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Fic: Perception

Nov 17, 2009 14:30

Title: Perception
Author: d_sieya
Spoilers: The Adhesive Duck Deficiency (duh!)
Rating/Warnings: PG-13 (for the #boob moment)
Word Count: 1,395
Disclaimer: Bitch, please.
Author’s Note: My thought process after last night’s episode went precisely like this: “HOLY S*** HOLY S*** HOLY S***.” And then I slept and managed to recover my brain, got on the train ( Read more... )

fan: fiction, rating: pg-13

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d_sieya November 18 2009, 02:47:38 UTC

Crap, thanks! I imagine that you got... nothing done at work. I wrote this during class; I know I was paying absolutely no attention. I'm glad you liked it, I was surprised it ended up being in like chronological order. Um, yeah, I mean... I totally planned that out...

spuffyfanh November 17 2009, 22:42:06 UTC

WOW

d_sieya November 18 2009, 02:48:10 UTC

THANKS. :D

arabian November 17 2009, 22:47:14 UTC

Hmm, I really liked the last line. It was a promise of an expected, well, of course! future. This was lovely, just lovely. I quite adore your writing style overall and found this filled with a delicate touch. It was seeing his thoughts, but -- as he was missing a sense each time -- it was a bit off. Perfectly so.

(Thank you for your kind words; Lordy, I'm not even sure when the breakdown will be done! Tomorrow at the latest. For sure. I think.)

d_sieya November 18 2009, 02:53:02 UTC

I was so freaking insecure about that last line, you don't even know. I was like, "oh god people are going to think I only posted like have of this damn!" (one reason I made a big bold "YES THIS IS THE FREAKING END" tag) But you got exactly what I was going for with it, the "promise of an expected future" thing, so, yeah, that's awesome. So. Yeah. Thanks, like, a lot.

takineko November 17 2009, 22:49:52 UTC

Dx WHY IS THAT THE END?

d_sieya November 18 2009, 02:56:15 UTC

BECAUSE EVERYTHING MUST END. [HUGS]

juniperlane November 17 2009, 23:00:06 UTC

OMG YAY.

Now her words pick up where the last one left off, and their lines don’t match but they mix well, somehow, and something is churning in his stomach, and it’s different when she sings the song without a being obviously weary and frustrated, and he thinks-

Yes, yes, yes, a million times yes to this sentence. I love that you went for Sheldon's POV, and this right here is perfect.

d_sieya November 18 2009, 03:04:49 UTC

Wow, that's one of the last lines I expected people to note. I actually put a lot of thought into it and into how I arranged it and how I ended it but I didn't expect anyone to actually like notice it, so to have you point it out makes me all kinds of happy. (Of course it has to have a typo; oh well.)

Thanksthanks!

juniperlane November 18 2009, 04:45:04 UTC

LOL, I seem to have a knack for finding authors' secret favorite lines and quoting them back. It's happened a few times now, and it always makes me really happy that I can spot them.

(To be fair, I totally did not spot that typo, but it's all good :D )

BUT ANYWAY, yes, I totally loved how that sentence ended. As much as the final line worked, I think that sentence was A++