Okay let me start off by saying that 2min isn't exactly my cup of tea. I dunno, I feel like they're too similar and might not have the dynamic relationship to make their stories...interesting? Hehe, regardless, now onward with this review!
The beginnings for me are usually the most important part. Like, fine, if the summary sounds good and I have time to spare, I'll trudge through a bad beginning so that i can finish the fic. But if I see that the beginning starts out with something totally irrelevant to the fic - like how the birds were chirping that morning or something - I'd just not read the fic. But I'm glad you started out with Minho's thoughts (and you kept some ambiguity because you didn't say it was Minho outright). But if I were to find your fic somewhere else, I probably would read the first few sentences and decide not to read the rest - this isn't a jab at your fic, this is just me being a lazyass. :P I don't have the patience to go thorough a whole couple paragraphs of descriptions.
BUT something that did catch my eye was the intense imagery you used. I'm a pretty visual person so phrases like "hushed, under his breath" and "anchored to mediocrity" hold a lot of meaning for me.
Okay on to Minho as an artist. It was fucking painful to read because ;A; Fucking Minho and his painting feels. And him smoking was /such/ a good idea; I dunno, it gives a sort of feel to him, y'know. I'm still confused about his scars on his back and I guess a bit more about his past?
Taemin, I wasn't too fond of. But then again, I guess you sort of made him like that on purpose (in the beginning, anyway)? I really liked his progression as a characters; 'cause I really disliked him for his whole demeanor in school and stuff but toward the end I was like 'HE'S SO FUCKING CUTE ALKDJ;F' so yeah.
Augh can I just skip to the fluff part and tell you how much I love it alkdfj;alksdjf; Ohmygod the whole part with Minho carrying Taemin like that was adorable AND OHMYUGOD before I forget, I like how you were consistent with the food thing; it felt like a motif throughout the fic where it was this routine thing they do - have dinner I mean - and it was sooo cool that you used that to sort of tie in with the climax (when they didn't show up for dinner and stuff).
But again, I felt like some of the stuff dragged out a bit too much. I think it'd be nice if you added direct, short dialogue that went back and forth. It'd add to the mix and move the fic forward.
Oh man I feel like I have so much left to say that's missing but a;lfjd okay, I'm done. I dunno, don't take this review all too seriously, it's just what I had in mind while I read the fic. :D I'm super happy that you did decide to write it (went through with it too) and put it on LJ and stuff. :D
Okay let me start off by saying that 2min isn't exactly my cup of tea. I dunno, I feel like they're too similar and might not have the dynamic relationship to make their stories...interesting? Hehe, regardless, now onward with this review!
The beginnings for me are usually the most important part. Like, fine, if the summary sounds good and I have time to spare, I'll trudge through a bad beginning so that i can finish the fic. But if I see that the beginning starts out with something totally irrelevant to the fic - like how the birds were chirping that morning or something - I'd just not read the fic. But I'm glad you started out with Minho's thoughts (and you kept some ambiguity because you didn't say it was Minho outright). But if I were to find your fic somewhere else, I probably would read the first few sentences and decide not to read the rest - this isn't a jab at your fic, this is just me being a lazyass. :P I don't have the patience to go thorough a whole couple paragraphs of descriptions.
BUT something that did catch my eye was the intense imagery you used. I'm a pretty visual person so phrases like "hushed, under his breath" and "anchored to mediocrity" hold a lot of meaning for me.
Okay on to Minho as an artist. It was fucking painful to read because ;A; Fucking Minho and his painting feels. And him smoking was /such/ a good idea; I dunno, it gives a sort of feel to him, y'know. I'm still confused about his scars on his back and I guess a bit more about his past?
Taemin, I wasn't too fond of. But then again, I guess you sort of made him like that on purpose (in the beginning, anyway)? I really liked his progression as a characters; 'cause I really disliked him for his whole demeanor in school and stuff but toward the end I was like 'HE'S SO FUCKING CUTE ALKDJ;F' so yeah.
Augh can I just skip to the fluff part and tell you how much I love it alkdfj;alksdjf; Ohmygod the whole part with Minho carrying Taemin like that was adorable AND OHMYUGOD before I forget, I like how you were consistent with the food thing; it felt like a motif throughout the fic where it was this routine thing they do - have dinner I mean - and it was sooo cool that you used that to sort of tie in with the climax (when they didn't show up for dinner and stuff).
But again, I felt like some of the stuff dragged out a bit too much. I think it'd be nice if you added direct, short dialogue that went back and forth. It'd add to the mix and move the fic forward.
Oh man I feel like I have so much left to say that's missing but a;lfjd okay, I'm done. I dunno, don't take this review all too seriously, it's just what I had in mind while I read the fic. :D I'm super happy that you did decide to write it (went through with it too) and put it on LJ and stuff. :D
~Prat
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but o.o;; you basically found every one of my weak points omfg but thanks <333333
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