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Action/Adventure, Week 1: Bibula Harena (2/2)

Apr 03, 2008 20:37

Title: Bibula Harena (Part 2)
Author: jadesfire2808
Prompt: Slavery, captivity or hostages
Word Count: 17,000
Rating: M
Warnings/Spoilers: Violence/None
Summary: This is all there is, the stick in his hand, the knife in his belt, the crowd roaring around him, and the man he has to kill.

( Bibula Harena, part two )

prompt:captivity, genre:action

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jadesfire April 22 2008, 08:56:45 UTC

Thanks - that's pretty much everything I was going for! Really glad you enjoyed.

kriadydragon April 4 2008, 05:43:35 UTC

Excellent. That was so intense it actually got my heart pounding.

jadesfire April 22 2008, 08:57:21 UTC

*grin* Yay! glad it worked!

Thanks :)

naye April 4 2008, 08:16:13 UTC

A perfect story for action/adventure day! Really intense, and great POVs, with John and Rodney each surviving because they're too stubborn and too smart and too dedicated to each other and their home to give up. Loved that John could still draw strength from Ronon and Teyla, even after not seeing them for six months. Mmm. Now I hope they get a long, well-deserved break, safely together with their team. And maybe chocolate cake, too. ♥

jadesfire April 22 2008, 08:58:06 UTC

I don't normally write with switching POVs, so I'm chuffed that came off. And there is definitely going to be chocolate cake :)

Thanks! Really glad you enjoyed.

linzi5 April 4 2008, 09:06:54 UTC

Very exciting! A really riveting story which gathered momentum wonderfully. Great descriptions of the fighting, I could 'see' it playing out in my head. I love how John and Rodney both have the strength of character to survive, to get back home. Great job. But six months away? Goodness...poor boys! :(

jadesfire April 22 2008, 08:59:16 UTC

I could 'see' it playing out in my head.
*punches air* Thank you so much! This was even more visually intense than I usually write, and I was a bit worried that I was going to be the only one who could 'see' it. Really glad you enjoyed :)

mellaithwen April 4 2008, 11:48:47 UTC

oh that was beyond awesome :D

ESPECIALLY He knows he's hallucinating, knows that the fever has gone to his head, making him punch drunk, but he swears he can hear Teyla's voice, Ronon's voice, that he can feel them at his back, urging him on. Calling him home. that :D

jadesfire April 22 2008, 08:59:51 UTC

Thank you! Really glad you enjoyed :)