Comments | she_burns1: Fic: Stages of a Storm, Part 4: Dissipation (or 'This Didn't Happen')

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Fic: Stages of a Storm, Part 4: Dissipation (or 'This Didn't Happen')

Aug 25, 2008 19:19

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ballroombubble August 25 2008, 23:32:18 UTC

I...don't quite know what to do with myself now. Um...guh.

Hottest line in any fic ever: “…should tell me to stop…please…help me…”

Oh, this whole story was so VIVID, my gods. I love you <3

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 00:05:25 UTC

Thanks!!! ^_^

I actually figured there would be more rioting, as this doesn't have the world's most happiest ending...

But you know, maybe I am working on a sequel sometimes things don't end happy.

That line is actually my most favorite in the fic. It is heartbreaking and yet hot.

I also liked the dry humping on the couch

girlofjuly August 25 2008, 23:43:45 UTC

Um, I was going to tell you which lines I liked best but that ended up being sort of impossible because oh my god, this is amazing.

The entire kissing bit...This wasn’t Bret. This wasn’t what Bret did. He didn’t kiss on the first date and even when he did, the first kiss was chaste and short and not…this. And it was most certainly with girls. But it was dark and warm and his hands, his fingers were entangled in soft hair. and then the rest, of course. Wow. Guh. That's all I can manage to say right now, lol.

This is my favorite part (at least, so far!) and...yeah. I need to go re-read it, haha.

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 00:07:01 UTC

YES! Re-read! Re-read it ALL! Drink it in!! XD

I wanted to kind of highlight that Bret would be all about kissing Jemaine - after all, on the show when he's with girls he's so ugh about the whole kissing thing.

girlofjuly August 26 2008, 00:26:23 UTC

i did reread it! haha. i cannot get over how absolutely perfect this part was :) and it's all rainy and thunder-y here so that made it even better.

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 00:34:01 UTC

Ooo - mood weather!

LOL - actually the title and all of that was me being artsy-fartsy. I was tring to express how the storm outside was similar to the one within. *hides in shame at artsy/fartsy attempt*

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ur_hed_a_splode August 26 2008, 00:05:13 UTC

aw, fuck electricity.
lovely fic, darling...
*coughcoughpart5please?coughcough*
:)

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 00:07:55 UTC

electricity = the devil

No part 5. But sequel much? Maybe! ^_*

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 11:22:13 UTC

And why have I not friended you yet?! I'm friend you now - hope that's cool.

beansidhe_baby August 26 2008, 00:11:47 UTC

OhgodsohotandincharacteratthesametimeIwanttocryitssodamngood

Ok I'm alright now. So yeah.. that was good.

I can totally see Jemaine trying to pass off a kiss as a figment of Bret's imagination ;) And you've really gotten good at their awkward!love. *loves*

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 00:21:05 UTC

Ohgodthankyousomuchthatmeanssomuchtome!

I am trying very, very hard to get better at awkward!love.

lordstarfish August 26 2008, 01:38:45 UTC

GUH, you already know how much I ♥ this! *mems*

she_burns1 August 26 2008, 01:41:58 UTC

I completely and totally ♥ you, as you know this wouldn't be anywhere near as good a story if it wasn't for your beta-hotness!! XD