Friendship, Week 1: Even Bonnie & Clyde Had Off Days

[sholio]

Title: Even Bonnie and Clyde Had Off Days
Author: friendshipper
Prompt: Illegal
Word Count: 3200
Rating: PG
Warnings/Spoilers: Takes place between "Lifeline" and "Reunion".
Summary: Teyla is thrown in jail when she accidentally violates a local custom, and Ronon breaks her out, whether she wants him to or not.

Comments

[naye]

...! *flail*

This is AWESOME! So very much love for everything about this story, you have no idea. I'm impressed and awed and most importantly of all - grinning hugely. This is such a perfect story - the pacing of it, the way it all develops from a simple misunderstanding. Nobody is being evil, Teyla was doing fine, and yet there is a lovely tension to the jail scene, and even more to the chase, since our guys are so clearly in the wrong here.

Fantastic characterizations - it made me happier than I can say to read about Teyla and Ronon having adventures together, and in this perfect tone. The revelation that Ronon had a twin sister - yep, that explains a lot. This captures everything I love about the two characters, and how they are together. Fighting about who gets to execute the most dangerous part of the plan made me squee, because it's totally them! (And Ronon is sneaky enough to have a fire-water-wood secret strategy, eee! Which wouldn't have worked unless Teyla had been smart enough to pay attention all the previous times they

[sholio]

... and now I can flail back at you! :D

Thank you SO much -- my original idea was to do a "John and Rodney" type adventure with Teyla and Ronon, because I'd realized through a discussion I was having somewhere else (I can't even remember where, now) that one of the main things that draws me to writing them as much as I do is that I love writing the banter and putting them in silly or bizarre situations. And I really wanted to see if the same sort of thing would work with Teyla and Ronon, because they're *well* overdue for a dorky adventure of their own. I love their brother-sister vibe and wanted to bring that out, and I also loved the role reversal that this time it's *Teyla* who gets in trouble!

Thank you for the comment. ^_^

[sholio]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it and I must admit I giggled when I was writing that line. :D

[roga]

Hee! Aw, this was so cute. Fantastic dialogue, and the plot, and Ronon having a sister - my heart, how have I never thought of that before? - and just, all the Ronon and Teyla love. I wanted to hug them both throughout this.

I certainly did not know that 'good fortune' is a local euphemism for death.

Oh, Pegasus, you crazy thing. I can so see that happening.

And this exchange: "Thank you for freeing me from the Matawnee." ... "I suggest that you take the legal option." -- so adorable! And yay, the ending. Many lols :-)

[sholio]

*g* Thank you so much! I really had a wonderful time writing this (it's about time Ronon and Teyla had their own screwball adventure!) and I'm so glad you liked it! The idea of Ronon having a sister both delights and breaks me.

[xparrot]

Jail! Lizards! Seasickness on sinking boats! Footraces! Chuck! This was wonderful fun XD And Teyla & Ronon make a great Bonnie & Clyde indeed.

[sholio]

Thank you! I'm delighted that you liked it! They were well overdue for their own crazy Pegasus Galaxy adventure...

[jadesfire]

Oh wow. This is just wonderful. I love the 'water, fire, wood' (genius!) and the casual punching and the promise of bruises but this:

"My hatred of you keeps me warm," Teyla said conversationally

this is perfect and priceless. They both sound so much like themselves, and you've caught Teyla's mixture of calm and annoyance just perfectly. Wonderful!

[sholio]

Thank you so much! Poor Teyla, she was doing just fine until Ronon started "helping". :D