My other fics on this pairing:
Pieces |
Breathing With Him, In Time |
Etched |
Utterly Spoiled |
Sense of Normalcy |
Feverish Burning |
Divide |
12 Drabbles |
Heartbeat |
Stepping Stone Uwah, I'm doomed x_x I've been procrastinating all day (and I have a project due tomorrow! ARGH) but I can't help it. Writing fanfic is always so much more
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Since you ask for suggestions, here are some ideas:
If heavy rain is unusual in the Seireitei, then Hisagi, quite literally, might not know to come in from the rain. He might not be aware of how ill a person can become from staying out in a long, cold rain. Also, Kira's house may not be very rain-proof. He may not have thought to close the shutters, and therefore may have a wet mess in certain parts of the house.
When he brings Hisagi inside, Hisagi is probably chilled to the bone. Izuru might insist that Hisagi have a good long soak in that tub. The water in a Japanese soaking tub is very hot and typically goes right up to the chin. And remember, one washes oneself before entering the soaking tub.
"Alright" is a non-standard spelling. Editors and English teachers generally favor "All right."
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Re bath suggestion: yeah, I initially did have that in the story, but it changed the pacing of the story to something I didn't really like (it made things drag a bit), so I cut that scene out. Let's just assume that Hisagi was too tired, so he delayed his bath until morning. xD Thanks for the other suggestions too!
Re alright vs. all right: not sure what non-standard means, but really? Oh, I didn't know that... my teachers have always been OK with me writing 'alright'. (Could it be because I'm Australian? Haha).
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That could be it. Spelling standards vary from English-speaking country to English-speaking country. I'm from the U.S., so I was imposing my standards on you (hmm ... we kinda have that habit, I'm afraid ... ~_~ ).
You cut the bath scene? Doh! If you ever want to send me the un-expurgated version of your story, I'd be more than happy to treasure read it! :D
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