Myra's Mind

[shaggylocks]

Myra is probably one of the smartest people I know. She has a fantastic range of knowledge spanning everything from classical music to quantum physics, and she can hold her own in any conversation she might find herself involved in. I remember a long time ago, well before we were dating, getting into a discussion with her about the nature of

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you never should've pointed out that it's a story, rather than actual journaling...

[misplacedmind]

Will you hate me if I edit? It's a compulsion. You can delete the comment if you want! Everything up until now has seemed, well, inspired... but paragraph 5 seems kind of... forced, and I think that's the cause of some of the minor details that I feel compelled to point out.

the joke is never really funny to the visitor trying to clear a place off on the couch or trying not to step on anything too important while navigating my bathroom

Ok, my feeling is that since you were *just* speaking of someone else's couch earlier in the same paragraph (their would be crumbs on your couch, even though I never sat on it or ate anything while I was there), it doesn't really work to use the word again here so soon. It might sound smoother as "trying to clear off a place to sit," y'ken?

But ask me for a book and I know exactly which pile to get it from.

Personal pet peeve. I guess most folks nowadays write it off as poetic license, but I'm of the school of thought that you just do NOT begin a sentence with a conjunction. It's just not cool... nor is it necessary. You can use an elipsis from the sentence before, or you can use a "However, ..." Or you can leave it, and laugh at my anal retentiveness (retentivity? <-- haha there it is again!)

I doubt a person without my awesome recollection could live the way I do and maintain their sanity...

You need a "that" between "doubt" and "a" - otherwise, you're doubting the person, rather than the concept of that person's existence.