for brighteyed_jill: "The Cure is Worse (The First Do No Harm Remix)"

[innie_darling]

Original Author: brighteyed_jill
Original Story Title: The Cure is Worse
Original Story Link: http://brighteyed-jill.livejournal.com/85700.html
Original Story Pairings: Sherlock/John (ish)
Original Story Rating: PG-13
Original Story Warnings: mention of drug addiction
Remix Story Title: The Cure is

Comments

[brighteyed_jill]

Oh my goodness, this is fabulous. Your style is so evocative! I loved seeing John's history with the ravages of addiction, and how that affects his relationship with Sherlock. The little tidbits incorporated from the original (the mud, the kelp, the eggs, the tea) are nice shout-outs, and I love how you've woven them in with new material to make something new and entirely different.

If I put my hand on his wrist, John tries not to remind himself, I would feel his pulse. If I touched his chest, I would feel it rise and fall with his breath. If I put my fingers inside his mouth, I would feel him running at a healthy 37 degrees. The appeal, of course, is undeniable, but John isn't going to do those things. John mostly knows better than to do those things. John knows that the best thing to do would be to go back up to his room and close the door and lie back and breathe through his mouth, careful and silent, thinking about his hands on Sherlock's wrist, on Sherlock's chest, inside Sherlock's mouth, and other things that will never

[unovis]

John knows that the best thing to do would be to go back up to his room and close the door and lie back and breathe through his mouth, careful and silent, thinking about his hands on Sherlock's wrist, on Sherlock's chest, inside Sherlock's mouth, and other things that will never happen. He knows that if he is wise, he will take what time and space he needs to let himself re-coalesce around the certain and solid knowledge of the danger inside his desire, as he has done before, as he will do again.

That's a perfect counterpart to Sherlock reining in his addiction. Beautiful construction and idea.

[innie_darling]

This is seriously gorgeous, and I'm so impressed with the way you showed the weight of these addictions on John without turning it into a sob story.

[stardust_made]

Such good writing and an interesting approach-thank you for sharing!

[call_me_ishmael]

Everything about this is gorgeous and aching. Both pairs are so quietly sad and heartbreaking, you did an amazing job.