Another short ficlet for my bingo prompts. This one is for the Wonder square. An experiment in 2nd-person POV, from Torment of Tantalus. ~380 words, rated G.
One tiny correction: yo hoped for the opportunity "you" rather than "yo"
Is this the first time you've written in second person? I don't remember you doing it before. Was it hard?
I particularly like the juxtaposition of Ernest with Sha're and Skaara; I can't remember if that was there explicitly in the episode, but it's certainly a connection that Daniel would make.
Thanks for pointing out the typo. It's always appreciated. :)
Yes, this is my first attempt at 2nd-person POV. I don't think I care for it much. Still, it's worth trying at least once, eh?
The ep doesn't specifically bring up Sha're or Skaara, but this is Daniel's headspace, and even if he got a little sidetracked with the secrets of the universe :) I still believe he'd think of them, too.
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yo hoped for the opportunity
"you" rather than "yo"
Is this the first time you've written in second person? I don't remember you doing it before. Was it hard?
I particularly like the juxtaposition of Ernest with Sha're and Skaara; I can't remember if that was there explicitly in the episode, but it's certainly a connection that Daniel would make.
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Yes, this is my first attempt at 2nd-person POV. I don't think I care for it much. Still, it's worth trying at least once, eh?
The ep doesn't specifically bring up Sha're or Skaara, but this is Daniel's headspace, and even if he got a little sidetracked with the secrets of the universe :) I still believe he'd think of them, too.
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