sg_betty made the following request for the
Fall Fandom Free-For-All: The aftermath of a failed mission. Any season. They can still be in harm's way, on a ship, or back at the SGC. She also once quoted this line of dialogue for Teal'c: "The Tau'ri spoke too much of their defeats, and not enough of their victories." She said she'd like to use it in a fanfic
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forcing them to acknowledge that you don't write off your victories when you lose a battle, even spectacularly
Yes, well, that's all down to your lovely Teal'c quote, isn't it? Once I had the prompt and the line, I just had to put them together! :)
I do think Jack's method of poking Daniel for reaction is a good one, actually, even if it's sometimes the equivalent of cauterizing a wound. But yes, it is very much Teal'c to relentlessly present logic until Daniel has to concede it.
I don't think there will be a sequel, no. :) But if I ever do a remix of my own fic (are such things done, I wonder?) I would like to write the actual mission, not just the aftermath. If it didn't hurt too much.
Thanks, Betty!
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Wow, this one hurts.
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I love Teal'c and Daniel's friendship. It makes even less sense than Jack and Daniel's!
It hurts indeed, but I hope in a good way. :) Thanks!
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Everything does not always turn out well in the end. Some days you get the bear and some days the bear gets you. This was wonderfully done. I can't say enough about it.
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I'm not saying it was fun to write about failure like this (I personally prefer happy endings!), but I'm proud of how it came out and I'm really glad you liked it.
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And this bit:
"Jack heard the hiss of fury, saw that first shift of weight, and clamped his hand down hard on Daniel's wounded shoulder. He ignored the stifled gasp of pain and tightened his grip for good measure. Daniel was a little too good at darting out into danger when someone needed protection, but it wouldn't help now -- it would only cause more deaths."
With the echo then at then end of Jack's hand on Daniel's good shoulder. So Jack to use gestures and touch, not words. And to let Teal'c use the words. And nice bits for Sam to build the bridge, to be unhappy with the situation, but still be doing as ordered. So much heartache, and yet some hope that they're all hanging onto.
Great teamy goodness!
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And I'm glad you liked that last little addition! I did very much want it to be a parallel between Jack's gesture at the very beginning and at the very ending, too. Thanks for picking up on that. :)
I do wish I could've fit more Sam in this, but I'm pretty happy with how she worked out in the few scenes she does have. Letting Teal'c use words - ha! Pretty rare, I suppose, when the guy has such a fabulous turn of phrase on the few occasions he does get to speak in the show.
Jack has never been good at words, but he is good at "show, don't tell," isn't he?
Thanks again for your tremendous help here - it wouldn't be half as good without you.
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http://community.livejournal.com/stargateficrec/1415298.html
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I'm especially pleased that Daniel's struggle resonated with you - despite Jack's voice here, and the importance of his own reactions and frustrations, I do see Daniel as the focus.
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