Fic: Into you like a train. (Used, NC-17, 9200 words)
Into You Like a Train
Used -- Jepha/OFC -- 9200 words -- NC-17
algernon-mouse emailed a rough couple of paragraphs to me about Jepha getting pegged for the first time, and I wrote her back the first draft of this. She and secrethappiness liked it, so I decided to turn it into something longer. helluvalot did a first round beta, and secrethappiness brought it home. Any remaining mistakes are mine ( Read more... )
Used -- Jepha/OFC -- 9200 words -- NC-17
algernon-mouse emailed a rough couple of paragraphs to me about Jepha getting pegged for the first time, and I wrote her back the first draft of this. She and secrethappiness liked it, so I decided to turn it into something longer. helluvalot did a first round beta, and secrethappiness brought it home. Any remaining mistakes are mine ( Read more... )
It's really cool to see Jepha a little shy and unsure, learning and finding out about himself, because you don't tend to see that. He's always so comfortable in his illuminated skin and with his kink, and this really reads like a glimpse into the very beginning of all that, when he was still working out exactly what pushes his buttons. Especially here, "He wants her to call him pretty, to look at him and want him, to slap his ass and laugh at him. He doesn't know how to ask for it."
The little details in this were what got me: things like how it takes her a long time to come sometimes and sometimes not at all, the way they go way out of town and sit in the car beforehand, those interminable phonecalls at the end. It made it really, uh, real and genuine feeling. Like a memory.
His whole body feels strung tight and alive, and he wants, he wants to howl for her, to tell her filthy fucked up things, everything he's ever thought about her.
And, you know, it was fucking hot. Dude.
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Mouse was a really good influence on me with that; I have a tendency, I think, to write characters that are really comfortable, without going through that nervousness that comes naturally to figuring out your kinks. I have a lot of memories based on figuring that shit out, though, is what I'm saying, so there's a lot of territory to mine in terms of writing being embarrassed and weirded out and all that.
Anyway. Thank you so much -- I'm really glad you liked it.
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