Yeah, the prologue was a sort-of after thought. I needed to explain how the universe hangs together in this story and the rather technical prologue was the only way I could think of to do it. You might notice that there are bits of the prologue scattered through the story, but I decided to group them all together at the beginning. There is an epilogue of a similar vein that rounds the story up nicely...
My writing style is normally to jump straight into the action. I like to grab the reader's attention and get them wanting to read more.
Anisha changing sex was supposed to throw the reader a curve and make you think "What?" The fact that I used the male pronoun for the character while he was male and the female pronoun while she was female (there, I did it again) was supposed to be slightly confusing. I did explain what was going on, and you may notice that the "angels" are always "it", except when the "demons" mess with them and change their sex.
For example in part one, Anisha changes Irene's guardian into a male, and I stop using "it" and start using "he", then in part two, Anisha changes the guardian into a female and I refer to "her".
The whole point is that the disembodied spirits can effectively be whatever they want to be, although those on the side of light have to play by the rules...
So, enough about what you didn't like... What about the bits you did?
My writing style is normally to jump straight into the action. I like to grab the reader's attention and get them wanting to read more.
Anisha changing sex was supposed to throw the reader a curve and make you think "What?" The fact that I used the male pronoun for the character while he was male and the female pronoun while she was female (there, I did it again) was supposed to be slightly confusing. I did explain what was going on, and you may notice that the "angels" are always "it", except when the "demons" mess with them and change their sex.
For example in part one, Anisha changes Irene's guardian into a male, and I stop using "it" and start using "he", then in part two, Anisha changes the guardian into a female and I refer to "her".
The whole point is that the disembodied spirits can effectively be whatever they want to be, although those on the side of light have to play by the rules...
So, enough about what you didn't like... What about the bits you did?
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