Fic: Fracture (Gen, PG13)

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Title: Fracture
Author: kriadydragon
Recipient: obsessed1o1
Pairing: gen
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I don't own Stargate: Atlantis
Author's Notes: Massive thanks, as always, to my beta wildcat88
Summary: Another day, another planet, another Ancient device wreaking havoc on John's head, sending him on a trip down memory lane.

Comments

[penknife]

I like the blurring of the past and the present in this, with John trying to stay focused on what's going on here and now and still kind of failing. And I liked the glimpses of his life before Atlantis, and the team saving the day and being there for John. Nice.

[kriadydragon]

Thank you :D I love being able to write John back story, even if it's just glimpses.

[vipersweb]

Really nice. I like that you go into John's past in this & that he has difficulty in remembering where and when he is. Nice illustration of problems with Ancient technology, even if it wasn't his fault. Like the description of the Morlans too. :o)

[kriadydragon]

Thanks :D I love a disoriented Shep, and love exploring his past when I can.

[obsessed1o1]

Oh this was a lovely dose of angst and hurt. I love John's confusion and the merging of the past and the present and how it's really messed him up. I love that i had the team saving him and Rodney was wonderfully snarky as usual! And the Morlans - great comparison to Afghanistan. My favourite stories are the ones that focus on John's backstory. Just what i needed on a cold December evening. Thank you!!! I love it!

[kriadydragon]

Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it :D I love a good John back story myself, so like to incorporate his past where and when I can.

[tzzzz]

That was great. Thanks for writing!

[kriadydragon]

Thanks for reading :D

[a_blackpanther]

OOh, very good. I really like this fic, and all of the team's interactions. And John trying his best to help his team survive. I also liked the insight into John's past.

having a DR in front of my name
This is minor, but i think changing DR to Dr. might help people get the joke on the first read. I read it as D R, went 'huh?' and then realized he meant Dr.

[a_blackpanther]

Thank you muchly.

The DR is on purpose, as I wanted it read as D R and not as doctor.

[a_blackpanther]

Really? Why?

[a_blackpanther]

Because Rodney's spelling the abbreviation, not saying 'doctor,' and I wasn't sure how else to get that across.