[Fic update] All Will Be In Order, ch 5

[shimotsuki]

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All Will Be in OrderWhen Remus Lupin moves in at number twelve, Grimmauld Place, he must come to terms with Sirius Black and a friendship too long submerged by mistrust, loss, and Azkaban. He must learn to work with Molly Weasley, who seems to be nearly as frightened of werewolves as she is of Voldemort. Clearly, adjustments will have to be

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[gilpin25]

I've read this twice now, and each time I've been struck by how quiet everything and everyone is. Grimmauld seems so hushed and silent, despite references to the cleaning and the children going on elsewhere, and it very effectively narrows the world down to Remus, a man undergoing a horrible transformation, and how the other two react to it.

It also made me think that Sirius isn't the only one trapped for apparently the best of reasons: the wolf is, too, and that was really brought home when restlessness caused Remus' injuries, and how much better off he'd have been if the wolf had been able to let off some of that pent-up energy.

I liked how Sirius and Molly are frightened for such different reasons. Molly's are the more obvious ones, but I loved seeing the start of her fondness for Remus when she realises he's not much older than Bill and sees him as an ill man with all defences down. Sirius' are obviously more complicated, filled with doubts about the past and realisations of how long Remus has had to cope by himself. I look forward to seeing what you're going to do with his friendship with Remus in the last one.

Lastly, this is filled with those lovely little moments of characterisation that just seem to 'fit' so well. I particularly liked Remus so keen to avoid being seen to stuff himself at dinner (aww...) and Molly having a look round his bedroom and taking in how neat and tidy it is. And picking up his dressing-gown. :)

[shimotsuki]

I always appreciate your comments so much, because you find things in my stories I didn't even know were there (but which maybe need to be considered more purposefully in a revised version?!). Like the theme of quiet, here...

I'm glad you liked Molly and the dressing gown. :) That hallway/tea/bedroom sequence was actually one of the first scenes I wrote for the entire story (yes, in 2007, lol), and it has changed surprisingly little since then.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment when you're surely busy with Figure Skating!

[gilpin25]

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment when you're surely busy with Figure Skating!

Actually - not for the first time ;) - I owe you thanks. For various reasons, including Figure Skating, this week has become one with not nearly enough hours in the day, but I've been wracking my brain for a useful birthday present Mr Gilpin's mother can give him next week...

...He's getting a new dressing gown.:D I always say reading is time well spent!

[shimotsuki]

LOL! Always glad to be of service.

I've been planning for (*sigh*) years now to write some late-HBP or early-DH fic where Tonks gives Remus a warm fuzzy new dressing gown to replace this one -- haven't worked it into anything yet, but it may still appear sometime. ;)