“Sherlock? I heard a yell. Are you alright?” Groggy and deeply confused, Sherlock sat up and answered as best he could. “What…I was just in your room, penetrating you, wasn’t I?... Oh, that must have been a dream…” He trailed off. Even he could tell that the situation was a little awkward. John stared in wide eyed shock for a moment before deciding the only thing to do was to try to laugh it off. “Well, don’t feel bad. I was just dreaming the same thing.” “That you where penetrating me?” Sherlock asked, genuinely curious. “What? I- no, um in my dream you where…penetrating me as well…” he admitted. “Where your hands bound to the headboard?” “…Yes…” “How curious. And did I prepare you with one finger first, then with three? And did you love it when I put my penis inside of you?” “Sherlock!” John all but yelled. “I’m merely trying to ascertain the extent of the similarities between our dreams John. In my dream, you appeared to derive intense pleasure from it.” “Yes, that was the same in my dream.” He answers with exasperation. “Good, good.” Sherlock nods. “But I finished before you.” He realizes, looking at John’s still present erection. John realizes that he was awoken by Sherlock’s yell at the same moment that the Sherlock in his dream reached his climax, and his mind boggles all over again. “Well, that’s hardly fair. Come lie down and I’ll attend to you.” Sherlock beckons. There is a hint of vulnerability in the command/offer which suggests that Sherlock won’t know what to do if John refuses. It would be like waking up confused and disoriented all over again. So John decides not to refuse and sits on the bed next to Sherlock, who, oh look, sleeps in the nude and is sticky. Sherlock pulls John against his chest with one arm and searches out his cock with his free hand. Freeing it from his boxers, Sherlock strokes John’s penis slowly. “Have you had other dreams about me?” Sherlock asks. “Yes, I’ve been having them for weeks now.” “As have I. Not always the same one though. Last night, I was giving you oral stimulation, and the night before that you fingered me until I came, and then proceeded to have your way with my poor exhausted body. You were so forceful. ” John moans and nods his head.
“Or the one where we were taking a shower together. We were covered in lather and the water had made your skin so hot, and your muscles so relaxed.” “Yes, that was a rather good one.” He manages. “I enjoyed it as well. I also liked the one where you where naked and sitting on my lap, and I ended up using some kind of device on you. Was that a vibrator? I think that must have come from your subconscious. What a dirty place it is.” Sherlock droned on, all the while keeping a steady pace up and down John’s cock. “Sherlock, please.” Please what? Stop talking? Keep talking? John’s not really sure which he means. “Do you remember the one where I pressed you up against the arm of the couch and took you from behind? I think there was one where you where a vampire as well. At least, you seemed very enamored with my neck.” “I- am -ugh- enamored with your neck. It’s a lovely neck. Ah!” With that, John comes in Sherlock’s hand. “Well, take a moment to recover your strength.” Sherlock says, laying a kiss on his forehead. “It seems that between the two of us we’ve generated a lot of good ideas, and I’m rather eager to try each one out.” As proof of this statement, he places John’s hand on his already hardening penis, and John has a moment of shock, thinking that he must still be dreaming this. It’s huge. “Just…go slow please.” John murmurs, exhaustion and anticipation warring in his body. “Of course. ” Sherlock says, and rests his forehead against Johns, just like in the dream. “What was it that you whispered to me? Before…?” John asks. Sherlock has to think for a moment. “Ah. I said; ‘this is like a dream come true.’”
That could have been phrased more tactfully and politely, especially as the very first comment to a fill. Maybe it was unintentional, but it came across rather rudely.
No need to lecture me on the importance of spaces; I did include them when I wrote it, of course. I just didn't notice LJ had eaten my formatting until after it was all posted. ):
Preview sometimes doesn't even catch it. To be sure, you need to post it in a comment somewhere (I've got a private entry on my journal just for pre-flight checking) to see what horrors LJ will unleash.
Thank you both for the useful advice. This is the first time I've posted anonymously on LJ, so it honestly didn't occur to me that I wouldn't have the option to delete the post after the fact, but I'll be sure to take measures in the future.
DA Oh, god, I get that all the time! With me it's something weird about returns going from Mac to PC or vice versa in a word processor. Looks fine on either platform, but LJ reads one of the returns as null characters, it's horrendous. *smacks LJ* I've switched to writing strictly in .txt files with TextEdit or Notepad and haven't had the problem since!
Fantastic story by the way! I normally skip stories where the spacing is missing due to my own vision issues, but your first few lines sucked me in, so I cut and pasted and made myself a 'blind as a bat edition' with spacing and 24 pt characters so I could enjoy it fully! :D
Writing comment fic for over 10 years. You can blame LJ but the bottom line is that with preview, a complete readthrough and simply clicking 'return' more than once is far easier and more reliable than html if you are going anon.
Block text is a huge drawback for many readers. It is seen here yes, but frankly it is more the act of a writer who doesn't preview and reviee than it is an act of LJ.
And I'm sorry that LJ likes being a dick when it comes to formatting. I hear that double-spacing (2 spaces in between lines) actually helps? Never tried it before, but it couldn't hurt for future reference! And thank you for writing this fic, regardless of what other people say. ♥
I'm not going to pretend this was a great fill to make you feel better. If younwant to improve, and be a better writer you need to be told what to improve. You have a great deal to improve.
Check your tenses.
Check your spelling.
Check your punctuation.
Also, not hard to space. And spacing is vital to a good fill that will be read by people. I usually skip fills that are one block of text but I liked the prompt. Just double space and you are set.
Get a beta reader, make sure you double space and you cab be on your way to a good fill.
While I agree that people could have been far kinder, I fail to see why readers should not point out a vital error.
