为什么如此努力的我是一片狼藉？
100 fic challenge [#100.] Regrets, Zhoumi-centric
Title: 觅觅无敌 (Incomparable Mi Mi) Part 3
Length: 10,748 words
Author: shieldkitten
Beta: cynicalxcharm
Rating: G
Summary: Zhoumi strives to be better than average, because living his life any other way would only fill him with regret.
Part 1 | Part 2 | Author's Notes
( 你的儿子成为歌手了，妈 )
Title: 觅觅无敌 (Incomparable Mi Mi) Part 3
Length: 10,748 words
Author: shieldkitten
Beta: cynicalxcharm
Rating: G
Summary: Zhoumi strives to be better than average, because living his life any other way would only fill him with regret.
Part 1 | Part 2 | Author's Notes
( 你的儿子成为歌手了，妈 )
Fuck. No. I can't. Goddammit, Jol. I can hardly even stand to watch the interviews sometimes, because I want to punch a wall or-or break something, just snap it clean in half, every time I see them not cheer for him. It's not even entirely my bias - I hate it when one person is ever singled out like that, but add my bias and. Fuck. Why would they do that to a person? Just how can you be so blind and selfish and they're not thinking about anyone else but their own entitlements and needs, and why would you hurt someone like that? I don't understand it at all and he's trying so hard and is so cheery. It's like they have no empathy at all, haven't even heard of the concept. Crying, Jol. Fucking crying. =(((((
And I can't help but disagree with the people who think he doesn't add anything, because I honestly believe he does. He has qualities that the others don't and that would be missed, I think. He's my favourite. And I'm so biased and not coherent enough to be clear, but maybe later sometime. D:
AND THAT WAS ALL OFF TOPIC BUT BE PROUD YOUR FIC GOT ME SO RILED UP? D: D:
"And speak up!" Henry calls from the seat up front.
BUT OKAY. I DO LOVE YOUR HENRY. FOREVER.
He stops, grinning at Zhoumi's look of horror. "Someone's an internet addict."
Aww, I like how you make it light-hearted so smoothly and easily. :DDDD
"Oh." Henry sits back down. "Oh, that's actually kind of clever. I approve."
ROFL. BEST EVER. YOU HAVE THE BEST HENRY EVER. Srsly, you have this ridiculously good knack for characterization.
And ending. Love. Love so hard. I love you. This was worth the wait. And not disappointing, stfu.
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Donghae makes things light-hearted, I take no credit. But seriously, this last bit gave me so much drama. I didn't want it to end depressing, but it kept going down a depressing road, and then I was worried I hadn't put in enough happy face time with the other members to make their bandlove believable.
Thank you for the compliments on my characterisation. It's been too long since I had an English class, much less a writing class, and I don't know any techniques, so a lot of the time I'm just flailing around in the dark writing things that I would want to read in hopes that they will work.
I don't know, I would've loved this fic to be epic-cer, and I think a better author could have done a really good job with this. I don't mean that in a way to put myself down, I really think someone with a larger vocabulary and a stronger grasp on pacing and all that could've written this and made it really stand out, and also possibly found a way to include things I wanted to include, but couldn't, like filming the MV, but I'm so glad you liked it in the end!
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I think it's okay. I mean, you don't even need intense friendship connections to be concerned about another person, anyway. :D
so a lot of the time I'm just flailing around in the dark writing things
You are so cute. =( And funny. =(((
Hmm, I don't know either. I see what you're getting at, but at the same time a ~*~better~*~ writer didn't do it, you did, and the way you wrote it wasn't any "worse", if I'm making sense? What did you include was incredible, honestly, and I don't know if anyone else could've added the same details and level of realism - it might have just read as nice fanfic, while this seems so factual, and honestly, this tugged at my heartstrings quite a bit. =( I memmed it.
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