Comments | sga_flashfic: Habeas Corpus, by Sophonisba [missing persons challenge]

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Habeas Corpus, by Sophonisba [missing persons challenge]

Jan 15, 2007 22:37

-title- Habeas Corpus
-author- Sophonisba (saphanibaal)
-warnings- Gen. Creepy. Tag for "Conversion"; spoilers for that and for "Instinct." While this takes place in the same continuity as "Chuang Chou menq tye," I don't think it materially affects the plot.
-characters- Rodney, Teyla, Ronon, Sheppard, Elizabeth, Carson
-disclaimer- This completely isn't mine ( Read more... )

challenge: missing persons, author: saphanibaal

Comments 8

mercurydraconix January 16 2007, 05:24:49 UTC

is there more of this? it's very cute.

saphanibaal January 19 2007, 04:39:09 UTC

*bemused* "Cute" wasn't precisely the effect I had in mind...

and while I do intend someday to write the answer to the question they were left with, this isn't the challenge for it.

mercurydraconix January 19 2007, 18:32:51 UTC

well, y'know, not so much "cute" overall... but moments like this?

"A little," Sheppard said, tongue once more a healthy red behind the blue-black lips. "Bits and pieces all out of order... did I climb the wall?"

"Yes," Teyla told him.

"My previous commander probably wasn't groveling in front of me, though."

"Not that we noticed, no," Ronon agreed.

were *definitely* cute.

ceitie January 16 2007, 20:15:05 UTC

You know Teyla and John are being pretty awkward with each other when even Rodney notices. *g* Creepy dream, and what happened to Ellia?

saphanibaal January 19 2007, 16:18:40 UTC

//Creepy dream,//

Oh, good. That's sort of what I was trying for. ^_^

//and what happened to Ellia?//

Well, that's sort of the point of the story -- they don't know, and it's unsettling.

anonymous January 19 2007, 10:08:05 UTC

Hm. My immediate thought is "It's a Boo--" Which makes me laugh, but I don't think that was the effect you were going for.

saphanibaal January 19 2007, 16:25:43 UTC

Well, yes -- oh, drat, one of the lines got left out when I was pasting this in.

/me goes off and fixes it

I meant that to be an example of how John's still not completely tracking all the time -- Teyla was telling him a story when he fell asleep, and the next time he woke up his recollection of the story was all mixed up with his memory of a certain poem, although he doesn't quite realize it -- but without her "huh?" it isn't very apparent.

OTOH, it's also meant to draw a parallel with Ellia (or her body) having softly and suddenly vanished away, with no more closure than the poem ever gave.

rassatar February 18 2010, 03:18:32 UTC

What is the poem you were referencing? I didn't recognize it, but then I'm notoriously bad at catching references.

And it is cute: in that John is getting better and everything is going back to normal and all that's left is a few bad dreams and some lingering awkwardness between John and Teyla but they're *trying* and the team is all fine except for the dream ... on second thought that's creepy as *hell*.

Where did Ellia go???