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afraid of standing still [2/4]

Feb 01, 2011 12:00

Title: afraid of standing still
Author: sherlockelly
Pairing: Dany Heatley/OMC
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: Real people, fake story.
Word Count: 25,795

Summary: Dany Heatley continues to drift violently away from the idea of the man he had wanted to be.

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( afraid of standing still. 2 )

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Comments 6

belial February 2 2011, 12:19:08 UTC

Okay, it's official. You have me in tears. WHY?

This is so beautifully written. I think the fact that the timeline keeps changing helps me stay in Dany's fragile headspace. It's going to be hard for him to learn "now" because there's only "then". Thank God for Michael.

Jeez... off to the next part...

sherlockelly February 2 2011, 20:45:44 UTC

I'm SO glad the timeline works for you. I was trying to do just that, really, keep the reader bouncing back and forth the way I wanted Dany to be. It's always in his head and I wanted those flashbacks to hit the reader with the same unexpectedness as for Dany.

Sorry about the tears! I got a little weepy at times writing it and there were a few really wretched nightmares that I was not too thrilled about. And yes, thank God Michael is there to at least be a rational voice, even if he's not always being listened to.

autumn_belias February 3 2011, 12:26:15 UTC

I didn't want to comment on the individual parts at first, but I didn't want to chance forgetting to say this:

The part with Kozlov is brilliant.

sherlockelly February 6 2011, 00:23:05 UTC

Thank you. That part touched the closest to all of my conversations with my friend that went through something similar. There's a little of me and a lot of him in Kozlov's voice and it was the most emotional part for me to write, actually.

refuse2shine August 9 2011, 02:14:41 UTC

Okay, so this is the very first hockey fic I've ever read. I saw this and out of curiosity, I had to check it out and so far, it has been amazing.

The part with Kozlov brought me to tears.

nonfictional fiction eggybread September 1 2011, 23:59:17 UTC

this is such an emotional tour de force. the way you detail the hardest things, and times and give voice to the nearly unspeakable. but nothing's melodramatic; the reality of it feels real. the part with Kozlov especially is brutally the way it ought to be. it's really an amazing, stunning piece of writing. and I'm only halfway through.