Spelling, punctuation and grammer is something that everyone has trouble with. In meme fics it is not something that everyone will be able to perfect or correct. However, proper spacing is a very simple thing to ensure. No one likes reading a huge block of text. Spacing is nearly always the fault of the writer. And since you have to hit publish, which makes you see the comment...it is something that can be avoided in future parts if it is--in the rare instance--the fault of LJ.
“What…I was just in your room, penetrating you, wasn’t I?... Oh, that must have been a dream…” He trailed off. Even he could tell that the situation was a little awkward. John stared in wide eyed shock for a moment before deciding the only thing to do was to try to laugh it off.
“Well, don’t feel bad. I was just dreaming the same thing.”
“That you where penetrating me?” Sherlock asked, genuinely curious.
“What? I- no, um in my dream you where…penetrating me as well…” he admitted.
“Where your hands bound to the headboard?”
“…Yes…”
“How curious. And did I prepare you with one finger first, then with three? And did you love it when I put my penis inside of you?”
“Sherlock!” John all but yelled.
“I’m merely trying to ascertain the extent of the similarities between our dreams John. In my dream, you appeared to derive intense pleasure from it.”
“Yes, that was the same in my dream.” He answers with exasperation.
“Good, good.” Sherlock nods. “But I finished before you.” He realizes, looking at John’s still present erection. John realizes that he was awoken by Sherlock’s yell at the same moment that the Sherlock in his dream reached his climax, and his mind boggles all over again.
“Well, that’s hardly fair. Come lie down and I’ll attend to you.” Sherlock beckons. There is a hint of vulnerability in the command/offer which suggests that Sherlock won’t know what to do if John refuses. It would be like waking up confused and disoriented all over again. So John decides not to refuse and sits on the bed next to Sherlock, who, oh look, sleeps in the nude and is sticky. Sherlock pulls John against his chest with one arm and searches out his cock with his free hand. Freeing it from his boxers, Sherlock strokes John’s penis slowly.
“Have you had other dreams about me?” Sherlock asks.
“Yes, I’ve been having them for weeks now.”
“As have I. Not always the same one though. Last night, I was giving you oral stimulation, and the night before that you fingered me until I came, and then proceeded to have your way with my poor exhausted body. You were so forceful. ” John moans and nods his head.
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“Yes, that was a rather good one.” He manages.
“I enjoyed it as well. I also liked the one where you where naked and sitting on my lap, and I ended up using some kind of device on you. Was that a vibrator? I think that must have come from your subconscious. What a dirty place it is.” Sherlock droned on, all the while keeping a steady pace up and down John’s cock.
“Sherlock, please.” Please what? Stop talking? Keep talking? John’s not really sure which he means.
“Do you remember the one where I pressed you up against the arm of the couch and took you from behind? I think there was one where you where a vampire as well. At least, you seemed very enamored with my neck.”
“I- am -ugh- enamored with your neck. It’s a lovely neck. Ah!” With that, John comes in Sherlock’s hand.
“Well, take a moment to recover your strength.” Sherlock says, laying a kiss on his forehead. “It seems that between the two of us we’ve generated a lot of good ideas, and I’m rather eager to try each one out.” As proof of this statement, he places John’s hand on his already hardening penis, and John has a moment of shock, thinking that he must still be dreaming this. It’s huge.
“Just…go slow please.” John murmurs, exhaustion and anticipation warring in his body.
“Of course. ” Sherlock says, and rests his forehead against Johns, just like in the dream.
“What was it that you whispered to me? Before…?” John asks. Sherlock has to think for a moment.
“Ah. I said; ‘this is like a dream come true.’”
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One big block of text is extremey hard to read, distracting and annoying.
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Oh, god, I get that all the time! With me it's something weird about returns going from Mac to PC or vice versa in a word processor. Looks fine on either platform, but LJ reads one of the returns as null characters, it's horrendous. *smacks LJ* I've switched to writing strictly in .txt files with TextEdit or Notepad and haven't had the problem since!
Fantastic story by the way! I normally skip stories where the spacing is missing due to my own vision issues, but your first few lines sucked me in, so I cut and pasted and made myself a 'blind as a bat edition' with spacing and 24 pt characters so I could enjoy it fully! :D
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Writing comment fic for over 10 years. You can blame LJ but the bottom line is that with preview, a complete readthrough and simply clicking 'return' more than once is far easier and more reliable than html if you are going anon.
Block text is a huge drawback for many readers. It is seen here yes, but frankly it is more the act of a writer who doesn't preview and reviee than it is an act of LJ.
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And I'm sorry that LJ likes being a dick when it comes to formatting. I hear that double-spacing (2 spaces in between lines) actually helps? Never tried it before, but it couldn't hurt for future reference! And thank you for writing this fic, regardless of what other people say. ♥
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Also, I didn't really notice the lack of spaces until the other reviewer mentioned them, and I still don't mind them.
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Check your tenses.
Check your spelling.
Check your punctuation.
Also, not hard to space. And spacing is vital to a good fill that will be read by people. I usually skip fills that are one block of text but I liked the prompt. Just double space and you are set.
Get a beta reader, make sure you double space and you cab be on your way to a good fill.
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While I agree that people could have been far kinder, I fail to see why readers should not point out a vital error.
Spelling, punctuation and grammer is something that everyone has trouble with. In meme fics it is not something that everyone will be able to perfect or correct. However, proper spacing is a very simple thing to ensure. No one likes reading a huge block of text. Spacing is nearly always the fault of the writer. And since you have to hit publish, which makes you see the comment...it is something that can be avoided in future parts if it is--in the rare instance--the fault of LJ.
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