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20. INEXPERIENCE (PG-13) BY IAMSHADOW

Nov 13, 2007 14:46

Title: Inexperience
Author: iamshadowShip: Ron/Harry ( Read more... )

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animehime November 13 2007, 04:12:54 UTC

That was very good. :D Very misleading, in a good way. I was pretty sure at times you were talking about a massage, but then there were times I wasn't so sure. And Ron's reaction to Harry's question was perfect! lol

shadowfiction November 13 2007, 04:20:35 UTC

Because I was writing it and setting it up, I wasn't sure how well I was making it vague about what was actually going on. I didn't know whether people would instantly pick the twist, or if they would be left guessing until the end, or a bit of both. Glad you thought I was successful!

Wouldn't we all like to be massaged like that? I'd think it was worth it. *sigh*

animehime November 13 2007, 04:34:23 UTC

I'm kind of a suspicious person, so I automatically suspect a twist when it comes to plots. IMO, that you made me doubt the twist means you did a great job. :D

Me too. ::wishes::

shadowfiction November 13 2007, 05:31:20 UTC

The big giveaway was the rating. If Harry's fingers had actually been doing what I was trying to suggest they might be doing, it would have definitely been an R. :)

*thinks about grabbing partner for an extended petting massage session*

ms_worplesdon November 13 2007, 14:43:15 UTC

His breath quickens when I push first one, then two fingers into him.

Wait, what? Then where were his fingers?

*is confused*

shadowfiction November 13 2007, 23:24:55 UTC

Into the sore muscle. You'll notice I didn't use the word "inside".

animehime November 13 2007, 17:53:56 UTC

::laughs:: Yeah, that is a giveaway. I was just so excited to read the next part I forgot to look at the rating. :p

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