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shangrilada

Two Hits

Oct 12, 2011 23:55

Title: Two Hits
Summary: For the 7.03 Comment Fic Meme. Prompt: "The cabin [in 7.03] is really dusty, so there's respiratory distress." This was the beginning of the end for me, obviously.
Warnings/Spoilers:Through 7.03.
Wordcount: 2,109
Author's Note: I don't even know if this thing is in the verse because who the hell knows where I'm going to be ( Read more... )

sammyverse, dean pov, angst:high, sick!sam, 7.03, supernatural fic, h/c, hallucifer, asthma, two hits

Comments 22

debbiel66 October 13 2011, 04:22:49 UTC

It's half-healed now and a pretty hideous rainbow of colors, and it's probably the slowest to heal of any injury they've ever had, counting the fucking tire iron Sam took to the head what, 362 hours ago? and counting that four-inch stab wound Dean got hunting that skinwalker when he was sixteen (though Sammy probably had something do with that quick healing, because there's nothing like pre-pubescent puppy eyes and the wheezy tears of a panicked virgin to make you want to take care of yourself right the fuck now) because neither of them will stop aggravating it.

This sentence? It's a work of art.

shangrilada October 13 2011, 04:25:00 UTC

You, my dear, are my favorite. I am having endless fun following you from fic to fic.

That sentence is, like, where my Dean voice happened. I was writing and that happened and I was like...um...can I do that? And it turns out I can. For thousands and thousands of words.

AND YOU GUYS ACCEPT ME *weeps and clings*

debbiel66 October 13 2011, 04:32:45 UTC

It's SO HARD to write effective Dean voice. That's part of where my awe is coming from. I mean, I've tried it many times, but it's always a push, a struggle. Yours is kind of organic, if that makes any sense at all.

*clings back*

It's so much fun to make new Sam!girl friends. :-)

shangrilada October 13 2011, 04:36:17 UTC

!!! yes! I'm a RABID Sam girl but like...he is who he is BECAUSE of Dean, and Dean's eyes are the eyes through which we love Sam, y'know? (I maintain that the series is a story about Sam from Dean's POV).

When i started writing this Dean voice, I was like...I have no idea if this is at all realistic or has anything to do with Dean. It's just fun to write. But I honestly didn't know if I was doing anything in character. But again, you people keep letting me do it and I'm going to keep writing it. :)

glimmerella October 13 2011, 13:16:46 UTC

I think Sam's hand is going to be very slow to heal.

shangrilada October 13 2011, 15:06:13 UTC

I hope they keep the scar around.

glimmerella October 13 2011, 16:36:31 UTC

It's a nice symbol of Dean's presence, even when he's not around. I still want the amulet back though.

shangrilada October 13 2011, 18:15:37 UTC

FOR. REAL. I have such a ladyboner for symbolic objects.

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crazybeagle October 15 2011, 03:51:59 UTC

Running the risk of appearing so completely and totally creepy commenting here, I did want to tell you that I have in fact read this. I think I read it the day you posted it or not long after.
That ending is genius. A pointless gesture but so very Dean.
And for some reason, the commentary on the TV show had me giggling at random points in the day for at least 24 hours after reading.

shangrilada October 15 2011, 03:52:50 UTC

!! :D

roshni06 October 17 2011, 04:18:47 UTC

This one made me smile contently.

This one is a bit different from the others but it does the vers and the episode lots of justice...actually it brings the episode on a higher lvel.

I love Dean's inner monologue. Your writing is spot on. Are you sure you're not the one who writes Dean for us on the show?

some girl who can't decide whether to leave her husband (and seriously, the guy's beating her and she can't decide, did the world get stupider while he was laid up?) haha. thats. all. i. can. say. right. now.

We never get to see this side of Dean in the show...even though its there but we don't see it and this story just seamlessly fits it all together.

The ending...
The inhaler's still on the table. Dean picks it up, rolls it around in his hand.

Then he holds it up and sprays a hit in the corner, where Lucifer was.

He says, "Suck it, bitch." It helps a little.

I have no words for this because I was too busy rofl-ing

shangrilada October 17 2011, 04:22:22 UTC

harrigan October 17 2011, 17:44:46 UTC

My favorite part of this is Sam trying to take care of Dean!

I do love your Dean voice, too. It can be a challenge, having Dean be concerned and nurturing without turning Sam into a damsel-in-distress, and you show how to do it here! Dean's inner monologue can be as protective as we all love to wallow in, but I like seeing Sam's strength here, too.

shangrilada October 17 2011, 17:46:39 UTC

thank you! yeah, I have a thing for limp but still badass Sam.