Comments | short_takes: Set Apart - Dawn/Kristy, complete

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Set Apart - Dawn/Kristy, complete

Sep 10, 2008 19:56

Title: Set Apart
Author: Lauren
Rating: PG for alcohol use
Pairing: Dawn/Kristy
Summary: Late summer on a California beach, after freshmen year of high school. Dawn and Kristy sit together.
Author's notes: A million apologies to sportyallison7 for this being so late. Anyway! This was written for her. She wanted Dawn/Kristy, summertime, the other babysitters, and ( Read more... )

!challenge entry, author: chickwith_stick, written for: sportyallison7, challenge: 12 - dawn, character: kristy thomas, character: dawn schafer, pairing: dawn/kristy

Comments 3

amor_demi_alma September 11 2008, 17:55:22 UTC

Ooh...I'm squinting and I see Claudia/Stacey. :D I squint too much.
Nice job! :) I really like your Dawn.

elisabeth_grace September 11 2008, 20:18:30 UTC

Somehow, she'd ended up here on the sand, watching her friends from afar and strangely content to see them in her world while she herself was set apart from it.
That's a beautiful line.

I love the way you use description here. You create such a beautiful, peaceful atmosphere, one where I believe that the babysitters can live forever.

sportyallison7 September 15 2008, 05:13:30 UTC

I really like this! It's simple, but you do such a good job of showing the scenario. Dawn's little crush is adorable. She would be really surprised at the new attraction and I guess I can't see her being very into alcohol either. New experiences are nice. Very very nice! Thank you!!!