["Kaleidoscope" update] Breaking Point

[shimotsuki]

Believe it or not, this fic was originally inspired by the last rt_challenge ficathon, back in March (although I've forgotten what prompt it was supposed to be for). I've been working on it off-and-on ever since. Tonight, I decided to celebrate the end of a nastily busy work week by hauling it out and polishing it up to post.
Title: Breaking Point
Author: shimotsuki

Comments

[duck_or_rabbit]

I really enjoyed this chapter. Because I love the Blacks, I love Andromeda, and you presented her with that sharp, suspicious edge I think she has.

This scene in the book was questionably credible to me and agree with katy, 'why weren't they murdered?' Showing the after effects through Andromeda's POV is nicely handled and brings home that she and Ted were victimized as a result of their attempt to help. She, of course, would have known this was a risk, which makes her brave to have offered.

I noted a few favorite lines for their aptness to set the mood and put us in Andromeda's head:

She didn't recognize the Death Eater behind the white mask, but it was a man-so at least she knew that it wasn't Bella.

He knows what to do, she understood suddenly. He's seen this before.

and

-I will wring your neck with my bare hands.

because we know she would, and she would say it like that, too.

This was a creative and believable take on the circumstances surrounding Harry's escape, and you told us so much through character dialogue, which is hard to do, and I really believed you got all four (seven including the DE and Poppy) absolutely on the nose.

And, of course, I'm agreeing with others that the St Bernanrd patronus was as right as 90 degrees.

Lovely job.

[shimotsuki]

Thank you so much for reading and thinking about this!

I'm glad this Andromeda feels realistic to you, since you're more up on Black family relationships than I am. I always pictured her as having rather a sharp tongue even before DH -- just look at Bellatrix and Narcissa -- so I was excited to see that borne out when we finally met her in canon. I like it that she looks like Bella, too; it reminds us how complicated all the family relationships and loyalties are.

Thanks for commenting on the dialogue, too; I'm very glad to hear you thought it worked for getting information across. I'm going with the idea that Remus had planned to go looking for Harry all along. He just didn't plan on trying to run off with him or saying idiotic stuff until the shock of the pregnancy hit, heh.

Yay St. Bernard. ;)