallen: Well, good on her! Maybe even if she can’t get out of situation, she can still give him a nice artisanal castration before it’s over!
The male eva pilot still had both her arms trapped, but she could move her legs freely and she began kicking and wiggling around, trying to free herself.
Quetzalcoatl: Aim for the crotch!
Throwing her onto the floor, he then used the opportunity to completely remove them and quickly got on top of her in case she decided to get away.
Tlaloc: Completely remove what? Her legs? Her arms?
Fallen:
Still having one hand free he unbuckled his pants and slipped them off together with his boxers, freeing his erection. Asuka just stared in revulsion.
Quetzalcoatl: *also stares in revulsion*
Fallen, Aziz: *mostly just bored, have written worse personally*
Tlaloc: *just can’t bring himself to care either way*
"Mein Gott! You can't do that to me, you just can't. Oh God I don't deserve this" she said panicking.
Quetzalcoatl: Amen to that, sister.
"You don't deserve this? Ha, well you sure think highly of yourself. All you do in life is make those around you suffer, period.
Aziz: Hello, kettle. I’m the pot...
I'll show you what it feels like" he replied angrily.
"No…" she pleaded.
"It's too late for that now, I already told you"
Quetzalcoatl: Our hero, ladies and gentlemen.
With that he moved to position his huge, stiff rod.
Fallen: Maybe I’m just not dirty-minded enough, but “huge, stiff rod” makes me think of… a huge, stiff rod.
Aziz: No, I have the same issue. That description is so… euphemistic, but smut tends to fare better from being literal, so I think of it as being an inanimate object instead of a body part. (I guess it could be a dildo, though, in this context, but eh. We know what the author meant.)
Tlaloc: I just want to point out that Shinji is a fourteen-year-old teenaged Japanese male. Somehow I doubt it’s particularly that huge.
Fallen: Asuka’s never seen one before - or if she has, it was in passing and not erect! No matter what it looks like she’s going to be shocked.
Tlaloc: Good point.
Asuka looked away, unable to watch as she struggled feebly to get away. It was futile really, all his weight was on her and he had her arms pinned.
Tlaloc: As opposed to earlier, when she had just had to contend against Shinji’s Rapist Strength™
Shinji positioned his cock at the entrance to her pussy and she gasped as she felt his cock make contact with her sensitive skin. The young boy paused and looked at Asuka momentarily, noticing how she was still resisting him.
Aziz: Shocker.
He considered stopping this, but another part of him wanted to finish what he started.
Fallen: Cue one of those shoulder angel - shoulder devil routines.
Tlaloc: And the shoulder angel is a wimpy, spineless dude saying “no, stop trying to rape Asuka, she’s your friend and you want better things for her” and the devil’s being like, “no, stop trying to rape Asuka, there are a million better things you could do with her”.
Quetzalcoatl: What kind of shoulder devil is that?
Tlaloc: A nice one.
'I heard it hurts for a woman the first time, I'll be gentle at least, after all she did at least plead with me' he thought.
Fallen: Orrrr… you could, like, stop...
Shinji then gently pressed forward into her eliciting a surprised grunt from her.
"W-wait! Wait!" she said panicking
Shinji ignored her and pushed in, going a little deeper.
"Ahhh" she let out, his cock was hurting her. He slowed down a bit, pulling out and pushing back in a little more each time, allowing her to get used to his cock.
"You're taking my virginity you dickhead…" Asuka said croakily.
Aziz: For some reason that strikes me as something she would say while having consensual sex with Shinji for the first time, and that makes me feel weird.
Tlaloc: I’m guessing the author read a lot of A/S fics and is just copying those, without remembering that the context is completely different.
"You're taking mine too" he replied half-smiling.
Quetzalcoatl: I could see this belonging in consensual sex too, for example.
The redhead just spat on him with disgust and the young boy continued on. By now Shinji had slipped his whole cock inside her, painfully stretching her open. He looked at Asuka, her face contorted with pain.
Tlaloc: It’s a little sad that this is also the only story I’ve seen that admits that sex can be painful, and it’s in a rape fic.
Aziz: Clearly you haven’t read my fics.
