Brigit's Flame, March Week 1 - Luminary

[shadowdream]

I can still write the twisted. Woot! :) Another coat of polish will probably go on this before I put it up on the flame tonight...  BUT, I'm heading out the door to kayak now!!!! YAY 45 degree weather!!!!!
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Estrella leaned down to retrieve another armload of books from the

Comments

[pyre006]

oooh nice and mysterious. this is a lot better than most of the urban fantasy i have read. i think you should keep going with this :)

[shadowdream]

Thanks! :)

We'll see if the muse takes me back to it!

[so_wordy]

I love that your story has magic woven into it. It was unexpected and a nice use of the prompt. Luminary as a weaver of dreams (or in this case, nightmares). How deliciously twisted.

The transition from past to present ideas was executed smoothly. You managed to flesh out Rene quite a bit, but I'm left wondering about Allen. I understand he's the "light" to Rene's "dark," but I feel he could be explored more in another piece. Or maybe this is just my way of asking you to write more. :)

Estrella is a strong female character, and I'd like to know her better as well. Good job!

[shadowdream]

Thank you very much! :)

I may flesh them out more in the future. We will see. The story inspired me more than the characters this week, I think. :) Have you ever read the Coldfire Trilogy by C.S. Friedman? Allen is like Andrys somewhat. Best way to describe him, I think.

Thanks again! We'll see if they come back to poke at my muses..

[moo_marie]

Wow. That left me entranced and almost breathless. Very well-written.

[shadowdream]

Awww. Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[osoreranai]

This needs to be set in New Orleans. All this French culture just needs a Southern twang to be the best darn thing.

'course, it's all right without that.

[shadowdream]

You know, you have a VERY good point! That would be perfection! Her little store was in no man's land in my head. New Orleans works wonderfully! Too bad I've never been there!

[osoreranai]

That's what Google Maps is for! It lets you zoom down right to street level, so you can actually see what it looks like without actually having to be there.

[ayadec]

What an interesting world and a great idea about the power of dreams. I hope that Rene was destroyed when his control shattered, but I have a feeling that he wasn't. Do you have plans for more of this story?

[shadowdream]

Thanks! :)

I'm not certain yet. There is much more that could be written, but it will take the right muse to bring it out. I know what will happen, but in the sense of a story outline, nothing that would be interesting to read, yet.