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kbk March 16 2006, 04:55:42 UTC
ooooh. with... and the... and even the section titles are great, and there's so much going on between the scenes, and behind them as well, and, christ, I was angry at Sheppard, and... eee.

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mousewitchy March 16 2006, 17:48:35 UTC
*bounces* Thank you! I'm so glad it worked for you!

so much going on between the scenes, and behind them as well, and, christ, I was angry at Sheppard

Oh man, I'm glad that came across. It was tough--*I* knew everyone thought he was dead, and that John was all heartbroken and grieving in the background, and it was *really hard* to write Rodney learning to hate them.

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ladycat777 March 16 2006, 04:58:01 UTC
Oh, man. This was absolutely incredible.

Er, sorry I can't be more coherent but ... yeah. Incredible.

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mousewitchy March 16 2006, 17:49:50 UTC
Hee! That's okay!

Thank you very much for commenting, I'm glad it worked for you!

(Also, I love that icon. Where did you find it?)

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ladycat777 March 16 2006, 17:51:48 UTC
Check out user "wav" -- s/he's got a lot of fab icons :)

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amothea March 16 2006, 05:15:50 UTC
lovely story, I really feel for Rodney.

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mousewitchy March 16 2006, 17:50:49 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that it worked for you.

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kalikahuntress March 16 2006, 05:24:55 UTC
This is a lovely story, and Rodney's pain and fear was very real here. I really liked the part where he was dissecting every interaction he had with people he trusted, trying to make sense of why they left him because it seems like such a logical thing to do in such a situation.

And I loved your portrayal of Sheppard here as well,in the hands of a writer who isn't careful in how every character is portrayed, Sheppard could of come off as unlikeable, but I felt just as much for him in the end.

Also, I'm a huge fan of your OC characters, I just reread Down to You, and I could see why Rodney trusted Jonah and he came off as very sympathetic as well.

Excellent story, this is a keeper:)

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mousewitchy March 16 2006, 18:15:24 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad it worked for you.

And especially glad that Sheppard and Jonah both came out to be sympathetic characters. I was worried about that--Rodney's POV didn't exactly lend itself to showing how Sheppard and the rest had grieved when they thought Rodney was dead. And Jonah would have been far too easy to villianize.

*dances*

Also, I'm a huge fan of your OC characters, I just reread Down to You, and I could see why Rodney trusted Jonah and he came off as very sympathetic as well.

Hee! Thank you!

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mousewitchy March 16 2006, 18:18:00 UTC
eeeeee! I'm glad it worked for you. Thanks for letting me know! ;)

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