Have you ever?, by kuonji (NC-17) [Virgin challenge]

[kuonji14]

Title: Have you ever?
Author: kuonji
Fandom: Stargate Atlantis
Pairings: Sheppard/McKay
Rating: NC-17
Challenge: Virgin challenge
Spoilers: slight for The Storm
Summary: "Sorry about getting, um, emotional back there."  Rodney is standing in John's doorway, looking bed-rumpled and shy.  It's three hours past midnight, Atlantis time, and John can't sleep

Comments

[hotspur18]

Actually, I like the rambling style, if that's what you want to call it :-) it makes the whole story very much more McKay-centric even though it's John's POV. And I truly love the way they know each other's childhood/past stories so well that we're only getting little glimpses of what happened in McKay's past (that John already knows all about) and are left to work most of the details out for ourselves.

Also, you know - hot *nods* very, very hot. And fingerpainting *grins*.

Plus you hit one of my favourite buttons - the friendship between them is the most important thing, no matter what else happens, and - yes. *happy sigh*

Thanks for this!

:-) xx

[kuonji14]

holy wow, in the time that it took me to proofread and make three edits, you wrote a long, thoughtful, kind, and helpful comment. Go, you!

dracostella liked the fingerpainting too, so I emphasized that. (thanks, draco!) I'll take credit for the insomnia positions and the shared stories, yay! And I'm glad you like the rambling style, even if it was unintentional. ;)

[rl4sb4eva]

Beautiful!
I love the description of Rodney tasting like paperback novels, very, well, Rodney!
And the last line is just lovely.
Rl
x x x

[kuonji14]

Thank you! I've always liked the smell of books, and Rodney struck me as the sort of sedantary, knowledeable, hot-off-the-presses guy who might taste like one.

[buddleia]

That was really nice. I liked the Aliens-made-them-pick-an-option thing, and the symbols. Your descriptions work really well.

[kuonji14]

Thanks for the kind comment!

[fairestcat]

I was nervous about where you were going with this, but I'm really glad I kept reading.

You do a great job here of articulating Rodney's fear and uncertainty and then the story behind it without ever becoming cliched or over-angsty. And I love that the heart of this story is the friendship between John and Rodney, the closeness and the concern they have for one another.

This line: "He thinks that there are worse things than choosing your best friend for life." is what absolutely makes this story for me.

Nicely done.

[kuonji14]

I always have to weed out the sap and triteness from my first drafts; glad it worked okay for you. And I really do enjoy the friendship between them; if I ever had to choose friendship or slash, I'd choose the former.

That particular line when I wrote it, it seemed like almost an obvious thing to me, since I was immersed in the story and my own interpretation of 'McShep'. I'm glad lots of people liked it.

Just curious: Where did you fear I was going? ;)

Thanks for writing!

[spacedmonkey]

Love it.

[kuonji14]

Thanks ^_^