Comments | shetiger: Fic: Five Porny Ways... (SGA, John/Teyla NC-17)

shetiger

Fic: Five Porny Ways... (SGA, John/Teyla NC-17)

Nov 04, 2006 19:24

Title: ( Title cut for Return Pt. 1 spoiler )

fic: sga: five porny ways, fic: porny, fic: sga: john/teyla

Comments 24

amothea November 5 2006, 01:44:57 UTC

loved this. :) I thought you captured their voices rather well. :)

shetiger November 7 2006, 04:49:30 UTC

Thank you!

miera_c November 5 2006, 01:57:16 UTC

OK don't hate me please, I'm just confused (and yes I'm this literal-minded when reading everything).

You say She bites at his neck, and he pulls her on top of him. but then in the next paragraph when she orgasms she's "thrashing against the pillows" and then she flips them over so it seems she's on top. But she was on top to begin with, right? *is confused*

shetiger November 7 2006, 04:49:52 UTC

Fixed, thank you. :)

kalikahuntress November 5 2006, 01:58:56 UTC

I already left feedback but I just wanted to add that you've captured the sensuality of the pairing, something that other J/T writers fail to capture and convey in their writing, thanks for posting this:)

kalikahuntress November 5 2006, 05:03:33 UTC

Most other fail to convey, oops:)

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shetiger November 7 2006, 04:55:51 UTC

Hee! Yay!

ozsaur November 5 2006, 02:46:43 UTC

This is far from my favorite pairing, so believe me when I say that this is beautiful, and hot and just perfect. This is exactly how John and Teyla would be together. And you captured the vibe that they have with each other in canon. They really do have a special relationship.

Oh, and thank you again for the cute Frank-o-Lantern! :-)

shetiger November 7 2006, 04:56:26 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad this worked for you. :)

And you're welcome!