Fallen: I don’t think he wants to. (Also, an absurd portion of those are rapefics, anyway…)
"God stop it hurts, you're too god damn big" she exclaimed.
"I thought it was better if it was bigger" he replied smugly.
Aziz: See earlier comment about how he’s probably… not… and Asuka’s just in shock because she’s inexperienced…
Fallen: Granted, that would be the case if the author actually, like, thought things through.
Shinji then started to push in and out of her, slowly at first, but then he started to increase speed. Asuka's reaction was more struggling, but she could not close her legs as his cock sank into her. The young boy felt thrilled, as his cock was in heaven. Her vagina was so tight as well as hot and wet.
Quetzalcoatl: *yawns*
"Ahhhh…Ahhh" she cried out in pain. The redhead found herself unable to suppress any noises anymore as his cock repeatedly thrust into her pussy.
Tlaloc: Why spell out the cries in pain? Just say, “she cried in pain” and leave it at that!
Fallen: Read too many doujins, imitating the speech balloons.
Though Shinji could see that slowly, Asuka was getting used to his cock and instead of crying out in pain began to cry out in pleasure.
Aziz: Because, of course!
"Oh God…Oh God…mmmmm…God"
Fallen: *as God* Yes, my child?
Aziz: Is His next course of action striking Shinji with lightning?
Fallen: And miraculously, it doesn’t get Asuka at all.
Every time Asuka moaned it made Shinji twitch. It deeply aroused him that he was making her feel good. The young boy started to pick up his speed and her moans grew louder. The male eva pilot could feel he was close already.
Tlaloc: There’s like four people in this sex scene: Asuka, Shinji, the young boy, and the male eva pilot.
Aziz: Don’t forget the redhead.
"Fuck you Shinji…fuck…you! I'm gonna fucken cum…you fucking asshole!" Asuka shouted in helplessness.
Shinji just renewed his efforts, using his free hand to fondle her breasts
Fallen: You mean the free hand he was using to pin her down? ...how many hands does he have?
Quetzalcoatl: Twelve.
and grunting in exertion as he fucked raped her.
Tlaloc: Fixed it.
Asuka came first, letting out a loud scream. Her inner walls closed around the young boy's cock and she dug her nails into his back as she orgasmed. The young boy wondered when he had released her arms,
Aziz: At least a paragraph ago. Apparently we readers are more observant than [strike]Shinji[/strike] the author.
but shrugged it off. With all this Shinji burst inside her, releasing his warm sticky semen, after which he collapsed on top of her panting. Heavy perspiration covered both teens.
Quetzalcoatl: Hopefully they remember to take birth control.
Tlaloc: The sooner this SOB is found out and sent to prison, the better.
Quetzalcoatl: To the point of forcing Asuka to carry her rapist’s child?
Tlaloc: Let’s not get into this, Quetzalcoatl...
"Whoa…" said Shinji, his head still spinning from the experience.
"I can't believe you Shinji, you deflowered me, I'll never be a virgin again" Asuka spat angrily.
Fallen: On the one hand, this is a totally ridiculous thing to be focusing on right now…
Aziz: ...but on the other hand, it’s not uncommon at all for people who just went through something really traumatic to fixate on something effectively meaningless. Like a rape victim obsessing over whether or not they’re still a virgin (like here), or a stabbing victim complaining about how their clothes are ruined.
"You deserved it you bitch, so stop complaining" Shinji replied.
Tlaloc: I find it hard to believe that the author tries to make a Asuka/Shinji romance out of this.
Quetzalcoatl: I find it hard to believe how popular this story is.
"You damn psycho, don't ever come near me again," Asuka said shoving him off of her.
Fallen: Hey, she’s got her canon strength back! I guess!
The young boy wanted nothing more than to jump onto her and fuck her all over again.
Quetzalcoatl: Refractory period? What’s that?
Tlaloc: It’s not about the sex. It’s about the power.
Aziz: Plus it just said that he wanted to, not that he did. (Yet.)
However she winced in pain as she moved to get up and Shinji realised she must be extremely sore.
Aziz: No shit?
His anger dissipated and his resolve diminished, he decided to leave her alone for now.
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