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shornt

fic: start a war (3/6?)

Aug 22, 2011 15:30

title: Start A War (3/6?)
author: shornt
pairing: Leslie/Ben
rating: PGish
words: ~4500
spoilers: Loosely based on a Mike Schur interview about season 4, but those were vague tidbits to begin with
notes: This continues to take me forever to write, so again, apologies for taking like a month per chapter. And again, thanks to fairytiger and cypanache for the handholding.

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parks and recreation, fan fiction

Comments 17

daynawashere August 22 2011, 20:32:53 UTC

HI, I'm just on my way out and don't have time to read this right now, but I will be back with a flaily comment as soon as I can - I'm so excited to see you've written another part! :D

moeexyz August 22 2011, 22:15:50 UTC

I just read all three chapters of this in one go, and jeez! This is breaking my heart, (in a totally awesome way), and just GUH! These two crazy kids! They should really just, like, make out or something. :)
I can't wait for the next part.

sullen_aquarian August 22 2011, 22:47:43 UTC

I feel horrible for saying this, but I'm having a hard time sympathizing with Leslie. She can't expect Ben to drop everything all the time for her, he deserves better than to be the consolation prize. I hope to like her again at some point in the next three chapters : ).

fromahippie August 22 2011, 23:40:05 UTC

holy shit. this is crushing my heart.

Altho I think it isn't fair for them to be around each other. They need to take a break. I understand he is helping her and that's great, really. But she is like expecting him to do all of this in good terms, like ~back in the old days~ or something. I think she is being a bit selfish.
They need to not be together cause it hurts a lot to see them mad at each other.

wooooooooow princess_george August 23 2011, 00:14:42 UTC

Wow, this is really... sophisticated. Which I mean as an enormous compliment. I do really think that there's this challenge of Leslie "breaking up" with Ben and him still physically, yanno, existing, and Leslie thinking that it might be temporary. And the way Ben in this story stood up for himself I really loved. That last fight scene was incredibly well-crafted, as was the whole thing. She comes home, he's leaning against his car, waiting for her... it was exactly, exactly right, and still kinda unexpected, and that's how the whole thing played out for me.

What I'm writing here should sound more gushy. I found this really moving. It was really great. Really fantastic writing. Thanks for it. Looking forward to more.