Star Trek: The Trials of Bajor 1x01

[sherbertglasses]

Series: Star Trek: The Trials of Bajor
Episode: 1x01 'Ambassador'
Setting: about 3 weeks after DS9: 'What You Leave Behind'
Summary: Tegan Saal has just been appointed Federation ambassador to Bajor upon their reapplication for membership. The majority of Bajor desires membership in The Federation, but there are factions that oppose it. Saal has to

Comments

[eternalwytch]

*Blinks* Impossible to read in this format. Can't tell if the writing is good or not since it is just difficult to follow like this. There is no flow, you cannot feel the story.

[sherbertglasses]

I did warn you that it would be in teleplay format. This is what a television script looks like. I can switch the dialog to stage play format if it's too difficult for you.

[sherbertglasses]

Is that better?

[tonko]

I didn't have trouble reading this (I don't think I'd have trouble with teleplay either, tbh, I've worked with those a few times in school) and it makes both want to go rewatch DS9, and to see this as an actual episode. The script format actually put the visuals pretty well into my head. And it feels to me like Star Trek. So, good job :D

[sherbertglasses]

Thank you so much! I actually started work on episode 2, 'A Gift of Peace' right this second. Don't know when it will be done.

[divinelybereft]

you definitely have captured the essence of bajor, in my opinion, and ds9... keep up the writing!

[sherbertglasses]

Thank you! The second episode is here: http://sherbertglasses.livejournal.com/277290.html#cutid1
if you're interested.