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The Shortest Distance Between Two People by riko

Dec 25, 2005 00:31

Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two People
Author: riko
Summary: In which Sirius learns that growing up isn't nearly as easy as it sounds.
Rating: PG-13
Recipient: rian219
Notes: This one's for you, Rian! I hope it pleases.

( for lj user=rian219 )

mwpp-era, by riko, su_sesa 2005, for rian219, fic

Comments 62

rian219 December 25 2005, 10:20:04 UTC

OH. I LOVE. I LOVE SO MUCH.

This is probably going to be totally incoherent given that I've just got back from doing the Rian family Christmas, but here I go anyway. I love it. I love that all four of them are in it, and Lily too in the end. I love Sirius' rough start and how he and James meet, and how Remus knows everything and beats him up and that they're just such boys about things. I laughed at quite a few things, but I absolutely laughed my ass off at this exchange:

"You're such a plonker," says James cheerily, perching on the left corner of the bed and ignoring Sirius's feet battering his ankles.

"I know you are, but what am I?" answers Sirius.

"A plonker."

"I know you are, but what am I?"

"A plonker."

"I know you are, but what am I?"

"I will actually kill you both if you answer that, Potter," says Remus from the bathroom...

I'm laughing now just reading it back, I swear. It's just so right for teenage boys. I love that Sirius gets more and more obsessed and then there's kissing and pushing against walls in empty ( ... )

topaz_eyes December 26 2005, 20:27:11 UTC

Oh this is lovely! I loved the progression in this, from Sirius being utterly alone, to befriending James and Remus and Peter, his slowly growing realization of loving Remus, through the Prank and the ending. I like how you leave the ending open too. Very nice!

riko January 2 2006, 22:51:34 UTC

I'm afraid my love of open endings will get me in trouble some day, but I'm glad it worked this time. Thank you so much!

angelgazing December 27 2005, 05:55:29 UTC

This is so nice. It got a little bit of everything, it makes me laugh and there's nothing like awkward, up-against-a-wall teenage boy desperation in abandoned classrooms to make a girl happy.

riko January 2 2006, 22:52:26 UTC

It always works for me too. Thank you so much!

musesfool December 27 2005, 14:38:49 UTC

This is spectacular. I love how Sirius starts out completely convinced he's in the wrong place, and then ends up exactly where he belongs. Wonderful.

riko January 2 2006, 22:54:07 UTC

Oh no, my not-so super secret theme has been discovered! Honestly though, I'm glad it was clear what I was trying to do. Thank you very much.

(And double thank yous for the rec!)

amberlynne December 27 2005, 20:55:48 UTC

Oh, this is exactly how it happened and I don't think anyone could convince me it isn't. I love how Sirius rejects being a Gryffindor at first and comes to conclusions about Remus before he even knows it's Remus. Heh.

You just hit all the pain and wonder and boy of their time at school. Brilliant!