More than meets the eye 1/?blamethecupcakeFebruary 10 2011, 01:20:30 UTC
John really hadn’t been prepared for shooting. Yes there was an inherent danger when associated with Sherlock Holmes, he knew and accepted that, but there was typically an order to it all; go to crime scene and investigate, leave scene, follow clue, follow clue, confront villain, potential fight, and finally case closed. Steps may vary or be spread out over a period of time but that was the general process. So bullets flying during step one really caught him off guard
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Re: More than meets the eye 1/?
anonymous
February 10 2011, 01:32:21 UTC
OP here! *waves*
OMG, this gripped me from the very first sentence. I love how intense your writing is - and visual, because I could picture everything that was happening, just like this was an episode. I love seeing Sherlock and John work with the Yarders in the thick of the action, and this is already pushing several of my buttons, especially with how competent and on top of things Lestrade and Sally are (to the point that they impress John with their swift reflexes!). I also loved the detail of Lestrade actually being more forthcoming about information with John than Sherlock is (to Sally's frustration), which is so totally spot on for his character. [Poor Sherlock, left with Anderson (LOL!).] The tone of this feels very serious and very urgent, and I love seeing the scene from John's POV.
I am so excited about where you're going to be taking this. I'm already totally hooked and looking forward to more. :D
You rule! *huge hugs* Thank you so much! I'll be watching...!!!
More than meets the eye 2a/?blamethecupcakeFebruary 11 2011, 10:46:52 UTC
John sat with his back against the crate where he had been shoved by the two officers and he was extremely pale. At least he assumed he was pale because he felt he should be pale since he suddenly felt cold as well as sweaty and on the verge of hyperventilating. He had been fine when the shooting started, distracted by trying to follow the shot and then by Sally and Lestrades’ reaction. The shouting though, that must have been what did it though he wasn’t really sure. All he knew was that one moment he was at the scene of a murder in London and the next he was he was in Afghanistan huddling behind a wall wondering if he could manage to make it to the wounded soldier without getting shot himself
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More than meets the eye 2b/?blamethecupcakeFebruary 11 2011, 10:47:58 UTC
“John I need you to focus okay? Can’t have you going into shock or have a panic attack right now. You and I both know Sherlock wouldn’t waste a second running over here since he thinks he’s to bloody brilliant to be shot.” Lestrade’s tone was soothing and was no doubt the tone he used on all traumatized victims he dealt with. It probably would have annoyed him any other time but right now he couldn’t find it in himself to care though Sally’s blatant staring was making him self conscious
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Re: More than meets the eye 2b/?
anonymous
February 11 2011, 13:42:14 UTC
OP here. *flails in happiness*
This is slathered in awesome sauce. I love your characterizations here, the way John's awareness goes back and forth from Thomas (and his corpse) and Afghanistan to Sherlock and the warehouse. Very, very effective. I felt like I was in John's head.
And how much do I adore your Lestrade? He knows just how to handle John, pointing out that Sherlock will put himself in danger if he thinks John's in trouble. I love how calm and together Lestrade is, and how he really seems to understand. His totally understanding "Alright no touching; got it" really tore at my heart, because it not only speaks volumes about John, but it also speaks volumes about Lestrade. The fact Lestrade knows these clever tricks to keep someone from cycling back into the flashbacks... well, I'm just dying to know the back story there.
I can't wait to see where this goes next. It's amazing how immersed you make me feel in this scene: it's very intense and very poignant, just what I was hoping for and much more. *huge hugs* Thank you!
Re: More than meets the eye 2b/?
anonymous
February 11 2011, 16:56:41 UTC
PS. It also really wrenched my heart imagining John trying to unwrap the stick of gum with trembling hands, all the while being grateful for Lestrade's and Donovan's tact in not trying to help him. Gorgeous detail there.
Re: More than meets the eye 2b/?blamethecupcakeFebruary 12 2011, 09:27:05 UTC
Yea I found a ptsd sight that suggested chewing on a mint leaf or holding a ice cube since it made it virtually impossible to have a flashback since they over power the senses and keep them in the present. I went with gum since I doubt people carry mint around in their pockets. Have no idea if it works on panic attacks though.
Re: More than meets the eye 2b/?
anonymous
February 21 2011, 18:12:31 UTC
I'm really enjoying this and I'm looking forward to reading more. I love backstory fics like this, and I love how you're showing a connection between John and the DI.
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OMG, this gripped me from the very first sentence. I love how intense your writing is - and visual, because I could picture everything that was happening, just like this was an episode. I love seeing Sherlock and John work with the Yarders in the thick of the action, and this is already pushing several of my buttons, especially with how competent and on top of things Lestrade and Sally are (to the point that they impress John with their swift reflexes!). I also loved the detail of Lestrade actually being more forthcoming about information with John than Sherlock is (to Sally's frustration), which is so totally spot on for his character. [Poor Sherlock, left with Anderson (LOL!).] The tone of this feels very serious and very urgent, and I love seeing the scene from John's POV.
I am so excited about where you're going to be taking this. I'm already totally hooked and looking forward to more. :D
You rule! *huge hugs* Thank you so much! I'll be watching...!!!
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This is slathered in awesome sauce. I love your characterizations here, the way John's awareness goes back and forth from Thomas (and his corpse) and Afghanistan to Sherlock and the warehouse. Very, very effective. I felt like I was in John's head.
And how much do I adore your Lestrade? He knows just how to handle John, pointing out that Sherlock will put himself in danger if he thinks John's in trouble. I love how calm and together Lestrade is, and how he really seems to understand. His totally understanding "Alright no touching; got it" really tore at my heart, because it not only speaks volumes about John, but it also speaks volumes about Lestrade. The fact Lestrade knows these clever tricks to keep someone from cycling back into the flashbacks... well, I'm just dying to know the back story there.
I can't wait to see where this goes next. It's amazing how immersed you make me feel in this scene: it's very intense and very poignant, just what I was hoping for and much more. *huge hugs* Thank you!
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(once again, agreeing w/everything the OP says. oh verbose OP, how you help the ~unfortunate~ ones!)
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