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Fifth Time's the Charm by Morena Donn (Amnesty 2008, Five Things Challenge)

Jan 02, 2009 09:25

Title: Fifth Times the Charm
Author: morena_donn
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: McKay/Sheppard (with mention of canon het)
Word count: 2,100
Authors Note / Summary / Spoilers: An exploration of several onscreen kisses from Seasons 1 and 2 - plus one that happened off screen.

Thanks to brindel for the quickie beta
( Fifth Time's the Charm )

author: morena_donn, amnesty 2008, challenge: five things

Comments 10

tzzzz January 2 2009, 20:45:02 UTC

This was really cute! Thanks for writing.

morena_donn January 2 2009, 21:40:02 UTC

Thanks for commenting! Glad you enjoyed it.

wolfdreaming January 2 2009, 20:59:45 UTC

Her graceful acceptance just went to prove what he’d always suspected, that she was out of his league.

That was the best summary ever of the kiss between John and Teyla... the look on Teyla's face after she accepts his apology!! Its one of the reasons that particular ship doesn't work for me.

Really enjoyed this!

morena_donn January 2 2009, 21:51:35 UTC

What a great comment. Thank you so much.

I think she played it perfectly. Not freaked out, or angry, but also not interested. I think she views John as a (rather annoying) little brother...

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morena_donn January 3 2009, 05:22:54 UTC

That's what I get for posting in a hurry. It was beta'd, but only once, and we usually send them back and forth several times. I think I have it cleaned up now.

Thanks for the constructive criticism.

beachlass January 3 2009, 16:30:10 UTC

Oh man, Lorne. *dies*

morena_donn January 3 2009, 19:01:16 UTC

I just had to give him a cameo - and of course, he'd be totally supportive, but not above scaring John a little, first.

Thanks for commenting.

sarahthebloody January 4 2009, 06:10:51 UTC

Sweet! I like fics containing hot kisses. Though I usually prefer them all to be McShep, this was really nice. Good job! :)

morena_donn January 4 2009, 18:05:31 UTC

Thanks! Glad you liked it. I was really pleased with how that last kiss turned out.

And sorry about ambushing you with non McShep. To me, 'pairing' implies relationship, so I didn't think to mention the others in my heading, but I know some people don't like to read anything else, even in passing. Fixed now.

sarahthebloody January 5 2009, 14:15:27 UTC

I didn't think of it as an ambush. I liked the whole thing because they sort of 'work' up until they kiss each other. It was very nice :D