Prompt 85.04

Nov 24, 2009 10:48

Five times John didn't see it coming.

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dithsun December 1 2009, 14:05:28 UTC
5. His ears didn’t pick up any sounds coming from Teyla’s angry and hissing lips, because all he could hear was Woolsey’s words relieving you of command, and all he could think was not enough time.

4. His mouth couldn’t stop grinning. He tried to get himself under control, but ended up grinning and smiling and one memorable time, giggling, making everyone attending that meeting watch him with confused expressions/glare. The glaring came from Rodney, of course. The bastard, John thought, grinning. The bastard with the too cute and adorable bed head that was too cute and adorable to not memorialise for life with a photo. Of course, it wouldn’t be seen outside of the team, but Rodney still wouldn’t stop glaring, and John couldn’t stop grinning ( ... )

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sidlj December 8 2009, 02:37:09 UTC
Oh, my word. What a splendid and horrible progression. I'll admit I was slow to realize (or really realize) these are in reverse order. Then it was WHAM. Oh, dear.

Woolsey's a rat bastard. *snarls*

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dithsun December 8 2009, 07:41:40 UTC
I usually go for the subtle approach when writing, sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. Woolsey was a real piece, but got better at the end. I guess this fic is in his 'bastardly' timeline.

"splendid and horrible" is quite the compliment! *grins*

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skieswideopen December 8 2009, 04:56:28 UTC
This is a really fascinating approach to the prompt.

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Five times John didn't see it coming sidlj December 7 2009, 18:45:30 UTC
1. When his friend Tommy’s twin sister grabbed him by the hand as he came out of the bathroom and pulled him away from the staircase and kissed him until he thought his head was going to explode. “You’re cute,” she giggled when she finally let him go. Backing down the hallway, still giggling, she blew him a final kiss.

Eleven-year-old John ran for the stairs.

2. “Shep, she was all over you!”

“Don’t be silly.”

“No, man, he’s right.”

“That’s ridiculous.”

“She was rubbing your back. Come on.”

“Cut it out, guys, would ya?”

“How could you not….”

“She’s my teacher“Yeah, and I bet there’s a few things she wants to teach you, all right ( ... )

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Re: Five times John didn't see it coming djaddict December 8 2009, 01:19:36 UTC
Love this!!!!! All five are great!

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Re: Five times John didn't see it coming sidlj December 8 2009, 01:53:33 UTC
YAY! Thank you! :-)

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Re: Five times John didn't see it coming sugarsbadhabit December 8 2009, 01:41:52 UTC
What a fantastic progression! #2 struck me somehow, though I can't actually put my finger on it. And of course I like #5. Really delightful :)

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