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"Lost In The Veins of This City" by hariboo_smirks and kalesbohan

Aug 07, 2008 00:39

Title
Lost In The Veins of This City

Author

hariboo_smirks and kalesbohan

Prompt
Big Bang 2008. Totally AU.

Summary
As the death toll rises in the city of Atlantis, detectives Elizabeth Weir and John Sheppard attempt to find the source of the problem, but all is not as it seems and what begins as a simple case may change their world, again.

Pairing

Sheppard/Weir ( Read more... )

Comments 21

kathpup August 16 2008, 00:21:14 UTC

EPIC AND AWESOME AND OMG SQUEE FLAILS DIES!!!!!

But then you knew I'd think that anyway.

hariboo September 1 2008, 17:27:58 UTC

HEE. *HUGGLES YOU*

Well, yes. But it's always nice to hear. :D

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hariboo September 1 2008, 17:57:46 UTC

*GLEE* Dude! Thank you for such a wonderful review!

The tension, the angst, the history between them - it all came to a forefront and then just EXPLODED.

Hee, thanks! The fight was such the pinnacle point for the fic, because really, that was the climax in many ways. The case mattered, of course, but this was all about John and Elizabeth and their relationship. Plus it was insane to write. Me and Kay literally IM'd the entire thing, we don't even know who wrote what anymore, and thankfully it all worked out. *G*

It was a very pretty style. Wonderful description. I can see the chair as well as the history behind it.

The style came as a surprise to be honest, and all the pretty? *points to Kay* She totally made this prettier.

YAYZ on the humour! And yes, John totally blogs. ;)

CAMERON! OMG, CAMORON AS LORNE'S PARTNER. OMG. OMG. OMG. *BRAIN EXPLODES*LOL. I think was our reaction when we came up with the idea. CAM IS LOVE. And we love writing him. And Jack. He was our opener and closer, the patriarch of this crazy crew and he ( ... )

peanutbutterer August 19 2008, 05:05:58 UTC

Wow. Awesome job, guys. Really, really awesome.

The thing about the city, John thinks, is that if you really want to kill yourself it'll do nothing but give you another meter to fall.

You have a unique writing style that took me a while to get used to, but once I did? It couldn't have been written any other way. The voices were perfect for the style and mood of the piece.

Favorite parts? So many!

The John/Elizabeth fight, of course, was fantastic.

John shrugs the coat on, the lapels sticking up hideously - something she normally fixes - and moves towards the door.

I love the little details you guys throw in throughout the fic that seem inconsequential but really illustrate something deeper - adding another layer and more substance to their story.

The Mitchell, Lorne, John morning was great. I love the idea of the three of them as friends.

"Don't, Sheppard - with his luck, the bullet will just bounce off of that fucking machine and hit one of us."

Hee.

Rodney and Elizabeth as partners! *loves*

"Do I need to mention ( ... )

hariboo September 1 2008, 18:13:52 UTC

You have a unique writing style that took me a while to get used to, but once I did? It couldn't have been written any other way. The voices were perfect for the style and mood of the piece.

Thanks! The style sorta snuck up on us, well, I can't speak for Kay, so it snuck up on me. It was very different than anything I had written, especially for a long fic, but once we started with it, like you said, we couldn't write in another way. Glad you liked it. :)

The John/Elizabeth fight, of course, was fantastic.

I still don't really remember the night we wrote it, so I'm VERY glad it came across so well.

Mitchell, Lorne, Rodney, Ronon and all the other side character were so fun to write. Their relationship with J/E together, with them separately, with the verse itself, so fun to figure out and play with. We're so happy that it comes across in the fic too.

Excellent work, you two. Fantastic read.

Thank you! :D And thanks for reviewing.

odakota_rose August 20 2008, 01:30:02 UTC

Okay, you know what I think? Y'all are just absurdly modest, that's what. This is brilliant and that's all there is to it. The case has that perfect mix of intrigue, danger, and so many of the characters I love (and in some cases love to hate) from the series mixed in, oftentimes in ways I totally wasn't expecting. *g*
And John and Elizabeth. Okay, you really and truly don't know how many times I squeed during this fic. Oi. They were so recognizable, despite being in a complete and total AU. Plus, they were recognizably dense about how they felt about each othere, hehe. *knocks them on the head fondly*
And Jack. I ♥ Jack. :D
The whole team really, it was great seeing the whole gang together again.
*hugs you both*
This was an excellent read, I'm saving it to my computer so I can read it a few more times..

hariboo September 1 2008, 18:24:32 UTC

Dude. *blushes* Thank you, hun!

The case has that perfect mix of intrigue, danger, and so many of the characters I love (and in some cases love to hate) from the series mixed in, oftentimes in ways I totally wasn't expecting. *g*

Mission accomplished then! *G* We were so happy when the case meshed together, sometimes it felt like it wasn't even our doing, and yeah, that sounds weird, but sometimes it felt that way.

They were so recognizable, despite being in a complete and total AU. They were so recognizable, despite being in a complete and total AU. Plus, they were recognizably dense about how they felt about each other, hehe.

Hee, they're so clueless for such a long time it's hard not to love them. :) It was tough *not* to have the whole gang there, you know? They're just want to play and we love letting them!

the_scary_kitty August 22 2008, 04:01:27 UTC

WOW. Just like.... WOW. This was such a gripping story; like irony_rocks, I had to read the whole thing in one sitting. The level of detail and the intricacy of the character interactions really made the story come alive in a way that few stories achieve. The action sequences were awesome and if they were ever to be put to film, they'd probably make the special effects team pee their pants. I would kill to see that last sequence in Kolya's mansion filmed. :D ( ... )

hariboo September 1 2008, 18:37:56 UTC

Thank you!

The action sequences were awesome and if they were ever to be put to film, they'd probably make the special effects team pee their pants. I would kill to see that last sequence in Kolya's mansion filmed. :D

WOO! YAY! I feared the action scenes and so this comment? YOU MADE MY DAY.

Another woo! on the Radi twist; we really loved putting that in.

They're so much the same, and yet so different, and not just in how this Elizabeth has no problem with picking up a gun and shooting bad guys.

Thank you for this. Elizabeth being able to handle a gun in this verse was important as she cop/PI, but it's such a departure for her character on the show (TLG notwithstanding) that it had the potential of feeling very wrong. Relief it didn't! :D

We're glad you enjoy the fic!